Silent One Poet Sonnet

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This was never meant to be a sonnet.  I was playing around with monorhyme and rap, for a spoken word piece.  Althought 10 syllables, I am not one for meter....

 

Under the Surface

Mind cannot comprehend, it finds it strange,
when ignorance reigns in human exchange.
Wonder if some people will ever change,
or wish to remain in the firing range.

I prefer to live life without disdain.
When demons persist, penetrating pain,
I let the ink loose from my bursting vein,
to express with peace, from hate I abstain.

We're not all the same birds of a feather,
we all sin, but have to live together.
Opinions are like the British weather,
driving you to the end of your tether.

Agree to disagree with an open mind,
tensions ease when we prefer to be kind.

The Silent One
12 January 2020

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders May 14, 2020 at 7:43 PM A wonderful sonnet full of wisdom, Silent! If only we could all keep an open mind and try to embrace our differences with kindness...hugs, Rhonda

John Hamilton April 26, 2020 at 9:27 AM So good SO makes sense to me glad to see a sonnet from you. You do these well.

Alison Hodges February 16, 2020 at 12:56 PM I really like this one. I love the way it rhymes within lines. I've never even tried to do that.

Richard Lamoureux January 23, 2020 at 9:54 AM So true. Well expressed Silent. Thanks as well for your visit.

M. L. Kiser January 22, 2020 at 4:01 PM Beautifully written. Enjoyed.

Indiana Shaw January 21, 2020 at 11:40 AM I love Sonnet raps, do the audio, add a few poets off here to do the lines, and spread the word, I hear it, man . . . : )

Kai Michael Neumann January 20, 2020 at 3:50 AM Pluralism and poetry rock.

Ann Foster January 19, 2020 at 8:28 PM Such wonderful wisdom... Excellent write as always... a veteran at your trade my friend... welcome in the courts of kings and queens alike... ... Ann

Robert Lindley January 19, 2020 at 5:57 PM Wonderful sonnet my friend. Great message and rhyming. This is truly a wonderful and inspiring admonishment of those in this dark world that happily embrace its greed, lusts , wicked deeds and darkness.. A fav-- a true gem too.

Maria Williams January 17, 2020 at 12:05 AM I really enjoyed the message under the surface of this rap style poem of yours. I watched a movie the day, ‘Dolemite is my name’ . Who ever said there was no money to be made from poetry was wrong. Eddie Murphy portrays real-life legend Rudy Ray Moore, a comedy and rap pioneer who proved naysayers wrong when his hilarious rap style poetry really took off. At a time when parents were shaking their heads and hoping rap was a fad, i really loved the rhythm and beat to it. I think its here to stay....Maria Hugs

John Watt January 15, 2020 at 2:41 PM SO, I wish this were read in every school in every country. With Brexit, impeachment hearings, attacks, and retaliatory strikes, I wish our politicians would heed this message as well. Beautiful, as always, with your words and rhymes, always love your sonnets. ~ John Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:18 PM That would be great, but there are a lot of adults who could take advice from this.. Thank you John..

Juliet Ligon January 15, 2020 at 10:49 AM Great message and it flows so well! Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:16 PM Thank you..

Midnight Aurora January 14, 2020 at 5:07 PM Lol...I just read this like a rap...and now I'm laughing...only coz I don't do rap... It is better when you read it like that though because it really gets the point across. Midnight Aurora January 15, 2020 at 3:24 PM Sounds cool. Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:16 PM It sounds so much better in rap.. i do slow rap and fast rap... the contrast in styles is great.. thanks.

Carolyn Devonshire January 14, 2020 at 1:49 PM If we could only learn to keep an open mind, understanding could replace anger. Imagine this effect on our turbulent world today, SO. Enjoyed the different rhyme scheme for your sonnet -- they can be written many ways, Brian once told me. And nothing seems more important than eradicating ignorance and hate. Beautifully written, my friend. Hugs, carolyn Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:20 PM It was never meant to be a sonnet, but seeing that it has a syllable count of 10, i thought i would leave it as a sonnet.. thank you for your feedback..

Kim Rodrigues January 14, 2020 at 12:56 PM Yes, love it! Great lines: I let the ink loose from my bursting vein, to express with peace, from hate I abstain. Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:19 PM Thank you.... let us all abstain from hate..

Caren Krutsinger January 13, 2020 at 5:50 PM “From hate I abstain”- if we all did this what a beautiful world it could be. Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:15 PM i agree.... Carolyn Devonshire January 14, 2020 at 1:50 PM Amen

Tom Cunningham January 13, 2020 at 6:31 AM We certainly know about the British weather S. O. Like your comparison to it. Well written sonnet. Tom Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:21 PM Thank you Tom.. yes its been crazy again over here... as you know..

Besma Riabi Dziri January 13, 2020 at 1:48 AM As you break the silence and the rules an outflow of beauty springs from "poetic veins! "under the surface"! rises to higher levels of captivating poetry! So pleased to read your work, Silent One.. Best regards and blessings. Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:23 PM Thank you..

Harry Horsman January 12, 2020 at 11:03 PM I find the subject matter so different from the norm, (mainly lovey dovey) and find it very refreshing,,, Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:23 PM Thank you..

Brandy Nicole January 12, 2020 at 6:55 PM "Agree to disagree with an open mind" Is that Possible? Yes, I certainly think so. Is it that way in our World? Not as much as it should be. Such a thought provoking write. Well said Silent One. ~ Brandy Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:24 PM It is possible... if we let our ego go and accept other peoples views... thank you..

Janice Canerdy January 12, 2020 at 6:33 PM Oh, I really like this one, S.O.! Janice Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:24 PM Thank you..

Sandra Adams January 12, 2020 at 6:30 PM i love the way you penned this and your message within even more so, we must all get along, and no two people will ever totally agree on everything but there are ways to handle it...without violence...wonderful sonnet...it would work well it Emile's contest... hugs :) Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:24 PM Totally agree... Thank you..

Anil Deo January 12, 2020 at 6:21 PM love it, and the feats of avoiding cycles of hate. My heartfelt gratitude Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:25 PM Thank you..

Connie Marcum Wong January 12, 2020 at 5:51 PM I love the valuable message in this piece Silent. New year blessings. xxoo Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:25 PM Thank you..

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart January 12, 2020 at 4:04 PM I love this, xomo fave <3 Silent One January 15, 2020 at 3:26 PM Thank you..

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