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Unhappy Reflection

My harshest critic is the mirror,
Revealing to me...I haven't moved on.
My life has no current of happiness,
Just a stagnant still pond.

I dwell in a lonely atmosphere,
Though surrounded by numerous friends.
I feel the happiness...I once had,
Has came to an untimely end.

A numbness in my emotions,
The haziness never gets clearer.
It's now what people say about me,
My harshest critic is the mirror.

Copyright © Raul Moreno | Year Posted 2009

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Simone Segal Date: 10/28/2009 2:19:00 PM Very sad, your critic in the mirror is your spirit and he loves you! your spirit is your thought, and you have the power to think happiness,love, joy and all you desire, smile back at your reflection in the mirror every day, and think great thoughts! We become what we think about! love Simone Login to Reply

Angelita Becerra Date: 10/26/2009 7:22:00 AM This Is Incredible writing and I can so relate..good job and keep up the good work...Angelita Login to Reply

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire Date: 10/24/2009 7:32:00 AM Dear Raul, YOU are not "Just a stagnant still pond" "I feel the happiness...I once had, Has come to an untimely end" ONly to be replaced by a Greater Happiness, YOUR Friends and Fellow POETS It's great How it starts and ends with the same line Superb Write my Friend ALWAYS...HG Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 10/19/2009 2:36:00 PM Some of the harshest critics I've ever seen reside here. If you don't like what you see in the mirror, search your soul and maybe the truth will be revealed. As my Mom always said, "To have a friend, you have to be a friend." Some of the recent events here have left me "numb" as well. Login to Reply

Kate W Date: 10/18/2009 12:03:00 PM the mirror shows our true selves in the rawest form well done my friend..............kate Login to Reply

James Marshall Goff Date: 10/17/2009 2:12:00 PM pure emotion...nice... jim Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 10/17/2009 7:35:00 AM Our mirror is a critic,i can see your mirror Raul,a mirror full of light,a glimmering mirror..hope you see yourself that way.. and that verse -surrounded by numerous friends yet feeling lonely..we all pass from those moments..but look in your mirror again Raul..Can you see that face smiling?:)smile..excellent work--Charma Login to Reply

Brian Strand Date: 10/17/2009 2:52:00 AM Thank you for your welcome comments today Raul..Rgds Brian Never be too hard on yourself Login to Reply

Doris Culverhouse Date: 10/16/2009 7:57:00 PM so true, but think on the good things let the bad go:) Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 10/16/2009 2:42:00 PM Excellent write Raul, the mirror never lies - as much as we want it to, really kool piece >> James Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 10/16/2009 9:53:00 AM I think this reveals that we are own worst enemy. Well done, poet friend...well done!! Your poetry continues to get better and better! Login to Reply

Robin L. Gass Date: 10/16/2009 8:37:00 AM Excellent though sad, this is a beautifully written expression of very deep and moving feelings, Raul. Awesome first/last line in this. It does seem we are our own toughest critic. Well done, my friend! Love, Robin Login to Reply

Marty Owens Date: 10/16/2009 7:52:00 AM Yes mine too...enjoyed the poem...Marty Login to Reply