Weep

Sorrow is the word of the walk around The more you tread, it heaps abound. You curve your lips to mend the world And everyone around is a story unfurled. You listen, rapt with attention For you have to know the flow to dam the river. You find a way to reach subjugation Weild the soothing hand to their tremor. Every whisper, every sob, every desperate shout; You condone every cry. Futile it may seem, you're full of doubt, But never do you cease to try. And then comes the point festered. You want to be the sheep Tired of tending akin a shepherd Just sit down alone and weep.

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/27/2018 7:35:00 AM

A pleasure to read this one again.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/14/2017 8:09:00 AM

What an impressive first poem. A very belated welcome to the soup.

Mayur Choudhari
Date: 4/14/2017 8:23:00 AM

Thanks Richard! This means the world to me coming from someone whose poems I've followed and loved for a while. Again, Doors is one poem very close to my heart. Thank you for that wonderful write.

Skat A

Date: 9/15/2016 11:27:00 PM

MAYUR, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT

Rahul Kilje

Date: 9/13/2016 9:35:00 PM

Great poem Mayur. Lot of emotion. Keep them coming. Eagerly waiting for next.

Mayur Choudhari
Date: 9/14/2016 2:09:00 AM

Thank You Rahul. Thanks for the appreciation. It is encouraging.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/13/2016 3:38:00 PM

Mayur,,Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Manmath Dalei

Date: 9/12/2016 9:02:00 PM

Welcome to Poerty Soup. Good entry with a nice poem. Hope u will enjoy PS very much. Keep on writing..........//:) with love

Mayur Choudhari
Date: 9/14/2016 2:07:00 AM

Thank you very much for the warm welcome. This is a great learning experience for me.

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 9/12/2016 6:28:00 PM

Your poem is so emotional. It has some lovely lines. I was personally moved by "Wield the soothing hand to their tremor." You have handled this subject with great sensitivity. Obviously, you have felt this way yourself. Hopefully, you are not shouldering "the point festered" by yourself. A truly sad piece. Welcome to soup. We hope you share more of your poetry with us. Cyndi

Mayur Choudhari
Date: 9/12/2016 8:33:00 PM

A heartfelt thanks Cyndi for those words of encouragement. I was very apprehensive about posting here and your words certainly give me great pleasure and confidence. Thank you.