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For Constance La France's H form - Hybronett sonnet contest.

This is a Hybornett sonnet with a rhyme sceme of aaaaaaaaaaaaaa

10 syllables per line.

 

 

Voltaire's Balloon

“Life is thickly sown with thorns, and I know no other remedy than to pass quickly through them. The longer we dwell on our misfortunes, the greater is their power to harm us.” Voltaire In sapphire skies, so soft, serene and fair, a balloon floats adrift in tepid air. Nonchalant it hovers without a care. Over and under clouds like they're not there. It's mindful not to burn from the sun's glare. keeping clear from branches, so not to tear. At peace it seems, wandering unaware, until a storm forms to cause it despair. Gruesome gales force it to blow everywhere, grim rain has no mercy for its welfare. Breathless, it deflates into disrepair, plunging, it no longer looks debonair. The pursuit of life can become unfair, just like the thickly sown thorns of Voltaire.
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Crandall Avatar
October 14, 2024 at 10:41 AM
Nice language and imagery Silent One. It seems like bad things and good things just happen, but they are usually temporary.
La France Avatar
October 1, 2024 at 7:08 AM
Silent, congratulations on your win in my Hybronnet contest, beautifully penned, love the quote, Constance
Kendrick Avatar
September 21, 2024 at 9:16 AM
Back with congratulations on your winning work. I am delighted to see it on the winners' list. Way to go. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara
George Avatar
September 16, 2024 at 7:02 AM
Wow, the image of the balloon floating above clouds is so catching. It tried its level best not get torn by the sharp wind or cutting clouds. Unfortunately gruesome gales and grim rain spelt its doom . It got deflated and fell flat on to the ground. This highly metaphorical poem is the best hybronnet I have read so far. Congratulations Silent One on your well deserved top placement. Into my FAVE.
Proxenos Avatar
September 16, 2024 at 2:42 AM
But as you so rightly mention about Voltaire's quote above - 'Life is thickly sewn with thorns, and i know no other remedy than to pass quickly through them.' Some find their lot in life is so unfair, but the challenge of life one must understand affects each of us differently. Great write and logic - well penned dear friend - Blessings, Jennifer.
Leach Avatar
September 11, 2024 at 1:14 PM
Master in rhyme and imagery. Love the hybornett. Good luck in contest.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 3:11 PM
Love the quote. Lovely balloon float…carefree…the sad fate of the joyful balloon…your last lines tell the truth…life is hard. Some great writing, my friend!
Kendrick Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 2:12 PM
Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Creative lines describing that flight of the balloon. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
Dietrich Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 1:39 PM
it's always hard to do monorhymes with a significant number of words one needs to use. GREAT job with this one, Silent One
May Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 4:56 PM
Very nicely penned, Silent, GL in the Contest
Slaughter Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:29 AM
A very interesting format, S O, and an interesting topic. BOL in the contest.
Sidwell Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 9:08 AM
Wow, great use of rhyme and I really like the analogy mixed with quote. Well done!
DiMino Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 8:44 AM
Absolutely! The secret is, try not to make them stick. Don't become Velcro or a dartboard for defeat and slander. Great advice, Si. Well done. Best of luck in contest.
Rodgers Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 6:16 AM
Dear SO, I loved the rhymes and images in your well inked Hybronnet Sonnet. I also liked Voltaire's writings, and they are very stark and pointing. A great philosophical/psychological take on life. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Williams Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 4:14 AM
A Hybronett Sonnet, it sounds complicated but as always you tackled it with ease dear. It sounds wonderful, especially the last two lines sums up the pursuit of life and its ever present obstacles. Good luck in the contest...Hugs
Buhagiar Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 12:51 AM
Your monosyllable poem is fantastic. A great contender for the contest. Well done.
Empress Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 12:14 PM
Hi silent one, great use of voltaire, here to convey what you’ve wanted through such an intriguing analogy! One that some can be reminded of to try, despite their mental health illnesses that makes lines blurry and visions foggy! I like your use of alliterations rhymes throughout and also how youv written a very metaphorical poem that truly is inspiring and soul stirring! “ grim rain has no mercy for its welfare.” very true! “What i love the most about this poem is the transformation from peace and going with the flow without a worry until storms hit one mercilessly leaving one paralyzed! Quite inspiring too! I love the quote used and truly you have an enlightened soul. Life just like time is never fair, it is indeed unfair. Pleasure reading! Best wishes!
Hind Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 11:51 AM
Very interesting- it looked difficult to write, enjoyed reading it :)
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