Nette Onclaud Poet Senryu

Twilight Meets Dawn

Soft fire is his eyes

                                   fondling my soul without words

                          ... twilight’s balm drips down



                          Our warm pulses meet

                                     in thrills of hushed surrender...

                           baptizing fresh dawn

                        
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                                               .        ……..    .

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Debbie Guzzi March 22, 2012 at 6:06 PM Steamy one gal! Congrad's Light & Love

Andrea Dietrich March 20, 2012 at 8:14 PM wozer. you scored again with this GEM. congrats.

Mike Dailey March 20, 2012 at 4:15 PM Congratulations on your win. I am not a fan of this form but your poems are begenning to turn me around on them. Mike

Sara Kendrick March 20, 2012 at 1:31 PM Congrats on your win.Sara

Sashi Prabhu March 20, 2012 at 8:40 AM mind blowing Nette........congrats on the top placement..........~sashi

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders March 19, 2012 at 3:25 PM Congrats on your awesome win! Beautiful imagery, Nette. Blessings, Rhonda

Carol Sunshine Brown March 19, 2012 at 12:36 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Brian's "Ten For" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Joann Grisetti March 19, 2012 at 12:26 PM very beautiful. Congratulations.

Joann Grisetti March 19, 2012 at 7:48 AM beautiful images in this poem. Congratulations.

Gwendolen Song March 19, 2012 at 3:18 AM Thrilled to see your name at the top of the list in this contest, Nette. Congrats on a sensual dreamy write. Love, Gwendolen

Deborah Burch March 19, 2012 at 2:42 AM Congratulations, Nette, on your 1st place win in Brian's Contest!!!!! Well done! Beautiful piece!!!Big Hugggss~Deb~

Barbara Gorelick January 31, 2012 at 7:30 AM Congrats nette, this is sooo lovely. BG

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 30, 2012 at 8:56 PM congrats Nette luv on a super first place win.. oh yes.. sweets..

Andrea Dietrich January 30, 2012 at 4:07 PM This SO deserves first place. I gotta fave it too. Congratulations, Nette.

Debbie Guzzi January 30, 2012 at 2:28 PM Of course [our] is 1 syllable ;) congrad's on your win [aim for my throat with that white light nette] Light & Love

Jon Arno January 30, 2012 at 2:01 PM Congratulations on your winning write :) Jon

Carolyn Devonshire January 30, 2012 at 11:39 AM Very nice, Nette. Congratulations on your first-place win in Francine's contest! Love, carolyn

Carrie Richards January 30, 2012 at 11:35 AM Ahhhhhhhhhh......lovely and romantic! Congrats !!!

Bl Devnath January 30, 2012 at 11:32 AM Depth of love of heart wonderfully depicted with sweet words, loved and enjoyed. Congrats you on your win. Loved, bl

Carol Sunshine Brown January 30, 2012 at 11:25 AM Congratulations on your winning placement in Francine's contest . Love, Carol

Francine Roberts January 30, 2012 at 11:15 AM congrats on your first place win nette, it was wonderful and had the third line cut which most did not

Andrea Dietrich January 28, 2012 at 8:13 PM Nette, I would think anyone would realize our only has one syllable. Same as the word Hour. Some of the dipthong syllables are hard for people to realize they are just one long sound! This is really beautiful. I am sure she will love it.

Russell Sivey January 28, 2012 at 11:15 AM What a fantastic write Nette! From the awesome twilight to the amazing dawn brings such romance to any couple! I enjoyed the poem immensely, so very well done! Great Work!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 28, 2012 at 9:44 AM well a breathtaking set of lines for this romantic contest Nette luv.. much success and such vibrant imagery too..luv..

Tim B January 28, 2012 at 9:44 AM A passionate write, a fiery and breathing poem. Good luck in the contest, I am sure a winner.

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