Vagabond

Like a ravished maiden 
pale, forlorn and ashen
the birch lay in the still pond.
Dreams of Ophelia evoke nostalgia, 
as golden tresses move on,
splay upon the water
feast upon our daughter
a beautiful vagabond.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2012 5:41:00 PM

Very interesting imagery, Debs. Big congrats for you in Brian's contest.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/23/2012 3:01:00 PM

Congrats on your win with this creative work..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/23/2012 11:57:00 AM

Congratulations on your super win Debbie. Love, Carol

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/22/2012 8:09:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this entry. That was very imaginative writing. A downed birch tree lying in a pond.

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/23/2012 2:38:00 PM

yes that's exactlyy all and everythhing it was!

Gwendolen Song

Date: 1/22/2012 11:50:00 AM

PHew...this is a real beauty, Debbie..you are so classy in this write..Congrats on its success..Gwendolen

Lizanne Scholtz

Date: 1/22/2012 9:56:00 AM

Enjoyed your lovely poem Debbie, congratulations on your win. Elizabeth

Bob Quigley

Date: 1/22/2012 8:23:00 AM

Lovely Debbie. Congratulations

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/22/2012 7:32:00 AM

congrats Debbie on another well deserved sweet success for this phenomenal poetry .. ubeer awesome..luv..

Kash Poet

Date: 10/13/2011 2:10:00 PM

This must be for Dr Mehta's Balassi contest.Excellent poetry from you..

Don Johnson

Date: 10/7/2011 11:09:00 PM

great verse indeed, ophelia amongst the weeds, and the water ripples on, well done babe...

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/7/2011 9:21:00 AM

About a fallen Birch Tree or about a reflection of Birch Tree..They are beautiful in the fall of the year..Enjoyed reading..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Wayne Sapp

Date: 10/6/2011 10:32:00 PM

Terrific imagery Debbie. Nothing more beautiful than a birch in full fall yellow. I have a cabin in Alaska and I really enjoy stories about the 1st Nation peoples and their dietys Hence "Crow." A moldboard is the type of plow that rolls the sod over upside down.

John Freeman

Date: 10/6/2011 9:52:00 PM

Nice imagery Deb, Soup Mail. Agape, Moses

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/6/2011 2:44:00 PM

Deep and rich in both imagery and message, Deb. Awesome rhyme! Love, Carolyn

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 10/5/2011 11:49:00 PM

Oh, Debbie, did this stir up out of nowhere, come in a dream, were you out for a walk and then came upon this scene and the words struck each other like dominos falling? This, wordsmith, is MINT. Is this for the leaves contest? Your lines linger... LUSCIOUS WRITE. Again, a fine poet proves that its not the number of lines, its the power of words... Hugs, Cyndi

Wayne Sapp

Date: 10/5/2011 9:11:00 PM

Beautiful images Debbie! Wayne