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Unwanted Picnic Guest

Pic day Hooray! Split, Blue Friends true Eggs first None, worst! Hens beg For eggs Bat’s fault No salt Hare, goat Egg tote Hike to High view Nice spread Eggs, bread Start eat Bad greet Big snake Tail shake Tail shake Noise make Behind? Can’t find! Gat flees To trees In trees, Gat sees Shows Bat Where at Still, please! All freeze! Attack! Jump back Side-step, Throw pep Snake wheeze Snake sneeze Snake shake, Noise make Sneeze more, End war Such fun, Must run Great day, Hooray! Day done, Cats won!

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Date: 3/7/2022 10:29:00 AM
This was a fun read! I enjoyed it!
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/7/2022 10:59:00 AM
Thanks, Caren - same question for you - did you read this standalone, or after reading the longer limerick version? I am only curious because it is hard for me to know how much information this form conveys - I'm always doing it as a summary of a longer story. Any feedback would be appreciated!
Date: 3/6/2022 10:00:00 PM
Great all action footle, Jeff, it had me racing down the lines just to see how it ended up, the cats won, ha, ha, ha . . . ; )
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/7/2022 3:37:00 AM
So out of pure curiosity, did you read the Bat and Gat: Unwelcome Picnic Guest first, or just this, standalone. I'm just interested because I think this form creates a pretty good synopsis, but I don't have much of an idea of whether it creates a story all on its own, since I generally generate it from my limericks

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