Raul Moreno Poet Quatrain

Unhappy Reflection

My harshest critic is the mirror,
Revealing to me...I haven't moved on.
My life has no current of happiness,
Just a stagnant still pond.

I dwell in a lonely atmosphere,
Though surrounded by numerous friends.
I feel the happiness...I once had,
Has came to an untimely end.

A numbness in my emotions,
The haziness never gets clearer.
It's now what people say about me,
My harshest critic is the mirror.

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Simone Segal October 28, 2009 at 2:19 PM Very sad, your critic in the mirror is your spirit and he loves you! your spirit is your thought, and you have the power to think happiness,love, joy and all you desire, smile back at your reflection in the mirror every day, and think great thoughts! We become what we think about! love Simone

Angelita Becerra October 26, 2009 at 7:22 AM This Is Incredible writing and I can so relate..good job and keep up the good work...Angelita

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire October 24, 2009 at 7:32 AM Dear Raul, YOU are not "Just a stagnant still pond" "I feel the happiness...I once had, Has come to an untimely end" ONly to be replaced by a Greater Happiness, YOUR Friends and Fellow POETS It's great How it starts and ends with the same line Superb Write my Friend ALWAYS...HG

Carolyn Devonshire October 19, 2009 at 2:36 PM Some of the harshest critics I've ever seen reside here. If you don't like what you see in the mirror, search your soul and maybe the truth will be revealed. As my Mom always said, "To have a friend, you have to be a friend." Some of the recent events here have left me "numb" as well.

Kate W October 18, 2009 at 12:03 PM the mirror shows our true selves in the rawest form well done my friend..............kate

James Marshall Goff October 17, 2009 at 2:12 PM pure emotion...nice... jim

Charmaine Chircop October 17, 2009 at 7:35 AM Our mirror is a critic,i can see your mirror Raul,a mirror full of light,a glimmering mirror..hope you see yourself that way.. and that verse -surrounded by numerous friends yet feeling lonely..we all pass from those moments..but look in your mirror again Raul..Can you see that face smiling?:)smile..excellent work--Charma

Brian Strand October 17, 2009 at 2:52 AM Thank you for your welcome comments today Raul..Rgds Brian Never be too hard on yourself

Doris Culverhouse October 16, 2009 at 7:57 PM so true, but think on the good things let the bad go:)

James Fraser October 16, 2009 at 2:42 PM Excellent write Raul, the mirror never lies - as much as we want it to, really kool piece >> James

Carrie Richards October 16, 2009 at 9:53 AM I think this reveals that we are own worst enemy. Well done, poet friend...well done!! Your poetry continues to get better and better!

Robin L. Gass October 16, 2009 at 8:37 AM Excellent though sad, this is a beautifully written expression of very deep and moving feelings, Raul. Awesome first/last line in this. It does seem we are our own toughest critic. Well done, my friend! Love, Robin

Marty Owens October 16, 2009 at 7:52 AM Yes mine too...enjoyed the poem...Marty