Under the Summer Sky

Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes                            
to drink in the golden summer hour                                      
held captivated by the windswept sky                       

Where crows circle low, insistent with cries                           
and meadows are ablaze with wildflower                          
Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes                            

Herded cattle graze, among windblown tides                
while tall oaks, shade them with ancient powers,                    
held captivated by the windswept sky               

The steep hilled slopes, where purple lupine thrive                
scent the warm air with sweet fragrant showers                    
Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes                          

Heaven opens wide, while my breath replies                        
as clouds stacked high, are rose crimson towers,             
held captivated by the windswept sky             
        
As the day dissolves, slowly fades and dies,
my eyes resolve and my heart devours
Please, grant me the vision of thirsty eyes                    
Held captivated by the windswept sky                         
  



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For the contest sponsored by Shadow Hamilton
6/8/10   --- Revised and edited 6/17/15

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 6/14/2010 3:32:00 PM
Great, vivid imagery here, nothing is better than trying to convey the beauty of ones surroundings with the power of prose, great shot here. Regards, Gavin.
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Date: 6/10/2010 12:57:00 AM
You certainly have been gifted with a poet's observation Carrie.Keep drinking your fill.Rgds Brian
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Date: 6/9/2010 7:58:00 PM
Hi Carrie :) this is just wonderful! I totally loved the refrains that you used! I can't help but want to pray for that too! You sure are a talented writer :)--wish you the best in the contest --nikko :)
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Date: 6/9/2010 1:11:00 PM
Great Villanelle..Excellent topic and repeat lines..Good luck in the contest if an entry..Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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Date: 6/9/2010 11:55:00 AM
This is truly beautiful, Carrie, I felt as though, I was right there. I just love nature, and you painted a lovely picture with your words. This is a winner. Love Constance
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Date: 6/9/2010 11:49:00 AM
This is absolutely beautiful. You commanded the form perfectly.
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Date: 6/9/2010 9:37:00 AM
Simply stated beautiful. Thank you for showing us this beauty through your eyes. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/8/2010 10:07:00 PM
This is a really beautiful Villanelle write, Carrie! Very colorful imagery. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on my latest. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 6/8/2010 8:09:00 PM
OH WOWWWWWW, This is one awesome villanelle, Carrie. "the day stretches out with a yawning sigh" GREAT line. Favs for this one!
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Date: 6/8/2010 7:27:00 PM
Thanks for supporting my contest
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Date: 6/8/2010 5:43:00 PM
Beautiful! Your artistry is both stunning and breathtaking.So proud to know you as my PSoup friend. You're extremely gifted. Peace and hugs, John
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Date: 6/8/2010 3:36:00 PM
I absolutely love this form.. this is outstanding work..your line is beautiful...BG
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Date: 6/8/2010 3:35:00 PM
Well done Carrie, enjoyed your poetry. have yourself a nice one,..p.d.
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