Daniel Turner Poet Pantoum

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This is my first attempt at a pantoum. Feel free to criticize. It's the best way to learn. I hope it's right:)

What Will Tomorrow Bring

Tomorrow brings the blue bird's song
Hand painted clouds at sunrise
Hummingbirds humming over red bee balm
Bumblebees buzzing with butterflies

Hand painted clouds at sunrise
That very first smile of the day
Bumblebees buzzing with butterflies
Laughing at work and at play

That very first smile of the day
My lungs filled with fresh morning air
Laughing at work and at play
A moment for silent prayer

My lungs filled with fresh morning air
Hummingbirds humming over red bee balm
A moment for silent prayer
Tomorrow brings the blue bird's song



   June 12 2017
  by Daniel Turner

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Carole Duet August 3, 2017 at 12:00 AM Very lovely, Danny. This poem has so many things I love in it.

Alfred Berggren July 7, 2017 at 12:22 PM Very nice poem with an outstanding spirit of optimism. Keep up the good work.

Sharon Gulley July 7, 2017 at 10:04 AM Congratulations Daniel on your win, a lovely and well written poem. : ) So full of life. Daniel Turner July 7, 2017 at 10:22 AM Thank you, Sharon. It was fun to write. I must practice more:)

Eve Roper July 4, 2017 at 8:58 PM Congratulations on your win, Daniel, thank you for entering my contest ~* Daniel Turner July 7, 2017 at 10:21 AM Thank you, Mrs Eve. Oh well, at least I tried:) Thank you for letting me experiment in your contest:)

John Lawless July 4, 2017 at 8:47 AM ...Soft, mellow, smooth read....well blended, unobtrusive repetition. We should all wake this way....great first at bat Daniel.... Daniel Turner July 7, 2017 at 10:20 AM Thank you, John. I appreciate your kind words of support:)

Jeremy Smith June 29, 2017 at 6:16 PM This is great Daniel! Good luck to you in the contest :) Daniel Turner July 7, 2017 at 10:20 AM Thank you, Jeremy:)

Carole Duet June 16, 2017 at 9:45 PM This is beautiful, Danny. I just love it...and another fav for me! Daniel Turner June 17, 2017 at 9:59 AM Thank you, Carole:) I appreciate your kindness and support.

Sara Kendrick June 15, 2017 at 1:25 PM Enjoyed reading your work..Your final stanza turned out well so you did good with the work..I can't remember the rules on this form always have to look it up when I want to write one but it seems that you did it like you were suppose to do it..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 5:25 PM Thank you, Mrs Sara. Is it getting hot over there yet? The heat index was over 100 here today. Air so thick I can hardly breathe. Take care and stay cool:)

Winged Warrior June 15, 2017 at 9:13 AM You're getting too soft bud...maybe you should get on your old rig and drive a bit lol...kidding!!!...excellent Pantoum...god bless my friend...^WW^ Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 5:24 PM Thank you, Wingman. We all gotta start somewhere:)

Maria Williams June 15, 2017 at 8:02 AM This is so beautiful Daniel, the fresh smell of the morning and the hand painted clouds fill my smell and sight. I have never seen humming birds and would so love to see them. May the sound of the blue birds be with you...Beautiful and a Fav...Maria Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 8:25 AM Thank you, Maria. I appreciate your kindness:)

Lisa Ricci June 15, 2017 at 5:47 AM Hello Daniel. Good Morning. This is lovely with marvelous imagery. May the blue bird song forever be there for one and all to see and to hear. Wonderful poetic work entirely. Have a good morning and day. Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 8:25 AM Thank you, Lisa. I appreciate your friendly visits:)

Alfred Berggren June 14, 2017 at 6:04 PM What a wonderful Pantoum. I love it! Your skill is so great. Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 8:24 AM Thank you, Alfred. i appreciate your kindness:)

Sunita U.D Palawon June 14, 2017 at 11:56 AM Such beautiful imagery...indeed an exquisite painting of words. :) Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 8:24 AM Thank you Sunita. I appreciate your kindness:)

Joanna Daniel June 14, 2017 at 5:54 AM This is an amazing positive feeling pantoum, DT:) I like the colourful picture it paints:) Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 8:23 AM Thank you, Jo. So glad you liked it:)

Charlie Smith June 13, 2017 at 9:45 PM Can't stand the form! Tried one and won a contest, go figure, you effort looks to be spot on DT, best wishes... . Daniel Turner June 15, 2017 at 8:23 AM Thank you, Charlie. I appreciate your kindness:)

Akkina Downing June 13, 2017 at 8:20 PM I know not of this form but I think you did just fantabulous my dear Danny :) Akkina Downing June 13, 2017 at 8:37 PM It's called Fluke, I was told. I do enjoy going fishing even though I get seasick... Lol! Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 8:31 PM Is that a whitefish? Thank you Kina. looks as if you have been reading The Old Man and The Sea:)

John Hamilton June 13, 2017 at 6:02 PM I've tried Pantoums before, and could never get it right, this is a testimony to your talent Danny! Great imagery and flow, even lyrical with the repeated lines, will do well in the contest, but then, what do I know! lol Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 6:12 PM Thank you, John. It was a lot of fun. i enjoy learning new things...sometimes:)

Nette Onclaud June 13, 2017 at 1:24 PM i feel the hope of a wonderful tomorrow through your engaging poem, daniel... very good one!..huggs Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 6:11 PM Thank you, nette. Hopefully, I can do better next time. i appreciate your kindness:)

Elizabeth Kinch June 13, 2017 at 1:19 PM Have never attempted this form before but this is so inspiring I may have to try one myself. Flows beautifully with great imagery. Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 6:11 PM Thank you, Elizabeth. It took me over a year to get up the courage to try one and put it out here for all to see. i appreciate your kindness:)

Supraja Kannan June 13, 2017 at 11:45 AM This is so beautiful Daniel... Lovely imagery and great flow... I haven't tried this form yet... You did a great job... Reads like a winner... Thanks for sharing.... Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 6:10 PM Thank you, Supraja. You are so sweet. hoping you are well:)

Bette Bavington June 13, 2017 at 11:17 AM The pantoum is awesome. It is a very serene and calm makes for a wonderful day. Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 6:08 PM Thank you, Mrs Bette. i appreciate your kindness:)

Tim Smith June 13, 2017 at 8:19 AM The rythmn and flow are great my friend...you did the form proud Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 8:24 AM Thanks Tim. It was quite a leap for me. I'm one of those people who likes to stay in my comfort zone. I appreciate your kindness:)

Joseph May June 13, 2017 at 7:52 AM Ahh..the sweet melody of the blue bird...Beautiful write Daniel Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 8:22 AM Thank you, Joseph. I appreciate your kindness:)

Paul Callus June 13, 2017 at 7:43 AM I believe I haven't tackled a Pantoum yet, Danny, so I am at a loss re syllable count (if there is a rule about it). Otherwise, the poem itself is a delight to read...the images outstanding...the serene feeling most welcome, and the repetition works well. ~ Regards // paul Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 8:21 AM Paul, I read about them before trying to write one. I have yet to find anything regarding syllable count. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and comment. Have a great day/week:)

Wilma Neels June 13, 2017 at 7:02 AM Daniel this is a beautiful write. Loved the flow of it as well. Have a fabulous week ahead :) Daniel Turner June 13, 2017 at 8:20 AM Thank you, Mrs Wilma. I've always loved the form just never had the courage to write one before. I appreciate your kindness and your feedback. i hope your week is a good one, as well:)

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