Rob Carmack Poet Quatrain

Notes About The Poem

Want to thank Julia Ward for inspiring this poem.  She came up with the watery sun theme and invited me to a write a poem.  

Watery Sun

As summer’s hope dreamt it had caught him,
days tallied boardwalk planks one by one.
Candles became golden skies burned dim
beyond evening’s watery sun.

How I tried to help you with my friend,
but she had built a sandcastle there.
Only time and advice left to lend
on a beach came that one morning’s glare.

Another wound to scar that bled youth,
ran over before it had begun.
By the grains of chance and a tanned truth,
tides washed another watery sun.


11.25.15

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Husna Chikwela August 16, 2022 at 5:49 AM Waoh

Funom Makama January 25, 2016 at 11:39 AM Beautifully woven words as well prepared seeds for a perfect germination on any reading mind. An awesome 7 dearest poet

Eileen Manassian December 27, 2015 at 4:17 PM Love the imagery in that first stanza...especially the second line. How creative. I lack in this aspect. I can't quiet seem to get the ability to create word pictures....I see congrats are in order for this one. :) Thanks for the visit today. I did appreciate it so much. Hugs

Eve Roper December 19, 2015 at 1:15 PM Congratulations , Rob , on a great win!

Skat A December 15, 2015 at 11:29 PM ROB, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**

Julia Ward December 15, 2015 at 1:09 AM Well done on your win, Rob... // To other Soupers. Having suggested the title to Rob, I also wrote my version of "Watery Sun" on 11/25/2015. Please check it out.

Susan Gentry December 15, 2015 at 12:12 AM Well written. 'ran over before it had begun'... Congratulations!

Andrea Dietrich December 14, 2015 at 6:55 PM So glad to see you high on the winner list of a superb judge like Charlotte. Frankly, I can't even recall if I entered this one. If I did, I sure did not get anywhere. hahaha. BIG congrats, my friend.

Paul Callus December 14, 2015 at 3:41 PM A lovely and creative poem that needed an extra read to fully digest. #7 Congrats on your fine win. // paul Rob Carmack December 14, 2015 at 3:54 PM Thank you Paul.

Barbara Gorelick December 14, 2015 at 2:27 PM Congrats Rob, enjoyed the read. Glad it placed so well. Bg Rob Carmack December 14, 2015 at 3:55 PM Me too Barbara, thank you for reading and commenting.

Charlotte Puddifoot December 14, 2015 at 10:53 AM well, you're not a new name to me, but i think a new name on my winners' lists! this is very well written; tidy, accomplished write - i particularly like "a tanned truth" - congrats on your win in my contest! Rob Carmack December 14, 2015 at 3:53 PM Thank you Charlotte for my my placement and for commenting.

Balveen Cheema December 14, 2015 at 10:52 AM Well titled and symbolic, Rob! Congrats! Julia Ward December 15, 2015 at 1:11 AM I gave the title to Rob, Balveen. See Rob's Notes above the poem. Rob Carmack December 14, 2015 at 3:55 PM Thanks Balveen.

Andrea Dietrich December 3, 2015 at 3:27 PM Lots of great symbolism here, Rob. I love that image Watery Sun. It really sets the tone for this kind of write.

Viv Wigley November 26, 2015 at 9:16 PM Great write, love it. That second line's a belter. All in all, terrific. Regards, Viv

Julia Ward November 25, 2015 at 2:20 PM A wonderful poem, Rob. Hugs, Julia Rob Carmack December 14, 2015 at 3:56 PM Thanks again for inspiring this one, took me back to that one morning many years ago.