Watercolor Painting

In a cobalt sky, Embellished with pallid clouds: Leaden geese fly home. · Migration arrow, Sadly fades before my sight: Recoiling farewells. · The smell of old rain, A pale past dwells in my soul: Cycles of my life. ______________ For Brian's Intervals Contest
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Jordan Avatar
October 4, 2009 at 9:08 PM
Raul - excellent haiku series - May I offer a belated congratulation on placing in Brian’s contest, God Bless, mj
Crisci Avatar
October 2, 2009 at 8:26 AM
Raul, congratulations on your first win. This contest was indeed a very challenging one, and you have made it to the top! A very inspiring Choka with a very vivid imagery of a Nature, which surrrounds us with its beauty and capturates us. Your poem is well-penned and deserves this honor! I wish you success in your future writing endeavors. Thanks for the comments on my poetry. May God bless you and give you more inspiration. Warmest regards, Andrew.
Augustus Avatar
September 30, 2009 at 12:55 PM
Congratulations on your second place win! I read this a couple of times and chimed in on the sadness of loss and changing of the seasons in this.
Gorelick Avatar
September 30, 2009 at 9:48 AM
Raul..where do you keep all your trophies? I am so proud of you...this is so lovely..there are some absolutely beautiful phrases in this poem. Lots of love, conrats on your fine win. BG
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September 30, 2009 at 8:59 AM
Wonderful use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on your well deserved second place in Brian's contest. Enjoy your honor! Keep up the good writing. Karen
Richards Avatar
September 30, 2009 at 7:26 AM
Such a soul searching, introspective and beautiful poem, Raul!! Love this one!! Congratulations on your wonderful win in Brian's contest....great work!! ~ Love, Carrie
George   Avatar
September 30, 2009 at 6:13 AM
Awesome! Dear Raul. congratulations on your 2nd place2 win in Brian's contest. so well deserved. Love, Lainie
Brown Avatar
September 30, 2009 at 3:29 AM
Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest Raul. Love, Carol
Strand Avatar
September 30, 2009 at 12:59 AM
Congrats on you success in my contest Raul.Rgds Brian My latest contest Five&Twenty is now open
Goff Avatar
September 16, 2009 at 8:56 PM
really love it! Raul!...jim
Weber Avatar
September 16, 2009 at 11:48 AM
I love how the title and the text play within each other. The use of color in your imagery proves superlative, Raul! Warm regards, John.
Pickett Avatar
September 16, 2009 at 9:53 AM
Such vivid description with little content.... I like the words used to paint this image..... Excellent Raul........:JP]
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
September 16, 2009 at 5:10 AM
Another great one, Raul. You are my Haiku, choka, and senryu hero. You words are always have great aesthetically poetic value. Thanks for your writes. Lovingly, Dane
George   Avatar
September 16, 2009 at 1:20 AM
Good one, Raul. Love Lainie
Strand Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 11:40 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest Raul.Rgds Brian
Richards Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 8:03 AM
Oh yes...I love the beginning.....I can wait to see what follows! (Embellished with pallid clouds....Leaden geese..... wonderful descriptions!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Peranteau Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 7:01 AM
Typo,..sorry,..............."gentle" ! *smiles*,..again, great poem ! james
Peranteau Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 7:00 AM
Awesome how you painted my screen Raul ! Very gentke work ! Love it ! james
Culverhouse Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 6:12 AM
nicely done, good luck in the contest
Gass Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 5:02 AM
Beautiful work, Raul! Brilliant images and a winning start to this very interesting contest of Brians! I look forward to watching it evolve! Good luck, my friend! Love, Robin
Kendrick Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 4:43 AM
Interesting coloring and geese. Sara
Chircop Avatar
September 15, 2009 at 3:00 AM
This is a winner my friend-in pure blue color you ve created this heaven of art..excellent Raul--Charma
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