Unloved

Up in the sky I see God's handiwork Not the same in my home Love left so long ago Open wounds have healed Velvet thread was used to sew Every break in the heart but Drops of blood leak around each stitch Unfeeling now each time the hurts Not the same as years ago Lonely from years of manipulation Open wounds want to reopen Velvet thread is getting very old Every new break pulls Drops of blood still seep through Unguarded the heart is exposed Nothing has changed Left is only pain that is composed On top of the broken heart Velvet thread is getting soaked Every drop of blood spills onto it Death from a broken heart is near

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/2/2024 11:50:00 AM

Wow, Sara, an inkling of what you’ve been through.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 3/2/2024 2:47:00 PM

Kim, I was feeling quite broken at that time. Time heals all wounds so they say. Thanks for going back and reading from the past. Sara K

Fj Thomas

Date: 9/23/2022 10:00:00 PM

A heart tugging acrostic indeed! Just wanted to take a read back in time a bit this eve :) Take care Sara

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/24/2022 3:29:00 AM

Thank you, FJ. Since reading again my work, I should do some work on it to spruce it up. Thanks for the visit. Sara

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/12/2022 2:06:00 PM

Oh dear, Sandra what emotion this is stained with!

Sara Kendrick
Date: 1/13/2022 3:35:00 AM

Thank you for your visit, Kim. I was letting the emotion flow in this one. It helped to heal as I wrote each word. Thanks for your visit. Sara

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/19/2014 7:42:00 PM

Congratulations on your Wonderful number ONE placement with this excellent entry Sara. One can only understand the pain if they have experienced how devastating it can be. I love the way you expressed the pain with the use of velvet thread.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/19/2014 4:10:00 PM

Hi Sara,. Congratulations in "Kelly D's Heart And Soul, contest." Always & Forever *XOX* LINDA

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/19/2014 8:52:00 AM

definitely engaging... big applause to you for a shining win, sara!.. huggs

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/19/2014 1:19:00 AM

Congratulations on the fine win, enjoyed yoiur write on Heart and soul, sara

Skat A

Date: 3/18/2014 10:05:00 PM

Sara, A lot of Heart And Soul, enjoyed your winning poem.... Love ~SKAT~

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 3/18/2014 9:58:00 PM

Sara, beautifully written... Congratulations on the win... Verlena

Roger Horsch

Date: 3/18/2014 7:03:00 PM

Congrats on a well deserved win Sara, I enjoyed your poem.....Hugs......Roger

Kelly Deschler

Date: 3/18/2014 3:11:00 PM

This poem was intense and the emotion was so well described. This was exactly what I was looking for. An excellent poem, Sara! Congratulations on your well deserved first place win! This is also a fave for me! :)

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/12/2013 7:26:00 PM

Dear Sara, I usually read the POET Comments before I comment for I am not a well versed commentator. I am not doing it with this Marvelous Heart Wrenching POEM "Unloved" I have seen the wounds of a "broken Heart", the "Blood soaked Velvet Thread I see that "Death from a broken heart is near" Great Imagery This POEM however is not of YOU,for I know from YOUR future writes that YOU are Greatly LOVED and respected.LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire
Date: 3/12/2013 7:32:00 PM

Dear Sara, Congratulations on YOUR POEM "Unloved" being a well deserved Feature. LOVE YOU ALWAYS...Harry

Duncan Chappell

Date: 11/7/2010 3:53:00 PM

nice piece here again Sara duncan

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/6/2009 6:31:00 AM

sad, love is up and down, think on the good things and forgive the bad

Moonbee Canady

Date: 9/1/2009 10:45:00 PM

Emotion Packed... Loved It. MoonBee

Noura Nagy

Date: 8/16/2009 3:40:00 AM

dear sara , the poem is really graet & deep,your words are so powerfull :) brilliant ....

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/19/2009 4:00:00 PM

So much emotion and raw feelings. God's handiwork will patch up and sew up the broken seams over time. Chances are you will guard you feelings the next time. God Bless Phyl

C. E. Mcmullin

Date: 7/18/2009 7:49:00 PM

"tis the sadness of love, when its memory endures, serving to remind us of its folly, when untempered of wisdom"- Congrats on a wonderful write, Sara! Much deserved! poet butterfly

Brandee Augustus

Date: 7/17/2009 1:03:00 PM

I love the way you did your acrostic. I never thought of writing it this way.

Anthony Nutter

Date: 7/15/2009 8:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your poem being featured this week.

Raul Moreno

Date: 7/14/2009 2:19:00 PM

Sara, congrats on your feature...Raul

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 7/13/2009 5:38:00 PM

Sara~Very sad I'm sorry your heart was broken. but a very deeply expressed poem! Congratulations on your featured poem! Laura :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/13/2009 3:35:00 PM

Wow...this is so beautiful. if it is your first featured poem, it is a perfect poem to have been chosen!!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/13/2009 2:40:00 PM

Sara, congratulations on this featured poem. Now you will be seeing more features I am positive. Love, Carol

Candice Manibog

Date: 7/13/2009 11:54:00 AM

you did a great job in expressing the pain and sorrow left behind. the loneliness and sadness that still lingers is very evident. congrats on being featured. :)