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Vulture

Vulture 

Accusations take wing, like Vultures carcass cleans.
The guilty are ashamed, not satisfied with screams.
Enjoy the life you bought, with every hateful word.
Forgiveness is a choice, not something one deserves. 

(Alternate ending:
Forgiveness is too low, for dead- flesh eating birds. 

Which would you choose first or second ending?)

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Benjamin Bartley Date: 6/8/2024 5:09:00 PM I definitely like the alternative ending. It brings more meaning to the poem. Interesting approach. Login to Reply Crystol Woods Date: 6/9/2024 8:27:00 AM I love how there are such good reasons for each opinion! Ty for letting me know! Xo

Daniel Henry Rodgers Date: 6/8/2024 4:59:00 PM Dear Crystol, great little poem and I like the first ending because it rings true. - Blessings, my friend Daniel Login to Reply Crystol Woods Date: 6/9/2024 8:26:00 AM You're right, it does! I'm thinking one takes the high road while the other the low. Thanks for your two cents!! Xo

Tom Woody Date: 6/8/2024 5:41:00 AM Hey my poetic sis, I like the first ending. Btw, vultures bite! Login to Reply Crystol Woods Date: 6/8/2024 12:11:00 PM :) thanks for your recommendation...I honestly can't decide! Xo

Suzette Richards Date: 6/8/2024 5:38:00 AM An interesting take on Alexandrine, but I am more used to internal rhymes and iambic meter. Not a must but it gives Alexandrine it's distinctive rhythm. I prefer the first ending. Have a good weekend, Suzette :) Login to Reply Suzette Richards Date: 6/8/2024 9:54:00 PM PoetrySoup has a handy library of poetry forms - see Types of Poems. Also, their Dictionary comes in handy. I admire your spirit, Crystol :) I have sent you soup mail. Crystol Woods Date: 6/8/2024 12:13:00 PM Huh...I thought I did the research and followed the form but I'm new at this so I guess I could easily make mistakes! I'll look into it more and ty for letting me know! <3 And for your vote! You tooSuzette

Em Henderson Date: 6/7/2024 10:37:00 PM I quite like the alternate ending:) Login to Reply Crystol Woods Date: 6/8/2024 12:15:00 PM Yea? I do too but I just can't decide. I think they are the two sides of how I'd handle this...I can take the high road, or the lower road lol. Ty for your input!