Voyage De Promesse

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In space, I fail to mete my worth Whene'er I look back at my Earth I'd switch the honor of this berth To breathe the Autumn air ... A promised air, so crisp and rare! I think on those I've left behind The loved and valued of my kind Now traded for this hope to find One splendid, pristine land ... A promised land of teeming sand! I've spent my life on looking back The crooked passage of my track But now I'm brought a newer tack Across this star-flecked sea ... A promised sea, fair-winded, free! This great expanse of boundless suns Like lassies, though the fairest ones Oh, watch her as she cuts and runs The lance right thru your heart ... A promised heart, one bloody dart! What daring end will we thus meet What tender soils will sole our feet When this, our voyage, is complete And we have found a home ... A promised home to reap and roam ... And tell our wee ones ... of this tome?!? ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Completely Your Choice 11, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/27/2020 10:05:00 AM

this is so interesting, the language you use and the idea presented. What contest did it win? A big congrats to you, Greg.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/22/2020 6:54:00 AM

Congrats on your winning work. Sara

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/22/2020 4:51:00 AM

To me this is without any doubt brilliant and oustandingly golden poetry at it's very best my friend. I would fav this if I never ever fav another poem in my life. A true gem.,fav and a great find for me this morn. God bless..

John Watt

Date: 9/18/2020 10:31:00 PM

Vintage Greg, classic poetry, very enjoyable. Congrats!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 9/18/2020 8:25:00 PM

I loved the adventure, boundless roaming...congrats on your win. A wonderful piece.

Carol Mitra

Date: 9/18/2020 6:25:00 PM

Such an amazing poem....touching heartache of souls....Congrats on your win Gregory.

V. Deepa

Date: 9/17/2020 12:02:00 PM

The lance right thru your heart ... A promised heart, one bloody dart!~ Awe-inspiring..lines dear Gregory sir..Life is full of battles..Loved your rhyming Muse ..:-) Take care.Have a beautiful day.Warm regards:-)

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/17/2020 1:35:00 AM

Gregory, your divine inspiration is as always, stunning. Massive joy to read, to read aloud. The star Voyaging trek of heartache and toil told perfectly.