''Until''

A fierce wind howls as dark clouds race,
                                        A tall man whispers to the light

across a vast land with wild clear waters,
                                         of streaking sunsets and sunrises bright

and woodlands in a thousand shades of green,
                                         he hears her calling for him

He feels her tears beckoning for him to come,
                                         and he must find her in the dim

for she has waited for him all her life it seems,
                                         to bring her back to his world.

over mountain peaks and rivers wild he journeys,
                                         Now, he stands in shadows whirled

and in the mist of dawn he watches her sleeping,
                                         as she sleeps like an angel with wings

He reaches out a hand to touch her raven head
                                          then, outside a bird sings,
 
as he fades away to dust in the morning light,
                                           and she sits in slow motion segments.

That night candlelight flickers in her bedroom,
                                           Her room is full of a forest scents

and he stands behind her and slowly removes his hood,
                                            and she is not afraid when he says, Claire

as she turns to face the man of her dreams, 
                                           when he twines his fingers in her hair

he takes her hand in his and walks her to the bed,
                                           and whispers, it is time.

They lay on the bed two lovers until at dawn he disappears,
                                            She closes her eyes for love sublime,

She is found in the morning, pale and deathly cold, 
                                           as he deeply kisses her ruby lips
 
raindrops fall as her casket is lowered into the ground,
                                           until into another world, she slips.

______________________
March 28, 2017

Narrative/"Until"
Copyright Protected, ID 888105


On Any Subject
Brenda Chiri

Second Place

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 4/30/2017 7:37:00 AM
Excellent write BW. All three poems coherent and well executed. Mystical and emotional with nice rhymes.
Login to Reply
Date: 4/8/2017 9:02:00 PM
Awesome what you did with this difficult form! Congrats on your win.
Login to Reply
Date: 4/8/2017 9:27:00 AM
Stunning write. Three poems in one; each a masterclass in and of itself :). A thoroughly well-deserved win!
Login to Reply
Date: 3/29/2017 12:43:00 PM
Wow! The flow feels seamless, softly moving like clouds into one. Your words paint stunning emotions over sweeping vistas that are hauntingly beautiful. Exquisite writing, lovely to read. lynnxxx p.s. it says a lot of your skills that I understood how you meant it to be read. You made it seem effortless because you are so talented. thank you :-)
Login to Reply
La France Avatar
Constance La France
Date: 3/30/2017 4:54:00 PM
Lynn Marie thank you for the wonderful comment
Date: 3/28/2017 7:43:00 PM
I know it looks like a strange poem but it is actually two poems, the poem left to right and the poem at the end, you have to read them separatly, hope I did the contest theme correctly!!
Login to Reply
La France Avatar
Constance La France
Date: 3/30/2017 4:55:00 PM
Think I did!
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter