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Up In Smoke

How beautiful the wedding dress she held
against her skin. How delicate its lace.
What happiness inside her heart would swell.
But now big teardrops rolled down her sad face.

Her fiancé had called that night to say
a thing most unexpected. Though he’d tried,
he simply could not find another way
than call things off. His love for her had died.

As she lay sobbing, she was unaware
a fire had started when she slept. She woke
to her alarm’s shrill sound, and out of there
she fled while her small house went up in smoke.

She sorrowed seeing everything burned down.
Her dreams are charred now like her wedding gown.

Jan. 18, 2022 
for Edward ibeh's This Or That, Vol 9 Poetry Contest
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Hind Avatar
February 15, 2025 at 5:53 PM
Wow, this is tragic, it hurt my heart to read it - powerful story
Dietrich Avatar
February 16, 2025 at 11:30 AM
Thanks. I just made it up.
Sumler Avatar
February 3, 2022 at 9:06 PM
Those last two lines gave me chill bumps. Deep dramatic sonnet here my friend. Also really nice seeing you still are at your prime in writing after all these years. You've inspired me to try my hand at Sonnet's again. Wonderful write. Been almost a decade since I've been here. Your long lost poetry friend signing off...
Ibeh Avatar
January 28, 2022 at 7:44 AM
Beautiful sonnet, Andrea:-)I loved it! Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest.
Calasibetta Avatar
January 26, 2022 at 8:14 AM
Fabulous sonnet Andrea! Congratulations on your win! Loved the flow and the depth of deep heartfelt emotion. :) Paulette
Alex Avatar
January 25, 2022 at 7:50 PM
A great sonnet. Your works are always a joy to read. This is one of them. Beautiful. Congratulations!
Laurie Avatar
January 23, 2022 at 4:06 PM
Hello Andrea ... certainly a theme meant for a sonnet. Sadness; broken heart; deep loss. Thank you Andrea - Lindsay
Thirtyseven Avatar
January 21, 2022 at 3:00 PM
Just brilliant Andrea. Sad story, wonderfully penned.
Watt Avatar
January 21, 2022 at 1:10 PM
Real pathos in poetry, Andrea... the parallel of her relationship (figuratively) and her home (physically) going up in smoke is inspired writing. Reminds me a bit of a Cinder Girl I read about once *wink wink*. Love it - another gem from the Soup Sonneteer.
Rodrigues Avatar
January 21, 2022 at 12:27 PM
Wow a tragedy that makes itself very clear…she escaped with her life. Wow, Andrea!
Jayasankar Avatar
January 21, 2022 at 9:42 AM
oh how sad, and her dreams are charred ...I feel sorry for the bride...such a pathetic situation should never happen in anyone's life...Very good take in the contest Ria...Hugs...~ Ani
Sands Avatar
January 20, 2022 at 1:13 PM
Wow. So sad Andrea. You have shown it so well with your writing. I hope you have a nice evening :)
Baker Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 3:41 PM
A very sad tale, written quite well, Andrea. An enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. Hugs, Bill
Tor Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 3:24 PM
Wow I wonder how many times that has happened in real life? Cant imagine the hurt...
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 1:20 PM
A great take on the contest. I think it would be the worst thing ever to make someone think they wanted to marry you and then change their mind. But It seems to happen all the time. I tried to think of something for this contest but came up empty. Hugs xxoo
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January 19, 2022 at 11:18 AM
Hello Andrea,what a horrid thing to do to the bride on the wedding day. A subject like that should not be spoken ont he wedding day. A proper way would be a few moths before the wedding. I feel sorry for the bride that was to be. Hugs.
Lawless Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 10:26 AM
A brilliant Sonnet telling a doubly sad tale with poetic flow and nuance. Well Done Andrea
Babcock Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 8:48 AM
So sad in two ways. I guess new beginnings in every way. Nicely written. soup mail love phyl
Pandit Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 5:44 AM
Two tragedies at once. So sad to read, Andrea. But it happens.
Buhagiar Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 12:48 AM
Sad in a way. The way he left her shows he did not deserve it. Personally I'm glad the wedding gown was burned. It marks a new beginning. Best for a win.
Maverick Avatar
January 18, 2022 at 10:29 PM
A write that is almost too tragic.' But thinking That thought I survey the world around me and See how much unbelievable things are going on (almost as I can't Deny what has happened) 'from auschwitz the (Place of running sweat) very descriptive do think? To Australia the place of deportation Again the language..' The last word from the UK royals coined I would guess, obviously these Words have no thought connection.' Or do They.? I leave it to the reader to decide.'
Hankins Avatar
January 18, 2022 at 8:01 PM
So sad and poignant, Andrea. If the house had to go, I'm so glad the wedding gown went with it. Now, she can start anew, find someone who truly loves her, and someday have a real wedding dress!
Mchattie Avatar
January 18, 2022 at 6:36 PM
I can't imagine how horrible someone would feel being stood up at the altar. Your poem really brings the sadness home. Have a good night my friend.
Horsman Avatar
January 18, 2022 at 6:32 PM
Wow, this is something else, the emotions here are passed on to the reader, yes felt the sadness, with every line.
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