Notes About The Poem

Upbeat

Before there was a world or a word 
there was unfathomable loneliness
in the gaseous expanse of pin pricked night
an infinite course of vibrations, sound
nascent, coalescing,  gestating,
until planets ripening birthed with souls.

There was only the orb, the throbbing soul
and an unknown longing for word,
conduits formed synapses gestating
to wavelengths of crystalline loneliness,
the aching white noise, static, lack of sound,
and the wanderers of celestial night.

Man was born to such a daunting midnight
aqueous eyes and conical ears for soul
to shattering din’s discordant sound,
no bird song, no harmony, no words,
just an aging, aching, aloneness,
of random thoughts thus wordless gestating.

A rhythm of circular gestation
formed the day and lingering became night
and thus weakened, warmed the loneliness
with woman kind He brought her soul.
Ether resounded with sheet lightening, words
for those sounds were to souls, the God sound.

Strong, silibant streams of understood sound
released from the oval egg of gestation
songs formed as man combined the God like words
croonings of passion fill the nubile night
as joinings rolled-tidal of mated souls.
Word all powerful had freed loneliness.

Each creature gifted an end to loneliness
earth, water, fire ,wind, all given sound,
all graced beloved with shimmering souls,
hatched from the dragon’s egg, life gestates
into the bountiful passage of night.
Cherish the ever present presence of the Word.

No longer alone, a sound vibrating within  
each atom relates to the soul, gestation continues 
in the night's never-ending cycle of the Word's life.


*My PASSION is SONG
* Many lines have internal RHYME as well as 
  the end rhyme achieved by the use of the same words.
*Dedicated to inspiration achieved 
 through the writings of L'Nass Shango & David Smalling
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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August 1, 2015 at 1:07 PM
Hi DG, nice to see you on the soups home page. To come and think of it, I have not seen you on here, for a long while anyway. I like the world for what it was before we got this far. Awesome poem. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. **SKAT**
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July 27, 2015 at 12:38 PM
My fav. poet and fav. poem. i missed earlier but made up now. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
Arowolo Avatar
March 8, 2012 at 4:16 PM
Awesome write and well penned....Congratulations on your win.....
Johnson Avatar
March 7, 2012 at 12:10 PM
This is more than worthy of the top place, Debbie. Perfectly expressed. Love, Joyce
Wilson Avatar
March 7, 2012 at 12:02 PM
Congratulations on your win in my contest Debbie..wonderful piece..love,Deb
Brown Avatar
March 7, 2012 at 11:15 AM
Good afternoon and congratulations on your win in Deb Wilson's "Passion" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
Susan Avatar
March 7, 2012 at 10:26 AM
Congratulations on your win! I like "each creature gifted and end to lonliness" :)
Mcgrath Avatar
December 5, 2010 at 10:19 AM
Bravo!you are a bit of a Bard i can read and will look at more of your work as the cold Scots winters are here.again cheers and a wonderful piece.jonny
Sweetheart Avatar
November 19, 2010 at 8:16 PM
SOUP MAIL..Debbie..
Sweetheart Avatar
November 19, 2010 at 4:13 PM
NEW SOUP MAIL..luv..
Richards Avatar
November 17, 2010 at 6:21 PM
Okay....hope I need not bother you again.....but I'm keeping fingers crossed one more time....I think mine is fixed! Thanks for not kicking me out on my ear!! As I said before...you are a saint and a very patient sponsor/teacher for those of us with thick skulls!!
Richards Avatar
November 17, 2010 at 7:56 AM
Magnificent!! You have made me realize that I am no doubt, way off course with writing a sestina.....you are the one to inspire us to try harder.......just wonderful! So...off to Egypt?......my goodness......how wonderful is that??!!! Hooray for you!
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November 17, 2010 at 6:23 AM
You did so well with this sestina, Deb! A great model to emulate and I can feel hope throughout the poem. What a wonderful dedication to two of our great Soupers! Have fun in Egypt. Think of us as you explore the pyramids. You will be missed. I will give it another shot using this poem as a model. Love, Carolyn
Guzzi Avatar
November 15, 2010 at 1:25 PM
PS THANKS to my pup Sweetheart..for always telling me when I have MISTAKES!
Smalling Avatar
November 15, 2010 at 10:51 AM
This is a phenomenal write,metaphors, alliterations, linguistic images, and above a gift of poetic collaboration. Elizabeth Bishop and Emily Dickenson had such collaborations. T. S. took from Claude Mckay and Toomer, and Ezra Pound helped him phrased each song from them. And yet you alone are the genius of your words, the poet of your vision chiseled here. Excitingly beautiful
Sweetheart Avatar
November 15, 2010 at 8:12 AM
thankxxx TEACH.. I did use alliteration in many of the lines... if I try to adjust it won't hold like before when I tried to fix ....other entries... so am keeping it as is for the contest.. to add more words would kill the flow of the read me thinks.. are u saying the Tercet is not correct? please help and explain as I followed the paired lines from P.S. and your own Sestina..luv.. thankxxx again.. appreciate .. luv..
Mehta Avatar
November 13, 2010 at 3:41 PM
Thanks, Deborah, for this as a guidance. This is a test very hard one, I think
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