Waning In a Labyrinth of Mourning Roses

When onyx skies bleed
rhinestones etched in regrets,
follow the silence;
Unsung sonatas
cradling watercolor spells
woven with magic—
from violet blaze, 
beneath mulberry gloaming,
where dark poets rhyme. 
But when summer rain
falls upon metal steel hearts
in cashmere cadence,
Listen to the breeze
swirling sunflower secrets
of forlorn fervor.
Amidst lavender
longings for pearlescent bliss
on glistening vines.
For even chained doves
think in dulcet runes that glow, 
drawing moonlit dusks
Whilst saffron sunsets 
with electric quills of faith
release healing ink. 
But can scribbles veil
fog of doubt, when astral signs 
mislead the naive? 
Is "trust" a lost star
waning in a labyrinth 
of mourning roses? 
and "hope" a myth of dreamers?

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Date: 1/7/2024 6:05:00 PM
Dear Empress, gifted poetess, your exquisite poem pulses with rich imagery, alliterations and textured metaphors like "cashmere cadence (assonance too..) "when summer rain falls upon metal steel hearts" and "chained doves think in dulcet runes that glow". Chained doves! Amazing! Your soulful artistry conquers the mundane with potent creativity and poetic force! Every verse a master stroke, my friend. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/4/2024 8:07:00 AM
WOW!!! I enjoyed reading this wonderful write. Your pen was working overtime on this one. Great last 4 lines. Glad Silent One did this. Have a wonderful day writing away........................
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Date: 1/3/2024 2:46:00 PM
Ink Empress, Another stunning gem from your illustrious canon. A golden stream of sparkling imagery interwoven with thoughtful reflections on the human odyssey. Sensitive treatment of complex emotions. Congratulations Howard
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/5/2024 12:12:00 AM
Awwn thank you so much im so grateful for your kindness and feedback truly will visit your page too soon
Date: 1/3/2024 12:20:00 PM
Did the judge think you were going to choke him with you choka? Oh i see I have not ever commented on this one.. not like me... hmmm.. well this is one of the best Choka I have read and dont remember writing one myself.. This wasn't really a contest, but an opportunity to showcase an Na poem..
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/5/2024 12:11:00 AM
This choka choked me lol. Well the judge is a simple poet and its my mistake getting too metaphorical. You cant speak in french to an american. And expect them to understand. She did say she didnt understand my poem. So its ok. But thank you for giving this opportunity for my choka to be read. Appreciate it
Date: 9/9/2023 3:15:00 PM
I really don't know what to say, other than I feel for your soul....don't ever stop writing!
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Date: 9/9/2023 7:31:00 AM
Hope is indeed a Myth of dreamers and the worst heart killer of all.Love this.
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Date: 9/7/2023 6:18:00 AM
Another fine gem my good friend. Your verses sing out to an old poet's heart. May we dreams dream only beautiful and gloriously happy dreams. A gem and a new fav for me. God bless you.
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/7/2023 6:50:00 AM
You are so kind my friend thank you so much
Date: 8/28/2023 11:33:00 PM
A gate genteel gem! have a nice time :)
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Date: 8/24/2023 3:01:00 PM
Descriptive and expressive work. I hope you have not lost trust for all of humanity but only trust in one person who has given you reason to do so. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 8/20/2023 7:03:00 PM
You are an 'empress' no doubt ! 'Lavender longings for pearlescent bliss','saffron sunsets with electric quills of faith releasing healing ink. " all these images are so striking and matchless ! Great penning dear friend !
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Date: 8/20/2023 4:35:00 PM
Is "trust" a lost star waning in a labyrinth of mourning roses? and "hope" a myth of dreamers? WOW! Splendid vocabulary weaving magic of poetry!!
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/20/2023 6:41:00 PM
She's the real deal Veej
Date: 8/20/2023 12:19:00 PM
Quite the tour de force of images end on end to a wonderful crescendo. Provocative piece, IE. :o)
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Date: 8/20/2023 12:01:00 PM
- The most beautiful flower can have a corrosive poison ... strength comes when one stands very weak ... a deep and beautiful poem, Ink - hugs
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Date: 8/20/2023 7:29:00 AM
Your writing is exquisitely crafted, demonstrating a masterful command of language. This profound piece captivates with its rich metaphors, offering a glimpse into introspection and evoking a sense of awe. The Choka poem itself is a work of art, intricately carved with depth and emotion that resonates deeply with the reader. Particularly striking is the thought-provoking conclusion, leaving a lasting impression and stirring the soul with its haunting beauty.
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Date: 8/19/2023 10:33:00 PM
A quite introspective, deep, magnificent and breathtakingly carved piece that took me on a journey from imagery to alliteration to metaphors and philosophical thoughts. How beautifully you've described, when everything fades in darkness, she'll yourself in silence, to let wisdom supervise your heart and healing guide your way.. Listen and observe.. As dark poets too yearn for light and "sunflower secrets". But that ending took a profound turn, when everything seems to mislead us, like a myth!
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/19/2023 10:38:00 PM
Oh my angelic Star you are the sweetest thank you soooo much for being amazing i appreciate you reading and leaving this heartfelt comment.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/19/2023 10:34:00 PM
A masterfully woven Choka my dear Ink, I'm in awe of the depth and evocative feelings that just stir the soul and sends chills, especially in the questioning crafted in the ending lines.. Just magnificent!
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