Vegetable Gargoyles

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Haiku Sonnet
Created by David Marshall. The basic premise of the haiku sonnet is simple: 4 3-liner haiku (5.7.5 syllables only) plus a couplet of either 5.5 or 7.7 syllables, which adds up to 14 lines, the same number of lines found in a sonnet.

carved jack-o-lanterns a sentinel of pumpkins vegetable gargoyles an ebony cat a marble gravestone scratchpad feline familiar wolves howl at the moon bat wings whisper in the dark creatures of the night monsters in costume banging on neighborhood doors shouts of trick-or-treat Halloween; conjures the dead; fueling feelings of dread.

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/4/2025 12:27:00 PM

Hello Emile, Many people carve their pumpkins faces in different shapes. In your poem Such Was My luck. Please explain the last two line of the poem. i did not understand it. thank you. My friend. Enjoy your day. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 1/4/2025 2:34:00 PM

Hello Emile, Thank you for explaining the poem I appreciate it. I now understand the poem. Your welcome my friend. Enjoy your evening my friend. /Darlene/

Emile Pinet
Date: 1/4/2025 2:16:00 PM

Hi Dalene, In the lines (Though my childhood was anything but fun; I didn't go to war, but Dad did and won.) I am referring to the fact that my generation has never gone to war or felt its wraith, but our fathers did, and that is why we didn't—they suffered and won. And "PTSD" is why they acted like my dad did. Thanks, I appreciate your comments, my friend. Emile.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/31/2024 11:48:00 PM

Dear Emile; this is the first time im time im reading a haiku sonnet on soup, it used to be my fave form, i used to do them alot. I love how yours is done and how youv written one that fits the halloween mood too right now: i especially love “ an ebony cat a marble gravestone scratchpad feline familiar“ brilliant! And the ending couplet too is excellent! How beautiful is the way you paint imagery! Pleasure reading you always. Happy Halloween: sending you light always~

Emile Pinet
Date: 11/1/2024 7:41:00 AM

Thanks, Ink Empress. As always, I look forward to reading your critiques and appreciate your input, my friend Emile.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/31/2024 6:24:00 PM

what a fabulous string of haiku Emile! hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet
Date: 11/1/2024 7:39:00 AM

Thanks, Jan; I appreciate your comments, my friend. Emile.

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/31/2024 1:26:00 PM

Oh, I love this form idea. Emile what a fantastic Halloween Haiku Sonnet "bat wings whisper in the dark" love this line. Vegetable gargoyles, how original. Happy Halloween !! ~Anaya

Emile Pinet
Date: 11/1/2024 7:38:00 AM

Thanks, Anaya; I appreciate your comments, my friend. Emile.

Robert Sidwell

Date: 10/31/2024 12:36:00 PM

Great Halloween Haiku Sonnet! Loved the idea of vegetable gargoyles!

Emile Pinet
Date: 11/1/2024 7:37:00 AM

Thanks, Robert; I appreciate your comments, my friend. Emile.