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Waning Twilight

Written: March 09, 2024 For Charlotte Puddifoot Contest

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with serendipitous moans—ocean lulls
                  It's russet embers
ignite her soul's             quilled longings

she flies to bloomy sky-scape
           last sigh        of waning twilight 

chirpy mirth—katydid sounds
                            waves of
                                   soft silk canzone

to whispering crimson
                         of ephemeral serenade

waves of arid shadows— ebb in
blurring haze            of lingering longing

besotted in spumy                scatters sighing

In epicede of hushed                Elysian quiddity
            quixotic susurrus—shorebirds' sapidity

horizon in cinereous             ululation of Peacocks
             rainbows and sylphlike threnody

my heart too, mirths...         waiting 
for you to return to me—in spring

renascent wings                  wings of crimson
              gold and plums of purples!

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Paige Hind

Date: 3/11/2024 6:18:00 PM

Beautiful. Good luck with the contest!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 3/11/2024 6:37:00 AM

Love the joining of sunset theme and waiting for someone you are fond of. It’s a tender moment that brings a smile.

Jay Narain

Date: 3/10/2024 11:11:00 AM

Nice imagery and beauty in your poem.

Silent One

Date: 3/10/2024 8:29:00 AM

A lot of colour in your poem and an interesting way to format it... A lot of imagery in this one and a vast selection of poetic words that give it much depth.. Best of luck in the contest..

Valsa George

Date: 3/10/2024 5:24:00 AM

What an exquisite piece of poem on the beauty of the waning twilight. Your wordsmithery cannot be evaluated. It is nonpareil. "waves of arid shadows— ebb in blurring haze of lingering longing besotted in spumy scatters sighing In epicede of hushed Elysian quiddity quixotic susurrus—shorebirds' sapidity"..... Wow.... I am short of words to comment on your art, my dear friend. Each day, you ascend higher to the mountain of poetic excellence!

Speaks Volumes

Date: 3/10/2024 12:18:00 AM

I don't suppose you intended for the reader to feel the light fading and the far off sound and sight of birds winging their way preparing for night ,did you ? I am sure all that just happened as I read it. Maybe you didn't intend for the reader to feel a serenity overcome them as they came to the end of your Waning Twilight..... But I have a feeling it was all very intentional by my friend who is a master of poetry. ..

Ink Empress

Date: 3/9/2024 9:56:00 PM

Very creative wordplay there dr sotto, i love how you’ve written about waning twilight in such an artistic manner. With exquisite imagery and flow of lines. I especially loved the lines “ Elysian quiddity quixotic susurrus—shorebirds' sapidity“ very unique diction that left me in awe! Inspired! Sumptuous! You have a vast vocabulary and poetic skills are on point as always! Pleasure reading this poetic gem! Well delivered, best wishes for the contest too, i loved it

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/9/2024 5:58:00 PM

Dear Sotto, This is wonderful imagery and emotion, putting together the beauty of nature with the longing of the human heart. Each line is a brushstroke painting of serenity and longing, as the waning twilight casts its spell. Your words evoke a sense of melancholic beauty, capturing the ephemeral essence of life's transitions. This is a breathtaking journey through the realms of twilight and the depths of the soul. Excellent! - Blessings, Daniel