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Waning Twilight

Written: March 09, 2024 For Charlotte Puddifoot Contest ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ with serendipitous moans—ocean lulls It's russet embers ignite her soul's quilled longings she flies to bloomy sky-scape last sigh of waning twilight chirpy mirth—katydid sounds waves of soft silk canzone to whispering crimson of ephemeral serenade waves of arid shadows— ebb in blurring haze of lingering longing besotted in spumy scatters sighing In epicede of hushed Elysian quiddity quixotic susurrus—shorebirds' sapidity horizon in cinereous ululation of Peacocks rainbows and sylphlike threnody my heart too, mirths... waiting for you to return to me—in spring renascent wings wings of crimson gold and plums of purples!

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Date: 3/11/2024 6:18:00 PM
Beautiful. Good luck with the contest!
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:37:00 AM
Love the joining of sunset theme and waiting for someone you are fond of. It’s a tender moment that brings a smile.
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Date: 3/10/2024 11:11:00 AM
Nice imagery and beauty in your poem.
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Date: 3/10/2024 8:29:00 AM
A lot of colour in your poem and an interesting way to format it... A lot of imagery in this one and a vast selection of poetic words that give it much depth.. Best of luck in the contest..
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Date: 3/10/2024 5:24:00 AM
What an exquisite piece of poem on the beauty of the waning twilight. Your wordsmithery cannot be evaluated. It is nonpareil. "waves of arid shadows— ebb in blurring haze of lingering longing besotted in spumy scatters sighing In epicede of hushed Elysian quiddity quixotic susurrus—shorebirds' sapidity"..... Wow.... I am short of words to comment on your art, my dear friend. Each day, you ascend higher to the mountain of poetic excellence!
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Date: 3/10/2024 12:18:00 AM
I don't suppose you intended for the reader to feel the light fading and the far off sound and sight of birds winging their way preparing for night ,did you ? I am sure all that just happened as I read it. Maybe you didn't intend for the reader to feel a serenity overcome them as they came to the end of your Waning Twilight..... But I have a feeling it was all very intentional by my friend who is a master of poetry. ..
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Date: 3/9/2024 9:56:00 PM
Very creative wordplay there dr sotto, i love how you’ve written about waning twilight in such an artistic manner. With exquisite imagery and flow of lines. I especially loved the lines “ Elysian quiddity quixotic susurrus—shorebirds' sapidity“ very unique diction that left me in awe! Inspired! Sumptuous! You have a vast vocabulary and poetic skills are on point as always! Pleasure reading this poetic gem! Well delivered, best wishes for the contest too, i loved it
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Date: 3/9/2024 5:58:00 PM
Dear Sotto, This is wonderful imagery and emotion, putting together the beauty of nature with the longing of the human heart. Each line is a brushstroke painting of serenity and longing, as the waning twilight casts its spell. Your words evoke a sense of melancholic beauty, capturing the ephemeral essence of life's transitions. This is a breathtaking journey through the realms of twilight and the depths of the soul. Excellent! - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 3/9/2024 4:25:00 PM
dearest Sotto--I loved the sights and sounds of the waning twilight that you created. Each line was captivating; the physical structure of your poem felt like I was observing the waning twilight. Twilight is a beautiful, soft time of day; and you captured it magnificently. I especially liked: quixotic susurrus—shorebirds' sapidity. Quixotic is one of my favorite words. I love the sound of it plus it's a valuable word when playing scrabble :-) Truly a masterpiece! your poetess friend, Sara
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Date: 3/9/2024 3:31:00 PM
Beautiful sights and sounds of twilight creatively delivered, my friend. Lovely word pairing enhance the beauty of your theme, Lasaad.
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