Visionary

Twin drops of sweat
perched on his brow
Salt mines
the butcher's
blood-soaked smock
reeking knife
poised...
feverish to finish
the lady's order
his tear-stained chop
wide of the mark

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/17/2020 5:22:00 AM

Wow! You could really chew on this for a while!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/17/2020 2:16:00 AM

I am reading it over and over; it somehow borders on Goth. There is something riveting, compelling and yet a teensy bit frightening.

Jenna Logan

Date: 7/16/2020 5:38:00 AM

That butcher is in serious need of a sweat band. I'd rather salt my own chops. How were these lines inspired, Gershon?

Gershon Wolf
Date: 7/16/2020 3:35:00 PM

Ha, ha! Great idea, about needing a sweat band... I guess the NBA and the ATP are the furthest things from my mind these days... As for 'inspiration:' Thirty+ years ago I worked in a kosher butcher shop on Sundays, thinking that maybe I'd take over the business from the owner, who was retiring. So, I've kind of 'been there.' Cheers, ~ Butch Wolf

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 7/15/2020 12:34:00 PM

Woah! I have not words, so many images, feelings, even smells coming to mind, but no words I can settle on. That’d be some spectacular poetry. xomo

Gershon Wolf
Date: 7/15/2020 8:50:00 PM

Gosh, sounds as if I've tickled someone's fancy here... Glad to be of some small service. Joy and Light, Gershon

John Watt

Date: 7/15/2020 1:12:00 AM

"Salt mines"! Quite a host of images here, Gershon. Nicely done, with the imagination filling in the blanks ~ John

Gershon Wolf
Date: 7/15/2020 8:49:00 PM

Takes imagination with the kind of imagery I concoct! lol. Seriously, thank you so much for all of your kind words, John! Happiness and Joy, Gershon