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Victor's March

The sun has now climbed to the Eastern hills Charioted in scintillating glory like a mighty king Shattering the mist with his lance like beams He exults like a victorious warrior His crystal rays rouse the sleeping birds And they begin their dulcet chorus without cords A Brian Strand 1094 Poetry Contest

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James Marshall Goff

Date: 3/23/2022 6:48:00 AM

Oh yes Valsa! Such rousing strength! Congrats!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 3/23/2022 2:29:00 AM

A great scene is painted in words. Beautifully written. Congratulations!

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/4/2022 7:05:00 AM

Valsa, I enjoyed your poem. You clearly illustrated the sun using your brilliantly evocative descriptive language!

Valsa George
Date: 2/7/2022 8:11:00 AM

Lasaad as ever, your comment is a boost to me. Thanks a lot !

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/3/2022 8:17:00 AM

Valsa, this is a great free verse poem--expressing a tribute to the sun through the use of vividly descriptive figures of speech! Janice

Valsa George
Date: 2/7/2022 8:10:00 AM

Thanks a lot Janice for your thoughtfulness to visit my page. Also for your lovely comment

Anil Deo

Date: 2/3/2022 5:37:00 AM

As a former Hindu, I loved looking east toward India, & greeting Surya Devata. Also doing Surya namaskar. Science proves our closes STAR IS A KING. Others stars are mightier, but too far to do us ( and dark space) much good. Pithy poem, as prayer

Valsa George
Date: 2/3/2022 8:02:00 AM

Yes, Surya Namaskar is one of the most effective yoga practices. Sun being closer to us is like a King, brilliant in glory ! Thanks for your evaluation of the poem. It is something amazing that from being a Hindu you have become so well versed in the Bible and the teachings of Jesus. Stay Blessed...

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/3/2022 5:28:00 AM

I suppose it is a pity I never see a sunrise. I am always late in waking up. Hugs.

Valsa George
Date: 2/3/2022 7:56:00 AM

Once in a while, try to wake up a little early to see the glory of a sunrise on a clear day.... ! Thanks a lot Victor..!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/2/2022 7:41:00 PM

Love the penultimate line, Valsa.... and btw, can you send that charioteered yellow ball my way to get me out of bed earlier in the a.m?! ~ Ex-Earlybird

Valsa George
Date: 2/3/2022 12:24:00 AM

Don't you know the dictum - 'Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise'..... So be an early bird :) Thanks a lot !

Debra L Brown

Date: 2/2/2022 2:27:00 PM

Enjoyed the poem. You painted the picture of the sun. I love the words "Crystal Rays." Blessings ~ Debra

Valsa George
Date: 2/3/2022 12:21:00 AM

Debra.... very sweet of you. Thanks a lot dear friend !

Sam Kauffman

Date: 2/2/2022 11:12:00 AM

Such an exquisite picture of a "crystal" morning Valsa. Your poetic expression is as crisp and fresh as the new morning. Best wishes for the contest. Blessings!

Valsa George
Date: 2/3/2022 12:20:00 AM

Much encouraged by your lovely comment ! Thanks a lot dear Sam !