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Under the Summer Sky

Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes to drink in the golden summer hour held captivated by the windswept sky Where crows circle low, insistent with cries and meadows are ablaze with wildflower Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes Herded cattle graze, among windblown tides while tall oaks, shade them with ancient powers, held captivated by the windswept sky The steep hilled slopes, where purple lupine thrive scent the warm air with sweet fragrant showers Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes Heaven opens wide, while my breath replies as clouds stacked high, are rose crimson towers, held captivated by the windswept sky As the day dissolves, slowly fades and dies, my eyes resolve and my heart devours Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes Held captivated by the windswept sky _______________________________________ For the contest sponsored by Shadow Hamilton 6/8/10 --- Revised and edited 6/17/15

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Date: 6/14/2010 3:32:00 PM
Great, vivid imagery here, nothing is better than trying to convey the beauty of ones surroundings with the power of prose, great shot here. Regards, Gavin.
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Date: 6/10/2010 12:57:00 AM
You certainly have been gifted with a poet's observation Carrie.Keep drinking your fill.Rgds Brian
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Date: 6/9/2010 7:58:00 PM
Hi Carrie :) this is just wonderful! I totally loved the refrains that you used! I can't help but want to pray for that too! You sure are a talented writer :)--wish you the best in the contest --nikko :)
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Date: 6/9/2010 1:11:00 PM
Great Villanelle..Excellent topic and repeat lines..Good luck in the contest if an entry..Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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Date: 6/9/2010 11:55:00 AM
This is truly beautiful, Carrie, I felt as though, I was right there. I just love nature, and you painted a lovely picture with your words. This is a winner. Love Constance
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Date: 6/9/2010 11:49:00 AM
This is absolutely beautiful. You commanded the form perfectly.
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Date: 6/9/2010 9:37:00 AM
Simply stated beautiful. Thank you for showing us this beauty through your eyes. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/8/2010 10:07:00 PM
This is a really beautiful Villanelle write, Carrie! Very colorful imagery. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on my latest. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 6/8/2010 8:09:00 PM
OH WOWWWWWW, This is one awesome villanelle, Carrie. "the day stretches out with a yawning sigh" GREAT line. Favs for this one!
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Date: 6/8/2010 7:27:00 PM
Thanks for supporting my contest
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Date: 6/8/2010 5:43:00 PM
Beautiful! Your artistry is both stunning and breathtaking.So proud to know you as my PSoup friend. You're extremely gifted. Peace and hugs, John
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Date: 6/8/2010 3:42:00 PM
Very nice carrie , much inspiration!~Rick
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Date: 6/8/2010 3:36:00 PM
I absolutely love this form.. this is outstanding work..your line is beautiful...BG
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Date: 6/8/2010 3:35:00 PM
Well done Carrie, enjoyed your poetry. have yourself a nice one,..p.d.
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