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Under the Overpass

wings could drive you crazy under the overpass, the crows gather one by one, flapping it is a perfect day, stuck underneath where cars borrow the bird’s view without a whisper or toll, torrent of landings to complete the murder the row, on an inner ledge, legible perhaps eligible to a mate, could be a male society or female offering we who pass so quickly, only stopping for a light or traffic jamming, see what flies in the dark, in the face we are the ones out of place the fury of the flock, frenetics relics, energetic, spot on sketchy do they see some of the same old cars? do they care or turn a blind eye i haven’t forgotten but what does it matter? it does because a poetic fuse ensues and must in the end die out, forgotten except by the rear end reader who will extend the imagery for a blink or think a deja vu when flocking with crows in trees, on lines, under the overpass

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Date: 8/27/2024 2:03:00 PM
Really, really interesting, Kim- I could almost feel the deja vu...lol
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/27/2024 3:36:00 PM
Thanks!!
Date: 8/24/2024 10:40:00 AM
Hi Kim, I love this bird poem, such a brilliant penning. A FAV! Have a blessed weekend. :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/25/2024 11:16:00 AM
I appreciate you, Gina! Thank you so much! XX
Date: 8/23/2024 12:31:00 PM
Hi Kim! Love the over and under, the tipsiness, of your title and the thoughtful way you have used words to convey a mystery of life through crows. If this is for a contest, best wishes for a win. Blessings of joy to you!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 3:16:00 PM
No contest, just based on an observation. Thanks, Sam :)
Date: 8/23/2024 7:49:00 AM
I love poetry that makes one think below the surface of things. This excellent poem that you penned does just that, Kim. You are a deep thinker and also use the power of poetry and imagery, metaphor and imagination to create the scene, per se. Love this one! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 9:12:00 AM
I appreciate you so much! Thank you, Laura!
Date: 8/22/2024 6:38:00 PM
All I know is that you have penned a very, very catchy title there, Kim. thanks!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 3:46:00 AM
Thanks :) Things were wild under the overpass with the passerines.
Date: 8/22/2024 5:41:00 PM
Not too many poets are remembered...and mostly only by the sentimental flock...and perhaps, angels and God. Wouldn't that be nice! Blessings my friend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 3:46:00 AM
Blessings to you, Joe!
Date: 8/22/2024 7:38:00 AM
True poetry Kim. Had to reread a few times cuz this one's deep
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/22/2024 8:37:00 AM
Thank you so much, Tom!

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