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June 1, 2025


 

p u l s e s diastolic systolic fluid rhythm tides e l a s t i c memories water and salt mix on the edge of ebb plovers chasing stretchy waves tight-fisted oysters hoarding pearls winds blowing our laughter this way that way two kites flirtin’ in a sea of clouds silver-tongues with spindrift speech exhale sea songs a t-h-r-u-m in seashell ears I watch riptides inhale my pebbles from the shore… nothing long-lost leaves nothing longed for cyan dancers grow wild and white maned their crimes their confessions s w a s h across expanse of sands surging I recall our cupid kites tUmBLinG in the flow wet sands now a rosy twilight mirror ancient temple of sages pensive confessors with silence-filled voices just beyond and amid the t h r o b s . . .

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Date: 6/9/2025 9:01:00 PM
What a lovely seascape you've painted here, Susan. I think it's a strong contender (although I admit I don't really understand the requirements for that contest). Good luck
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Date: 6/11/2025 10:23:00 AM
Dear Vanya, thank you for your gracious visit and beautiful thoughts about my poem. I think this form is challenging and I'm not sure if I achieved my goal in conforming to what Suzette wants/expects.. but we'll see how it shakes out. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/4/2025 11:02:00 AM
Your poetry always astound me. It's a level I cannot reach. Are you a painter? I can visualise the plovers flying, the oysters down in the sea, and the two kites flirting, and cyan dancers wildly. Such excellent imagery. Magnificent.
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Date: 6/8/2025 11:11:00 AM
Dear Victor, wonderful poet friend, I revel in your beautiful response to my poem. Yes, I used to paint (in oils and watercolors mostly) when I was younger. I went to college for fine arts. But now, I so much prefer to write poetry. For me, it's more gratifying. Thank you for sharing in the imageries and emotions of this poem with me. I'm humbled and I'm especially glad to know you enjoyed it! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/3/2025 8:10:00 AM
I'm in awe of your poetry, dear poet, dear friend, but this form I'm not a fan of, yet you still made it beautiful...Frederic
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Date: 6/8/2025 11:07:00 AM
Frederic, dear friend, dear poet, thank you for sharing in the imageries and emotions of this piece with me. Your words humble and inspire me. I think this form is challenging and I'm not sure if I achieved my goal in conforming to what Suzette wants/expects.. but we'll see. Nonetheless it was a wonderful learning experience :) Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/2/2025 7:46:00 AM
Such a magical write my dear poet friend Susan. You're an amazing poet my dear and I will fave this masterpiece of yours. I agree with Paige. A winner for sure. Thanks for sharing us your superb talent and for being one of my inspirations. God bless you always and your poetry. Hugs
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Date: 6/8/2025 11:02:00 AM
Dear Len, your poetic presence is magical as your words lift my heart and soul to beyond the clouds. I am both humbled and honored by your thoughts. Thank you for sharing in the imageries and emotions of this piece with me. Warmest wishes and hugs, my sweet poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 6/1/2025 7:03:00 PM
A sure winner- I love how the opening and ending lines seem to compliment each other...hearts constricting and contracting... to the "piece" of the sea, your placement of words is excellent
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Date: 6/8/2025 11:00:00 AM
Dear Paige, I revel in the uplifting power of your words. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me and for your confidence in this piece :) Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 6/1/2025 1:56:00 PM
Flying kites on the shore, watching them crash in the sea. Sounds like a blast. My first memory of the ocean (Maine) was swallowing seawater and puking all night. Sigh. Thankfully I've had better times since. Awesome take on the water theme Suze
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Date: 6/6/2025 7:50:00 AM
Dear Tom, what an awful first memory of the ocean! I'm glad to know that you've had better experiences since then :) The ocean and shoreline are endlessly inspiring to me, fortunately I live on the Mass coast, so my muse is only mere moments away but the ocean is in my heart and soul as well. Thank you for your wonderful comments! Warmest wishes.. ~Suze
Date: 6/1/2025 1:40:00 PM
What a special write with fabulous imagery. Thanks for your visit.
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Date: 6/6/2025 7:45:00 AM
Dear Richard, thank you for your visit and kind words. I'm glad your found my imagery to be "fabulous"! Very inspiring, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 6/1/2025 11:30:00 AM
This is a breathtaking piece, both in structure and sensation. The visual spacing alone pulls me in, it mimics waves, breath, pulse, and drift. There's a physicality to the form that beautifully mirrors the content: the ebb and flow, the elasticity of memory and water, the tidal rhythm of the body and the sea.. I love how you tie in bodily language (“diastolic / systolic”) to ocean tides—it bridges the internal human world with the external elemental one. ..
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Date: 6/6/2025 7:44:00 AM
Tom... haha! Gotta be a bit quicker, my friend :)
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Date: 6/6/2025 7:43:00 AM
Dear Silent One, I'm truly inspired by your thoughtful response to my poem. So glad to know you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imageries of this poem with me. Your wonderful presence here is surely appreciated. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/1/2025 1:53:00 PM
That's what I was gonna say. Dang!
Date: 6/1/2025 10:53:00 AM
What a creative/fun "Water" write you have here. Love It... "Good Luck" I wish you would write more. Have a fun day writing away..........
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Date: 6/1/2025 10:59:00 AM
Dear Paula, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for sharing in the imagery/emotion of this poem with me, and for your kind words. I wish I had the time to write more, my sweet friend, but family and work obligations take me away from my writing too often. Your gracious visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes, dear Paula.. ~Susan
Date: 6/1/2025 10:23:00 AM
Dear poetess, Ashley. Every time I read your poems, I am surprised at your abilities and expertise. In this poem, you explore the relationship between memory, nature, and the passage of time. You probed the fluidity of feelings and moods as well as the bond between human existence and the natural world. The ebb and flow of tides depicts life's rhythms, capturing moments of joy, nostalgia, and reflection. While memories fade, they are never truly lost; rather, they influence our present and future. Good luck with the contest, and this is a fave.
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Date: 6/1/2025 10:35:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, soulful poet, I revel in your wonderful and uplifting response to my poem. Your beautiful comments touch my heart and are savored with appreciation. Thank you for sharing in the imagery and emotion of this poem with me. I hope I was able to meet all the poetic goals for this contest. I am humbled and honored by your fave, thank you again, dear Lasaad. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan

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