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1/13/2026 for A Valentine With A Twist In The Tail Poetry Contest sponsored by Suzette Richards

Valentine's Gotcha

How exquisite, at last, to find
one pleasing to my troubled mind,
who would never say words unkind,  
such as, "au revoir".  
Though from heaven via moon beam,
it's not ideal, it would seem,  
that you are just a waking dream,
and yet here we are.

dreamimaginationrelationshipvalentines daytail-rhyme

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riqui velasquez

February 6, 2026 at 10:57 AM

loved it. congrats

David Crandall

February 6, 2026 at 3:19 PM

Thanks Riqui!

Ghairo Daniels

February 3, 2026 at 8:16 AM

Congrats on your winning entry, David. I enjoyed your poem mainly because I too like the imagination that Valentine Day offers : all those chocolates & roses floating in my head. I read Su’s blog on this contest > it was so interesting about “macaronic language”. I too merely focused on content & wondered whether the ‘tion’s’ in my entry were rhymes, but uploaded it anyway. I’m grateful Su explained this in the blog. I must admit I struggle with stressed & unstressed syllables, but English is my second language, so I can be forgiven. Sending blessings.

David Crandall

February 4, 2026 at 9:33 PM

Oh yes, I see you're from South Africa...I'm not very wordly...I think that's related to Dutch?

Ghairo Daniels

February 4, 2026 at 1:07 AM

Afrikaans, David. Only spoken in South Africa, Lol.

David Crandall

February 3, 2026 at 5:51 PM

Wow, Ghairo, that's cool, that your able to do all this rhyming in your second language. What's your first language?

Terry Miller

February 3, 2026 at 7:29 AM

Congratulations David

David Crandall

February 3, 2026 at 5:51 PM

Thanks, Terry!

Kim Rodrigues

February 2, 2026 at 6:52 PM

A dream that would never say something unkind. I like this a lot! Congrats, my fine friend!

David Crandall

February 3, 2026 at 5:52 PM

Thanks, glad you liked it, my friend!

CayCay Godwin

February 2, 2026 at 3:32 PM

You rascal, you got the gold! I'm so happy for you.

David Crandall

February 2, 2026 at 6:17 PM

Haha, crazy, huh! Thanks, CayCay!

Linda Alice Fowler

February 2, 2026 at 2:21 PM

Congratulations friend Dave!! :)

David Crandall

February 2, 2026 at 6:17 PM

Thanks, elle!

Suzette Richards

February 2, 2026 at 7:16 AM

Congratulations, David, on your trophy win in my Valentine contest. This well crafted poem echoes your distinctive, personal voice via the lexicon and imagery employed. Also see my latest blog: Contests – Fertile Ground for Learning.

Suzette Richards

February 2, 2026 at 10:20 AM

Originally, “macaronic” was coined in Renaissance Italy to describe humorous poems that mixed Latin with vernacular Italian, often in a deliberately clumsy or exaggerated way—hence the association with “dumpling” (maccarone) as something heavy or ungainly. That’s where the “derogatory” nuance comes from. Also see my blog update at blog "Bias."

Suzette Richards

February 2, 2026 at 9:55 AM

It is a bonafide term for a type of rhyme :-)

David Crandall

February 2, 2026 at 9:22 AM

haha, looks like my theory on "macaronic" doesn't hold water. There's an interesting Wikipedia entry "Macaronic Language".

David Crandall

February 2, 2026 at 9:18 AM

Wow! Thanks Suzette! I learned something too. I hadn't heard that term, "macaronic rhyme". I wonder if it comes from "Yankee Doodle", and with the girls be handy / and called it macaroni? Gonna have to google that.