Under the Overpass

wings could drive you crazy
under the overpass, the crows
gather one by one, flapping
it is a perfect day, stuck underneath
where cars borrow the bird’s view
without a whisper or toll, torrent
of landings to complete the murder
the row, on an inner ledge, legible
perhaps eligible to a mate, could be
a male society or female offering
we who pass so quickly, only stopping
for a light or traffic jamming, see
what flies in the dark, in the face
we are the ones out of place
the fury of the flock, frenetics
relics, energetic, spot on sketchy
do they see some of the same old
cars? do they care or turn a blind eye
i haven’t forgotten but what does it matter?
it does because a poetic fuse ensues
and must in the end die out, forgotten
except by the rear end reader
who will extend the imagery for a blink
or think a deja vu when flocking with crows
in trees, on lines, under the overpass

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Date: 8/27/2024 2:03:00 PM
Really, really interesting, Kim- I could almost feel the deja vu...lol
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/27/2024 3:36:00 PM
Thanks!!
Date: 8/24/2024 10:40:00 AM
Hi Kim, I love this bird poem, such a brilliant penning. A FAV! Have a blessed weekend. :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/25/2024 11:16:00 AM
I appreciate you, Gina! Thank you so much! XX
Date: 8/23/2024 12:31:00 PM
Hi Kim! Love the over and under, the tipsiness, of your title and the thoughtful way you have used words to convey a mystery of life through crows. If this is for a contest, best wishes for a win. Blessings of joy to you!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 3:16:00 PM
No contest, just based on an observation. Thanks, Sam :)
Date: 8/23/2024 7:49:00 AM
I love poetry that makes one think below the surface of things. This excellent poem that you penned does just that, Kim. You are a deep thinker and also use the power of poetry and imagery, metaphor and imagination to create the scene, per se. Love this one! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 9:12:00 AM
I appreciate you so much! Thank you, Laura!
Date: 8/22/2024 6:38:00 PM
All I know is that you have penned a very, very catchy title there, Kim. thanks!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 3:46:00 AM
Thanks :) Things were wild under the overpass with the passerines.
Date: 8/22/2024 5:41:00 PM
Not too many poets are remembered...and mostly only by the sentimental flock...and perhaps, angels and God. Wouldn't that be nice! Blessings my friend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/23/2024 3:46:00 AM
Blessings to you, Joe!
Date: 8/22/2024 7:38:00 AM
True poetry Kim. Had to reread a few times cuz this one's deep
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/22/2024 8:37:00 AM
Thank you so much, Tom!
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