Freddie Robinson Jr. Poet Free verse

Vermilion Repose - Ten Words, Ten Lines Challenge

Apartment perched in a ghetto menagerie of hateful mockingbirds
Safety code bribery has uncaged my anger recluse, 
which now morally infuse me with pellucid fearlessness
Seeing street labor children sniffing nerve-numbing plastic bag criminality
Ill frangipani odor of middle bun dope runner hands,
concocting poisonous fumes of meth and crack that twilight ripples
from the upper floor inside an un-sanitized laboratory kitchen
Glam luscious not is this poverty ancestral view — 
funeral parading cars of junkie tricks and police prostitutes
And my rose heart wilts on the window sill in a vase vermilion repose 


Contest: Ten Words, Ten Lines Challenge
Sponsor: Silent One
Date Submitted: 1-10-18

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Charlie Smith January 12, 2018 at 8:40 AM Wow! great take on the contest Freddie, congratulations. I'm not surprised at it's high finish...

James Inman January 12, 2018 at 12:34 AM A dark and unique interpretation of the ten words Freddie. A well written expose on the reality of many inner city lives.

Susan Ashley January 11, 2018 at 7:18 PM A dark, intriguing and gritty poem, Freddie, beautifully expressed with your powerful pen. Congratulations for your well deserved win with this fantastic write. ~Susan

Judith S January 11, 2018 at 7:12 PM Back with Congrats Freddie!!! I knew I'd see this one in the first place spot!!! ~Judy

Laura Leiser January 11, 2018 at 5:31 PM What a unique perspective that you've created with these ten words, Freddie! Awesome write...congrats :)

Line Gauthier January 11, 2018 at 5:09 PM Unbelievable what you see from that window... scary neighbourhood, Freddie. Congrats on your win with such a surprising poem.

Alexis Y. January 11, 2018 at 3:56 PM Hi Freddie, I'm not surprised, I knew you had penned yourself a winner. Congrats on your 1st place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

John Hamilton January 11, 2018 at 3:52 PM Freddie...this was so different...yet intriguing use of the ten words given. What a story, what an imagination, congrats on a worthy number 1!

Vijay Pandit January 11, 2018 at 3:44 PM Congrats Freddie on your wonderful first place win.

Heidi Sands January 11, 2018 at 3:21 PM Congratulations Freddie :)

Silent One January 11, 2018 at 2:29 PM This one just wowed me!!! How crazy is your mind to take those ten words and write this???? Wow Freddie! Your poem was completely different to the rest.. really dark and so well written... Congratulations on your first place in the 10/10 challenge..

Judith S January 10, 2018 at 7:47 PM This is just amazing Freddie!! You've put your own unique twist on this entry! Really, really impressive!!! Best of luck in the contest!!! ~Judy

James Edward Lee Sr. January 10, 2018 at 7:23 PM Freddie, Why does this feel like an episodes of NYPD Blue, Shaft, or the Commish Ha! Ha!. Excellent write my brother. Write ON, may your keyboard never break or stick. Happy New Year to you and yours. Forever Please and Blessings James

Alexis Y. January 10, 2018 at 4:18 PM Wow! Freddie, You met the challenge hands down. It was a slam dunk. You brought the sledgehammer ( of truth) again with this raw and uncut view of the ghetto. Only you could use the given words to write such a piece.I would be surprised and shocked if this well written piece is not on the winning list. Although I doubt that you need it, I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Dale Gregory Cozart January 10, 2018 at 12:05 PM This is gorgeous! GL in the contest!