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Visions In Fatima

Strewn with buds onto night’s refrain We followed the hovel of an outer-world, As rustling leaves formed a map’s cave Through a journey connecting reality; Where our twin- souls moved in silence. I felt your hands cuddling a bounty of flowers And we meet in Portugal third instance, Cleansing lost time in holy water. The procession of candles brushed the air quite sacred: white lilies unfurling petals into hundred lights on the shrine of admirable Fatima, while life crowned us again. We strolled with a monolith of statues Blessing our paths aligning our thoughts In the house of Mary, of transparent gods. But the vision turns into ripples; I’m by myself a lone pilgrim enclosed around a grotto Wishing he was here, feeling him like my breath. Long Distance Love Contest For Nicola Byrne Re-submitted 10/16/2016

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Date: 10/24/2016 6:53:00 AM
The tempo of emotions and imagery is just amazing!! Congrats Nette, for your placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Date: 6/2/2016 5:18:00 AM
Favorited... congrats Nette, i hope you don't mind.
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Date: 3/19/2016 12:54:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**
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Date: 3/16/2016 8:12:00 AM
An enchanting poem indeed. I felt as though I was part of the scene in the story. Congrats Nette, for your first placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/15/2016 9:32:00 AM
This had such a dreamlike, feathery quality to it, like fine lace. Twin flames are always entwined somehow. Definitely a 7. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/15/2016 7:30:00 AM
Hi Nette, Congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest. This is a beautiful work, it does touch the Soul so gently. A seven and a fave most definitely....Vlad.
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Date: 3/13/2016 8:51:00 PM
Excellent work, Nette. Your phrasing had me entranced liked "nights refrain" and "at the edge of twilight" ... enjoyed your less literal approach to the theme. Congrats on your top placement!
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Date: 3/13/2016 2:09:00 PM
Well done, congratulation Nette
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Date: 3/13/2016 12:30:00 PM
Nette, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
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Date: 3/13/2016 11:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your first placement of the contest Nette with this fine win.
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Date: 12/4/2015 5:10:00 AM
First, let us celebrate that I found it. (wait - I'm clapping and jumping.) I thought I might find something on spirituality or reincarnation, what I found is a belief in soulmates poetically and creatively revealed. I found the ending dramatic, because only then did I realize the soulmates were not together. Is this true? Have you met this soulmate? It took many decades to find the one that I 'felt.' This poem was well worth the time searching ... CayCay
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Date: 3/4/2014 4:13:00 PM
nice win Nette, SKAT
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Date: 3/3/2014 5:01:00 PM
Congratulations nette.another amazing beauty...wow
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Date: 3/1/2014 1:07:00 AM
wow, this is one of my favorites in this contest. Simply amazing how you put those words into this gem. Congrats, nette.
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Date: 2/28/2014 9:05:00 AM
Congrats Nette on the win . A brilliant one indeed.
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Date: 2/27/2014 1:22:00 PM
Nette another beautiful poem. A spiritual dreamscape you've laid out in your write. I so enjoyed this read today. Congratulations on youer fine win - Connie
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Date: 2/27/2014 11:39:00 AM
Ahh!! Great quality poetry!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 2/27/2014 10:23:00 AM
This would have rated no. 1 for me, up there with Criag's masterpiece. Well done Nette. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/27/2014 6:20:00 AM
Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the write on the Dreams, nette
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Date: 2/27/2014 3:35:00 AM
Beautifully done.
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Date: 2/27/2014 3:09:00 AM
congrats on placing Nette super write hugs
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Date: 2/22/2014 6:34:00 PM
Dear Nette: A lovely dreamscape: real in the ethereal! I sense a very spiritual retreat and inner ecstasy of soul. You weave words like magic. Leon
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Date: 2/21/2014 7:49:00 AM
Haunting and quite beautiful. A dreamy scene of romantic and spiritual love crowned with the longing left by reality.
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Date: 2/19/2014 10:35:00 PM
An incredible roller coaster & awakening within the believers' eyes. I expect nothing less from you. Splendid!
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Date: 2/19/2014 5:22:00 AM
Beautiful.
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