What If

see naughty serpent tempting Adam with citrus, hissing, ‘Oranges.’

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/29/2011 11:32:00 PM

A different one this was. Congrats on your win with a unique entry!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/29/2011 12:00:00 AM

delightful, jack.. many congrats! :) huggs

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 5/28/2011 8:55:00 PM

Good one Jack...makes one think! lol.. Congrats on yor win. BG

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/28/2011 8:51:00 PM

Congrats Jack on your HM in Carol's contest.. another beauty luv.. enjoy...

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/28/2011 4:20:00 PM

My Congratulations on the win in the contest of Carol, jack

Kash Poet

Date: 5/28/2011 11:33:00 AM

Witty write.Congrats jack on your win....

John Freeman

Date: 5/28/2011 6:58:00 AM

Jack, Congratulations on your success in Carol's Contest. Agape, Moses

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/28/2011 6:02:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in my contest Jack. I thank you so much for supporting my contest. Love, Carol

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/21/2011 5:22:00 PM

Oh, now don't go ruining oranges all over the world just so it will help this amazing creative work...leave my precious oranges out of it! ha ha. What a sun-kissed twist!! Enjoyed and so will the judges! (I mean the ones down at the county jail! ha ha ha). Great Biblical theme. Gwendolen

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/21/2011 1:07:00 PM

Sorry to hear about the "splat" on your shoe, Jack. LOL And now I'm again trying to imagine what a cross between a seagull and an eagle would look like. Would it be a scavenger waiting by the sea? Should it be called a seagle? Possibilities are endless! Love, Carolyn

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/21/2011 11:13:00 AM

Jack, very interesting.... good luck in the contest... and very clever,..p.d.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/21/2011 8:22:00 AM

hahahaha.I would have been tempted by neither that orange OR the apple. (but if it had been pizza? hmmmmm)

Sarah Seraphin

Date: 5/21/2011 3:18:00 AM

* “I Know But * What's That Green Spot??? * Jack??? * Smile * Just Teasing Sweeetie * Back In Your Tree * Smile * Dear John Does This Unto Myself With His Idiotic Yet Wonderful Sense of Humour Sometimes * Sooo Blame Him. * Smile * Wonderful Poem * Sincerely Yours * Sarah” *

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/20/2011 6:06:00 PM

Interesting write..Of course the "Bible" doesn't say what fruit but just the fruit from the tree of knowledge of good and evil(which could be metaphoric)..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Sarah Seraphin
Date: 5/21/2011 3:10:00 AM

* “I Know * It Could Have Been Banana??? * Nice Observation * Beautiful Sara.” *

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/20/2011 5:32:00 PM

hahahah funny and intellectual thought with nice images, jack hissing oranges hahaha.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/20/2011 4:14:00 PM

Instead of the King James version of the Bible, we now have the Jack Horne version. LOL I am trying to imagine Nessie tempting Adam with an orange. Great entry for Carol's contest and, of course, I wish you success. Just loved that photo of the Mayflower Steps. We leave for the fishing trip May 28th -- next weekend, so you'll have to put up with me for another week. Love, Carolyn