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Bank robber Jim was one unlucky bloke
Went to draw his gun but the holster broke
It dropped on the bank floor 
And went off with a roar
The shock was too much and he had a stroke... 

Though he was unconscious he hadn't died
Woke in a coffin for his final ride 
In a desparate bid
Banged on the coffin lid 
But all he could hear was laughing outside... 

Written 17th June 2021

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Valsa George

Date: 1/22/2022 5:17:00 AM

Wow ..... this is so humorous . What a plight for unlucky Jim ! Greatly enjoyed !

Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/22/2022 6:46:00 AM

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/unlucky_jim__the_end_1368183

Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/22/2022 6:44:00 AM

Thank you Valsa, after requests I continued the story unlucky Jim the end,link above. Tom

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/30/2021 10:35:00 AM

"Unlucky Jim" a real cute write. Thanks for the laugh. Have a blessed day..................

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/30/2021 1:46:00 PM

Thank you Paula, Glad you enjoyed it. Tom

Judy Ball

Date: 6/29/2021 12:42:00 PM

OooHooHoo! I'd say he was truly having a bad day. Good one Tom. God Bless, JB

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/29/2021 1:32:00 PM

Thank you Judy, pleased you enjoyed it. Tom

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/24/2021 6:50:00 AM

Poor old Jim, unlucky indeed.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/24/2021 7:03:00 AM

Thank you Scott. Tom

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 6/23/2021 7:16:00 AM

Poor bank robber Jim, bet his chances were slim, grim even… Belle

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/23/2021 11:44:00 AM

Thank you very much Belle, I added more per Sara's request. Tom

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/22/2021 12:15:00 PM

Oooooh my goodness how awful, must see if he got out! everyone's nightmare I'm sure. Blessings Jennifer.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/22/2021 12:33:00 PM

Thank you Jennifer, Sara was anxious to know what happened next so his story continues. Tom

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2021 12:19:00 PM

oh my gotta hurry and see the ending

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 12:22:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, Id only wrote two but Sara wanted more lol. Tom

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/20/2021 5:01:00 AM

Jim's story in well-told in these limericks, Tom. Excellent! Now I'll read the sequel. Janice

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 5:03:00 AM

Thank you Janice, Sara requested a sequel so I got to work straight away. Tom

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/19/2021 4:11:00 PM

Hello Tom … I had a suspicion there was more to this saga, but just now, Jim is in a predicament - Thanks Tom - Lindsay

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/20/2021 1:43:00 AM

Thank you Lindsay, Sara was keen to know what happened next I had to continue. Tom

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/19/2021 4:45:00 AM

This is so funny, Tom, Jim got his final punishment:)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/19/2021 11:00:00 AM

Thank you Jo, see Sara's comment below, I wrote the finale with 4 extra limericks. Tom

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/18/2021 3:04:00 PM

Well, I would say that he was a very unlucky person facing his death that will be very long and hard but will he be saved at the very end. You need to write a sequel. Your presence at my page is encouraging. Sara

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 3:14:00 PM

Thank you very much Sara, you've given me an idea. Tom

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/18/2021 1:13:00 PM

Jim was in the wrong profession. If he had been Barney on the 'Andy Griffith Show,' he could have made millions! lol. Good one, Tom! ~ gw

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 2:08:00 PM

Thank you very much Gershon, too late to have a change of career lol Tom

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 6/18/2021 12:27:00 PM

I can't stop laughing... Too Good. Thanks for the laugh.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 1:00:00 PM

Thank you very much Rama, im happy that you enjoyed it. Have a great weekend. Tom

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/18/2021 8:57:00 AM

Lol! Tom, Jim was an unlucky bloke indeed. I hope he's not claustrophobic too. I enjoyed your humorous write. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 9:11:00 AM

Thank you very much Alexis, one thing for sure he won't be robbing any more banks lol. Tom

Eve Roper

Date: 6/18/2021 7:38:00 AM

Love it, Tom, the bank got lucky. Hugs Eve

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 8:38:00 AM

Thank you Eve, glad you enjoyed it. Hope you're keeping well. Have a lovely weekend. Tom

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/18/2021 7:33:00 AM

Unlucky indeed, perhaps he’ll have his revenge and return as a weed.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 8:37:00 AM

Thank you Richard, lol at your comment, Boothilius greenus. Tom

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/18/2021 1:36:00 AM

'And so to his demise.' Great Limerick. Tom.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 4:19:00 AM

Thank you very much Harry, in Jim's case crime certainly didn't pay. Hope you're well. Tom

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/17/2021 8:13:00 PM

awww ~ you are one funny man, Tom. Great limerick

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 4:19:00 AM

Thank you very much Line, happy you enjoyed the humour. Tom

Jan Allison

Date: 6/17/2021 3:19:00 PM

I think you nailed it with this poem Tom, great humour:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/18/2021 4:19:00 AM

Thank you very much Jan, glad you enjoyed it, it used to happen a lot in medieval times, they found scratch marks on coffin lids. Not a nice way to go. Tom