Water Shed

My time 
   drips away
       in little frets
          of cares
               streaming
                 hard passes
                         of rocks
                     Finally a mighty cataract
                        time erodes everything
                              the
                                   river bends
                                      no more
                                         its flow
                                           through
                                             silent leas
                                               I am old
I cannot change my course again
My heart wants to rage like a river
                Till my banks are broken
                         And love gushes out
                              Like water bringing
                                    Life to frightened
                                         Plains and farms
                                            Flowing forcefully
                                                  Into the tender 
                                                     Arms of a sensuous sea
            Where there are no barriers to passion and my eternity
                        I have dug at for years, the mountain left behind
                            And could not blame the salt of tears, I am blind
                                 Still, this rage
                                    Is all that rattles still the cage
                                       Of sand through which I wove my passage.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 4/13/2009 7:02:00 AM
Lovely entry, and a great poem to land in the winning circle of Debbie's contest! ~Congratulations! ~ Carrie
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Date: 4/13/2009 5:42:00 AM
Wow, so sorry I missed this excellent write! Warmest congrats on your well deserved win in Debbie's contest! Love, Shar
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Date: 4/12/2009 12:02:00 PM
Congrats in placing in Deborah's contest, nice structure, Happy Easter...Raul
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Date: 4/9/2009 1:02:00 PM
Astonishing write here, David. You've captured my battle with aging perfectly ... smile ... I envy those who pass gracefully ... If I haven't already said it, welcome to PoetrySoup and thank you for bringing wonderful writing like this to the best site in town ...
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Date: 4/5/2009 4:49:00 PM
Most excellent verse GREAT entry for the 5 Elements/5 senses contest (all 5 of each are not needed) You have used Water, Earth of the senses you have used Sound, sight, touch Light & Love
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Date: 4/2/2009 10:14:00 PM
Love the meter, the message and the creative layout, David! Great work!
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Date: 4/2/2009 2:13:00 PM
Excellent structure, nice work...Raul
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Date: 3/31/2009 10:55:00 AM
this was a super piece love the flow
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Date: 3/30/2009 9:11:00 PM
This is brilliant, David! The personification s excellent and the form is stunning! I thought of the Grand Canyon being carved out with the force of your words, as I read. Excelent piece! Thank you for your toughtful conmment! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/30/2009 12:06:00 PM
Well, my new and dear friend David! First, this was a very sincere, honest and soulfully passionate write~the types of writes which I truly admire and love! Straight from the treasures of the deep I would say!:) But I would also say~Life is never over, until it is over! And everyday, brings the offering of a brand new cleansing and beginning!?:) My Love To You & Yours Always, John!:) Have A Very Beautiful Day!:)
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Date: 3/30/2009 8:03:00 AM
Hello David... terrific poetry my friend... and a careful chosen construction... great writing ! Thank you so much for your comment
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Date: 3/30/2009 6:40:00 AM
Hi David I just love this! Oh so beautiful.A visionary embrace that tugs at your heartstrings. I agree with Krissy I love that line too! A winner for sure. Also the way you creatively layed out this poem was very clever!Take care hun. Many blessings to you and yours. Thanks for your most welcome comments on my latest lyric. Love Light Truth Patricia PS
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Date: 3/30/2009 5:01:00 AM
well constructed dude. Nice context to talk about. Check on my qritings too
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Date: 3/30/2009 4:20:00 AM
This is a very good piece...love the personification...thanks for the comments.
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Date: 3/30/2009 3:59:00 AM
water lives!! very original! great poetry! Jim
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