Crystol Woods Poet Alexandrine

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Ugh... don't ask. :( <3

Vulture

Vulture 

Accusations take wing, like Vultures carcass cleans.
The guilty are ashamed, not satisfied with screams.
Enjoy the life you bought, with every hateful word.
Forgiveness is a choice, not something one deserves. 

(Alternate ending:
Forgiveness is too low, for dead- flesh eating birds. 

Which would you choose first or second ending?)

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Benjamin Bartley June 8, 2024 at 5:09 PM I definitely like the alternative ending. It brings more meaning to the poem. Interesting approach. Crystol Woods June 9, 2024 at 8:27 AM I love how there are such good reasons for each opinion! Ty for letting me know! Xo

Daniel Henry Rodgers June 8, 2024 at 4:59 PM Dear Crystol, great little poem and I like the first ending because it rings true. - Blessings, my friend Daniel Crystol Woods June 9, 2024 at 8:26 AM You're right, it does! I'm thinking one takes the high road while the other the low. Thanks for your two cents!! Xo

Suzette Richards June 8, 2024 at 5:38 AM An interesting take on Alexandrine, but I am more used to internal rhymes and iambic meter. Not a must but it gives Alexandrine it's distinctive rhythm. I prefer the first ending. Have a good weekend, Suzette :) Suzette Richards June 8, 2024 at 9:54 PM PoetrySoup has a handy library of poetry forms - see Types of Poems. Also, their Dictionary comes in handy. I admire your spirit, Crystol :) I have sent you soup mail. Crystol Woods June 8, 2024 at 12:13 PM Huh...I thought I did the research and followed the form but I'm new at this so I guess I could easily make mistakes! I'll look into it more and ty for letting me know! <3 And for your vote! You tooSuzette

Em Henderson June 7, 2024 at 10:37 PM I quite like the alternate ending:) Crystol Woods June 8, 2024 at 12:15 PM Yea? I do too but I just can't decide. I think they are the two sides of how I'd handle this...I can take the high road, or the lower road lol. Ty for your input!