What Feeds the Cold

Barren fields of November
Corn stalks ragged
        broken soldiers
        bleak beauty
        stripped of green
Beige bones on autumn's carpet

Margins of daylight that disappear
        blending frost to the pinched ground
Corrosive wind like a wet slide of mourning
       seamlessly folded into what
                            the landscape feels

Crows circle in their swoops of survival
         seeking the scarce sweet zones of
         lost kernels
Momentum to snatch scraps, bits of decay
         in field rows that crack like smiles

Under a moody sky, gravestone gray
         sparked by the cawing of crows 
         that scrubs us clean
         in the exit wounds of autumn.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Ashley Avatar
October 28, 2022 at 6:45 AM
Dear Brian, I am enraptured by your creative and stunning artistry! Your exquisite metaphors and similes take my breath away. "Corn stalks ragged / broken soldiers" and "Beige bones on autumn's carpet" Wow! Such mournful yet vividly beautiful images that enthrall and move my heart's imagination. I especially adore "in field rows that crack like smiles" and your last line "the exit wounds of autumn" such a powerful grand finale to an extraordinary piece! You capture the demise of the fields and the dry crackle of the cold lean season with stark images that are rich with atmospheric and emotional resonance. You are one of my favorite poets here and one of the best poets on this site. Your astonishing and impressive imagery wins me over every time and I treasure your poetic finesse ever so much. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan P.S. a fav!!
Sambourne Avatar
October 28, 2022 at 5:55 PM
Dearest Susan, I can't thank you enough for your most encouraging, supportive words. Your uplifting words give my pen + motivation a much needed push after a string of NA's. Your kindness is truly extraordinary. My appreciation seems like shallow light when juxtaposed with your truly gracious appraisal. Sincerest regards always. Brian
Toney Avatar
October 13, 2022 at 7:51 PM
Brian, your word choice and creative use of metaphors and similes are very thought-provoking. This is a Fav poem for me. Congratulations on your win on Mile 16 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 17 has already started.
Sambourne Avatar
October 13, 2022 at 9:05 PM
Thank you, Mark, for the recognition. Gratifyingly, the creeping cold of November inspired the write. Best wishes, Brian
Fowler Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 5:39 AM
Beautifully penned Brian. I'm glad to have begun reading your work. :) Linda
Sambourne Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 7:36 AM
Hello Linda, Thanks very much for your kind words. I appreciate your time + effort in reading my work. Best wishes, Brian
Raiser Avatar
December 17, 2020 at 6:56 PM
So expressive, very well written.
Sambourne Avatar
December 17, 2020 at 7:29 PM
Thank you Belden. I am happy to have discovered your fine work + look forward to reading your new submissions. Hope all is well with you. Brian
Kendrick Avatar
November 18, 2020 at 4:53 AM
Expressive and emotive work. I like the flow as well. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Sambourne Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 2:51 PM
Hi Sara Your comments are most appreciated. Be well. Brian
Kendrick Avatar
October 31, 2020 at 5:57 AM
Very expressive and descriptive winning work. Congrats. Way to go. I enjoyed reading this one today. Sara
Sambourne Avatar
October 31, 2020 at 8:14 AM
Thank you Sara. Cluttered fields of broken corn stalks with crows above encouraged the write. Best wishes Brian
One Avatar
October 30, 2020 at 3:40 AM
I cold feel the coldness in your poem..
Sambourne Avatar
October 30, 2020 at 2:28 PM
Greetings Thank you for responding to my submissions. I have a low profile on Poetry Soup, so comments are always appreciated. Stay warm. All the best, Brian
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace