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December.23.2024
This or That. Vol.29. Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Edward Ibeh
~ Placced Second~

 

Trudging through thorny and rocky paths, His feet often got cracked and torn. Yet he persevered, for he had a lovely family. His dear one stood by his side as a pillar of support, Sharing the joys and hardships of life together. Gave their two sons the best education possible Seeing their success, as parents, they were proud, He had the joy of a victor who conquered Mount Everest. He saw constellations of stars twinkling, In his wife’s eye, each time their children, Ascended a new rung in the ladder of success. But how swift life changed and took a drastic turn His beloved’s sudden demise was too hard a blow, A bolt from the blue, oozing out all his life sap. His sons relocated to far off places for their work Eventually their connection ended up in a casual phone call They had no time for their father. Expectations darkened into anxiety, Anxiety into dread and dread into deep despair. He walked alone, like a phantom in the dark, Haunted by memories, unable to banish the grief. How he had wished to spread his wings And ride upon the wind like an eagle! But now he feels he is just a step away from hell. He has seen only defeats despite his best efforts From everywhere, reeks the foul smell of neglect. Life has taught him some bitter lessons; Love never lasts and hopes born may die swiftly Those we love may leave us cold and alone in darkness. Even the effulgence of the sun may die out one day. Afraid of his future and unsure of the present, Upon a tightrope of pressure, he now walks, Without a safety net below to hold him. If he looks down, he may surely fall, If he looks up, he may become dizzy He sees peril looming and darkness engulfing. Feeling a loner in a loveless island, he keeps sobbing. Injected with a paralytic, he helplessly awaits his fate He feels, how close to the edge he lives, Not knowing when he would lose his balance, And fall to the abysmal pit below. Before darkness closes in and suffocates him, He wishes to end his tightrope walk. Exactly at that moment of his final surrender, He heard somebody whisper from inside; “Fret not, fear not, walk the tightrope. The only option is to look straight ahead And try to reach the other side of safety” Was he in a trance? Was he asleep or is he awake? Is it the voice of his dear one insulating him with hope? Or are they the words of his Heavenly Father Who will abide with him and never ever forsake him!

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Date: 12/29/2024 11:03:00 PM
Dear Valsa, heartfelt congratulations on your high placement in the contest with a breath-catching poetic narrative. It seems you have been witness to the reality in the narrative. I much appreciated the penultimate stanza. Wish you and those dear to you a happy new year with the blessings of ffulfilling your dreams.
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Date: 12/29/2024 3:36:00 PM
Heartiest congratulations on your podium win in my contest with this beautifully composed powerful poem, Valsa. What a delight to read. Wishing you a Happy New Year!
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Date: 12/29/2024 10:17:00 AM
Hey Valsa, your poem poignantly explores the journey of a man who faces the harsh realities of life, from deep personal loss and feelings of abandonment to the intense despair that can arise from such circumstances. The rich, emotional narrative reflects both the highs of family pride and love, and the devastating lows of grief, loneliness, and the fear of the future.
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Date: 12/27/2024 10:11:00 PM
Life is never an easy journey to walk, yes tightrope it is and sometimes we need to hear those words “ He heard somebody whisper from inside; “Fret not, fear not, walk the tightrope. The only option is to look straight ahead And try to reach the other side of safety” couldnt have said it any better! You really have within you a poetic storyteller! You keep your readers really hooked from the very first line till the end! And this is no exception! I absolutely felt the emotions and everything youv delivered here is so soulfully moving and leaves a long lasting impression! Felt this so deeply! Sigh! Best wishes for the contest. Sending you light always
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Date: 12/24/2024 4:50:00 PM
so touching poem, seems like own experiences, merry Christmas poet enjoyed your moving poetry
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Date: 12/24/2024 10:02:00 AM
I love the ending. I believe God is calling him home. Great interpretation of the theme, Valsa
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Date: 12/24/2024 2:00:00 AM
Everyone feels sorrow occasionally. But I know well, dear Valsa. When you're down, you always have our Lord to help. Merry Christmas.
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Date: 12/23/2024 8:02:00 AM
“Fret not, fear not, walk the tightrope. The only option is to look straight ahead And try to reach the other side of safety” -- Wonderful positive message. Great poem! God and you are a majority. Never alone.
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Date: 12/23/2024 1:47:00 AM
Valsa this was written with much thought and sensitivity to a reality that some know and have walking the tightrope of internal grief and heartache. You have taken us through the mountains and valleys of life and its dealt cards. The ending I loved, because there is hope and there is God with you. Such a somber taste of the experiences of life with a magnificent ending. God bless you and Merry Christmas.
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Date: 12/22/2024 10:20:00 PM
Sometimes when you reach rock bottom you feel like you've been abandoned and are all alone, but never give up on hope because someone is watching over you ready to catch you if you fall. Best of luck in the contest Valsa and merry Christmas. Tom
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