Underlying Beauty

Underlying the meaning of the beauty in the breeze
watching with apprehension as all good things tumble by
washing down a mellow yellow and the dust of the day 
wishing white shoes were never worn in December

Pounds reverberate a helpless sound
sleeping on the floor with one eye opened 
the road to redemption covered in soot
and it's been a long time coming

The river flows fighting against the tide
spirits slowly merging within holy waters
almost held without tears falling back in time
but the scars release and I finally see inside
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 1/24/2017 10:50:00 AM
I missed this one somehow, it is just stunning writing Tim! Depicts well the inner struggles upon introspection. Well deserved POTD
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Date: 1/17/2017 6:05:00 AM
Found this on the list. A little late but here to fav!
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Date: 1/3/2017 8:27:00 AM
Thank you, Tim, best wishes for 2017 for you too!
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Date: 12/31/2016 4:43:00 PM
Thanks everyone for the lovely comments...Wishing you all a happy and healthy 2017.
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Date: 12/31/2016 4:42:00 PM
Tim a big CONGRATULATIONS on POTD with this beautiful poem ~
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Date: 12/31/2016 3:20:00 PM
- Congratulations on your p.o.t.d., Tim :)
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Date: 12/31/2016 12:21:00 PM
Oh, yes, Congratulations!!!!! One of the best ones yet.
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Date: 12/31/2016 12:20:00 PM
So hard to see beyond the surface - in ourselves or in others - what a gift to "finally see inside."
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Date: 12/31/2016 12:05:00 PM
I love the ambiguity. The imagery is great and allows the reader to engage with the writer on his own terms. Wonderful Poem! Toni O.
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Date: 12/31/2016 9:42:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD, Tim.
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Date: 12/31/2016 8:54:00 AM
Exceptional Tim, and hope you'll have a very happy new year... Enjoy and congrats on potd :)
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Date: 12/31/2016 7:48:00 AM
Congratulations Tim on POTD:)
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Date: 12/31/2016 7:27:00 AM
Back to heap praise on your POTD honor...
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Date: 12/31/2016 2:06:00 AM
Good stuff. Well written and I like the message. Kai
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Date: 12/30/2016 2:57:00 AM
Inspiring my friend, Tim! happy New Year!
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Date: 12/29/2016 4:59:00 PM
Beautifully done my friend...nice song too...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 12/29/2016 3:20:00 PM
Another year conquered maybe not with moments that we wanted, but at least walked passed it still floating. Wishing this year brings hope and success. Have a Happy New Year’s and all your wishes come true… and don’t forget to eat those Black-eyed peas : ) Hugs Eve
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Date: 12/29/2016 3:17:00 PM
Won't pretend to understand it all but the last line says a lot. Thanks for sharing this year with me, I look forward to more of the same, only different...
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Date: 12/29/2016 2:07:00 PM
I am glad I got to know you and your poetry this year, Tim. I canrelate so much to this poem, but I will not elaborate :) Just a wonderful poem my friend. 7 and fav
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Date: 12/29/2016 1:27:00 PM
This was deep and filled with meaning almost in a desperate tone.
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Date: 12/29/2016 1:22:00 PM
Exceptional poem Tim.A fave.
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Date: 12/29/2016 1:08:00 PM
- Sometimes ... we must reset our thoughts and breathe deeply - Beautifully written, Tim - a 7 - Thanks for the year 2016 ... looking forward to a new year with new poems and friendship:) - Best wishes for a happy new year :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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