Sotto Poet Poet Rhyme

When Ash Remembers Flame

Written: May 20, 2025, for contest Sponsored by: Karen Jones
Inspired from Prince Song: When Doves Fly
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I slipped the mirror mournful cry,
Where silhouettes lick the silvery sky.
There is no name or voice left to claim—
There was just airless slate and a flame.
 
 A corroded sun starts to drown,
 Its crown is a ring of ash and sound.
 I donned my wreckage as a hymn,
 Stillness buried the spirit within.

Celestial bodies discard where I've bled,
But roots remember every word I said.
I attempted to heal what mercy had torn,
With hollow hands—unclothed and forlorn. 

The breeze once sighed, "I could rise,"
 But each move was imbued with lies.
 I hooked my terror to phantom gates,
 I spotted it glitter, and now it waits.
 
I am unable to contain what life remains,
 Each flicker is exhausted to yearn again.
 So I inspire the twilight to bend—,
 Allow me flames and reach an end.
 
 If light emerges, avoid letting it blaze—
 Allow it to fall softly in darkened haze.
 Not involving a savior's dazzling flame,
 Yet anguish interacts through my name.

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Rowena Velasco July 27, 2025 at 8:02 PM This poem’s got such a moody, intense vibe—really pulls you into that feeling of struggle and longing. Love how the imagery is so vivid and raw, like a journey through darkness looking for a soft kind of light.

Krishnanand Guptar June 19, 2025 at 12:09 PM Heartiest congratulations dear poet on your win in Karen`s poetry contest with as usual a masterly poem with flowing rhythm, fitting rhymes and a choosy diction. " I hooked my terror to phantom gates, I spotted it glitter, and now it waits." So lovely. Wishing you a cheerful day.

Karen Jones June 19, 2025 at 3:10 AM Sotto your work is always exceptional and again you wrote a masterpiece! I can’t pick a favorite line as all deserve praise! I admire your talent and envy your ability to write in various styles using that great vocabulary of yours! Thanks for supporting my contest and congratulations on your win! Karen Jones June 19, 2025 at 7:02 AM You are so welcome dear Sotto! Sotto Poet June 19, 2025 at 6:46 AM Karen, Thanks for hosting such wonderful contests and for my incredible placement in your contest.

CayCay Godwin May 22, 2025 at 2:50 PM Perfect poem of beautiful feel. CayCay

Paige Hind May 21, 2025 at 4:51 PM Powerful- your work always astonishes me, truly

Anne-Lise Andresen May 21, 2025 at 7:49 AM - Sensitivity and beauty come through powerfully in this wonderful poem, Las :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Arthur Vaso May 21, 2025 at 4:20 AM You always write such beautiful soothing poetry!

Ink Empress May 21, 2025 at 1:26 AM A very deep and heartfelt poem this is, i still need to listen to this song, and i must say youv delivered one as always with your hypnotic rhymes and in such creative cadence! I especially love the lines “ But roots remember every word I said. I attempted to heal what mercy had” that speaks volumes of emotions and truth that many can resonate with and can be interpreted in so many ways! “ Each flicker is exhausted to yearn again. So I inspire the twilight to bend—, Allow me flames” soulful! Youv woven so many emotions in this write! Pleasure reading your poem today! Sending you light always. Yes iv not been around much. Sometimes life gets in the way and i need a moment to breathe away from also unkind light. Thank you for being always kind