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When a Minute Seems Like Eternity

as the fog of day lifts memories break through remembrance of your pale face almost matching that gray gown your wore haphazardly the rasp of your voice as you struggled to speak through gasps the countless seconds that seemed eternal between each beat of your dying heart the rise and fall of your chest in the last few draws of breath then the stillness of death.... October 1, 2019

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Date: 10/18/2019 7:07:00 PM
I came back with congrats on your win. You deserved to be on that list, that's for sure. Hope all is well with you.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/19/2019 8:27:00 AM
Thank you so much Andrea.... :) hugs
Date: 10/9/2019 10:21:00 AM
I'm glad this poem was rewarded in the contest, a truly sad but factual write of the last moments of life, sorry you had to experience this, I never would want to see this, especially a loved one...unforgettable!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/9/2019 10:26:00 AM
it was the hardest moment in my life, to watch someone fade... thank you John :) hugs
Date: 10/9/2019 9:09:00 AM
here to say congrats on your placement in the contest my friend. I loved your poem.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/9/2019 9:27:00 AM
Thank you my friend.... hugs :)
Date: 10/7/2019 4:00:00 PM
I am happy to see that someone -- you! --- didn't write the name of the contest into the poem. (I didn't either, although I got an N/A). Very well-done, Sandra. Congrats on your placement in Line's contest. Take care, Gershon
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/7/2019 7:10:00 PM
Thank you Gershon...were we supposed to write the name in it? i haven't been reading the guidelines close enough, some i have penned whole poems for and then realized they were supposed to rhyme or something...hugs
Date: 10/7/2019 3:09:00 PM
Congratulations on your Honorable Mention, my friend :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/7/2019 7:08:00 PM
thank you my friend .... hugs :)
Date: 10/3/2019 12:23:00 AM
This is dramatic writing and quite gripping, to me a top shelf write, Sandra. I love that you turned your face towards me completely, it's a great picture (are we the only pic noticers?) LOVE your penning - felt the reality stitches of ink ... CayCay
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/3/2019 9:22:00 AM
Thank you CayCay...watching someone take their last breath is something not easily forgotten....i remember every second...I think we are the only pic noticers my friend :) always love you visits... hugs :)
Date: 10/1/2019 3:01:00 PM
wow, so amazing the way you describe those last moments. This is for sure a winner. A very touching poem, sandy
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/1/2019 6:27:00 PM
Thank you Andrea...i have watched 2 people die in my lifetime, take those last breaths, one went calmly one not so easily...regardless, it's something you never forget... hugs
Date: 10/1/2019 2:45:00 PM
A touching depiction true to real life..loss of a loved one always a tremble in memories..I see and feel the hurt in your write, Sandy.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/1/2019 6:25:00 PM
Thank you Vijay...watching someone die is something you can't unsee...it's always there... hugs
Date: 10/1/2019 12:48:00 PM
Gorgeous as always my dear!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/1/2019 6:25:00 PM
Thank you my friend :)
Date: 10/1/2019 11:17:00 AM
A sad but accurate depiction. A top finisher, I'm sure...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/1/2019 11:19:00 AM
thank you HT...it appears you have watched this event happen too...not something a mind can ever forget... hugs
Date: 10/1/2019 11:10:00 AM
Sad, truly sad, deeply felt emotions crawl through this sorrow filled poem. It's hard to explain the beauty I find in these words, maybe it is the memories and knowing that someday only the good times will be remembered, but like usual, it is the beauty your words carry whether sad or happy. Beautifully done my friend.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/1/2019 11:17:00 AM
thank you my friend, i truly value all the support you give my poems and your kind words you leave on them...to watch someone die is something i can never forget...i can remember everything from that day, the words spoken her last goodbye, the people there... hugs!

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