Undefeated

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Inspired by the contest "Your Best Love Song Ever". But I do not enter the contest. First of all this is not a love song haha, and second of all I have never written a song before in my life. I do write for performance on stage, yes, rap-like, spoken word-like, poetry slam-like poems, but never a song. Nonetheless, this was fun, so I post it :)

(Verse) Brittleness, in body and in mind. Defenseless it seems, but you'll find A springiness in here, unexpected. A strength in crippled body, unabated. (Chorus) Believe in this: I'll say again Don't ever miss My frisky brain. I bungee jump, Fall low and then - After a bump - Come up again. (Verse) When I am in a hospital next time Remember this, my little rhyme About resilience, strength inside Mental illness I have, and pride. (Chorus) Believe in this: I'll say again Don't ever miss My frisky brain. I bungee jump, Fall low and then - After a bump - Come up again. (Bridge) And always always Recognize What in this song I advertize: (Chorus) Believe in this: I'll say again Don't ever miss My frisky brain. I bungee jump, Fall low and then - After a bump - Come up again. (Verse) My wheels will take me anywhere My spirit follows with great care To you it may sound bittersweet Brittle perhaps, but undefeated. (Chorus) Believe in this: I'll say again Don't ever miss My frisky brain. I bungee jump, Fall low and then - After a bump - Come up again. *** February 1, 2017

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Phillip Garcia

Date: 2/1/2017 9:21:00 PM

I second what Chris said. It's fun to read competent lyric poetry and try to imagine the music you had in your mind for it. I'm cursed with Radiohead obsession so i can neither write comprehensible lyrics nor imagine decent melodies by which to write them

Darren White
Date: 2/2/2017 12:18:00 AM

Nothing wrong with Radiohead and their lyrics! Now it's your fault I suddenly have one singing around in my head :)

Chris Green

Date: 2/1/2017 6:27:00 AM

Very nicely done my friend. This song is obviously personal but I am sure it would resonate with many. Really cool Darren, and this would easy for someone to put a melody to based on how it is constructed.

Darren White
Date: 2/1/2017 6:30:00 AM

Would it? I had music in my head while writing it, and a cadence as well, I bet you are right, you are far more knowledgeable than I am about this.