Darren White Poet Free verse

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Violin

Closing my eyes I can see you again
My whirligig, dancing as if on water
Not watching my fingers play
Bow loosely threaded like your dancing hair
Red reflected in the flames behind you
Colouring my eyes with warmth and longing

While my hands tire, my arms sink
My violin hits the ground I hear them say
Boy, play me some more, their faces
Grey and distorted while all I want to see
Is you, all I want is your husky voice
The rasp of your fresh beard on my skin

Walking to the dying fire, trampling ashes
Raising my arms and once more seeing
You, arms around me, dancing together
Your soft hum in my ear, while you hold my
Violin high, bowing for me, striking a chord
In my heart, forever in my heart

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April 26, 2017
Copyright © Darren White

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Gregory Richard Barden May 7, 2017 at 1:48 AM Exquisite - I must admit I found this on the forum page, but I wouldn't change a thing, so I had no true critique to give ... it is exquisite! Darren White May 7, 2017 at 2:00 AM Thanks Greg. Point is, I was only curious if anyone would ever go to that forum part and give the real critique I asked for. It just doesn't happen. The only place you get real critique is here, if you specifically ask for it. I did once, on the only haibun I ever wrote, and the result was delightful :)

James Inman April 27, 2017 at 10:41 PM A lovely heartfelt write Darren. Darren White April 27, 2017 at 11:58 PM Thank you James :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia April 27, 2017 at 8:58 AM Oh what a wonderful magical poem that shows us the power of the heart and the mind both animated by the strength of a loving bond whose music speaks through you. You are a magician Darren:) Amitiés Darren White April 27, 2017 at 9:09 AM Thank you! The power of imagination, love and heart indeed, thank you so much :)

Iris Blade April 27, 2017 at 8:48 AM Such poetic beauty, The picture came across perfectly and the imagery was amazing. You are very talented Darren. I always look forward to reading your poems. Darren White April 27, 2017 at 8:51 AM Thank you so much for such a wonderful compliment Iris, you made me happy :)

Sizwe Hlabisa April 27, 2017 at 6:41 AM What a beautiful poem, the violin is an instrument for our hearts indeed... really loved reading it Darren White April 27, 2017 at 7:54 AM It is, isn't it :) Thank you!

Maria Williams April 27, 2017 at 6:19 AM A heartfelt beautiful poem that sings to the heart Darren. Especially beautiful to me because it brought many a wonderful memory of the hauntingly emotional strains of a violin. Love this piece of yours.A super 7+++ Darren White April 27, 2017 at 6:28 AM I know we share love for the violin :) And yes, so emotional.... Thank you so much for the 7+++

White Wolf April 27, 2017 at 2:44 AM SO lovely this, Duir! Beauty on my page! Darren White April 27, 2017 at 2:48 AM Thanks Budgie, glad you like it :)

Darlene De Beaulieu April 26, 2017 at 6:46 PM Hello Darren White, I like the sound of the violin and other instruments,because I enjoy classical music. Darren White April 27, 2017 at 12:12 AM Hello Darlene, yes I enjoy classical music too, very much, and I used to play the violin. Thank you.

Akkina Downing April 26, 2017 at 5:41 PM Soft to my ear and tender to heart. Beautiful, Darren, I love it so :) Darren White April 27, 2017 at 12:11 AM Thank you so much Akkina :)

Tim Smith April 26, 2017 at 5:10 PM What a soft declaration of forever love...I adore the beauty of the violin Darren White April 27, 2017 at 12:11 AM I do too. I played the violin from age 2 to age 15-16, and I still love it. You know they have bthese teeeeeny violins for small kiddies? They're so cute :)

Lisa Ricci April 26, 2017 at 4:01 PM Dear Darren. I was so afraid to turn to this entry because of its meaning and worth. Hold it close and dear. You have reached the stars with expression and emotion. You are amazing. Have a wonderful night. Stay well please. Darren White April 27, 2017 at 12:09 AM It wasn't something to be afraid of after all, once you saw this, was it Lisa :) It is a soft sweet memory and I liked to share it here. Thank you my sweet friend.

Chris Green April 26, 2017 at 2:30 PM What a beautifully warm and seductive poem my friend. Even without the graphic the picture was easy to see and feel. I really liked this. You are quite talented Mr. Darren White. Darren White April 26, 2017 at 2:35 PM Coming from you, Mr. Chris Green, that is a huge compliment and you make me feel proud. Thank you :)