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In a cobalt sky, Embellished with pallid clouds: Leaden geese fly home. · Migration arrow, Sadly fades before my sight: Recoiling farewells. · The smell of old rain, A pale past dwells in my soul: Cycles of my life. ______________ For Brian's Intervals Contest

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Date: 10/4/2009 9:08:00 PM
Raul - excellent haiku series - May I offer a belated congratulation on placing in Brian’s contest, God Bless, mj
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Date: 10/2/2009 8:26:00 AM
Raul, congratulations on your first win. This contest was indeed a very challenging one, and you have made it to the top! A very inspiring Choka with a very vivid imagery of a Nature, which surrrounds us with its beauty and capturates us. Your poem is well-penned and deserves this honor! I wish you success in your future writing endeavors. Thanks for the comments on my poetry. May God bless you and give you more inspiration. Warmest regards, Andrew.
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Date: 9/30/2009 12:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your second place win! I read this a couple of times and chimed in on the sadness of loss and changing of the seasons in this.
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Date: 9/30/2009 9:48:00 AM
Raul..where do you keep all your trophies? I am so proud of you...this is so lovely..there are some absolutely beautiful phrases in this poem. Lots of love, conrats on your fine win. BG
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Date: 9/30/2009 8:59:00 AM
Wonderful use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on your well deserved second place in Brian's contest. Enjoy your honor! Keep up the good writing. Karen
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Date: 9/30/2009 7:26:00 AM
Such a soul searching, introspective and beautiful poem, Raul!! Love this one!! Congratulations on your wonderful win in Brian's contest....great work!! ~ Love, Carrie
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Date: 9/30/2009 6:13:00 AM
Awesome! Dear Raul. congratulations on your 2nd place2 win in Brian's contest. so well deserved. Love, Lainie
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Date: 9/30/2009 3:29:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest Raul. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/30/2009 12:59:00 AM
Congrats on you success in my contest Raul.Rgds Brian My latest contest Five&Twenty is now open
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Date: 9/16/2009 8:56:00 PM
really love it! Raul!...jim
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Date: 9/16/2009 11:48:00 AM
I love how the title and the text play within each other. The use of color in your imagery proves superlative, Raul! Warm regards, John.
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Date: 9/16/2009 9:53:00 AM
Such vivid description with little content.... I like the words used to paint this image..... Excellent Raul........:JP]
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Date: 9/16/2009 5:10:00 AM
Another great one, Raul. You are my Haiku, choka, and senryu hero. You words are always have great aesthetically poetic value. Thanks for your writes. Lovingly, Dane
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Date: 9/16/2009 1:20:00 AM
Good one, Raul. Love Lainie
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Date: 9/15/2009 11:40:00 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest Raul.Rgds Brian
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Date: 9/15/2009 8:03:00 AM
Oh yes...I love the beginning.....I can wait to see what follows! (Embellished with pallid clouds....Leaden geese..... wonderful descriptions!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Date: 9/15/2009 7:01:00 AM
Typo,..sorry,..............."gentle" ! *smiles*,..again, great poem ! james
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Date: 9/15/2009 7:00:00 AM
Awesome how you painted my screen Raul ! Very gentke work ! Love it ! james
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Date: 9/15/2009 6:12:00 AM
nicely done, good luck in the contest
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Date: 9/15/2009 5:02:00 AM
Beautiful work, Raul! Brilliant images and a winning start to this very interesting contest of Brians! I look forward to watching it evolve! Good luck, my friend! Love, Robin
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Date: 9/15/2009 4:43:00 AM
Interesting coloring and geese. Sara
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Date: 9/15/2009 3:00:00 AM
This is a winner my friend-in pure blue color you ve created this heaven of art..excellent Raul--Charma
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