Twilight

The blackbirds alight at their sleeping site as bushes ignite with fireflies’ light that dance, flashing bright, in their courtship rite. The bats rise in flight with sound as their sight. The full moon swims white through velvety night. I watch with delight and settle to write. 4/26/2017 For contest: Rhymers’ delight - Internal Monorhyme Sponsored by John Hamilton

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Line Gauthier

Date: 7/26/2018 9:14:00 PM

A perfect setting for writing, Agnes... most places in nature are...

Harshita Chaudhary

Date: 11/12/2017 8:43:00 AM

Beautiful. Congrats.

Joseph May

Date: 4/30/2017 4:39:00 PM

Congrats on your win Agnes

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/30/2017 3:42:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your win, Agnes. Again, I enjoyed your wonderful imagery and rhythm in your poem. Hugs, Sandra

John Hamilton

Date: 4/30/2017 2:30:00 PM

Great write Agnes, you have the ability to try a more difficult rhyme, try not to repeat words eg white 2x light 4x and you will place higher, thanks so much for the entry!

John Hamilton
Date: 5/1/2017 7:34:00 PM

This is really good now!

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/30/2017 5:39:00 PM

Thank you, John. I can't believe I didn't edit out the first "white"; that was meant to be "bright" and I never fixed it in the posted version. My apology. I know I should not repeat! Will do better next time.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/30/2017 5:39:00 PM

I am changing it now, anyway, because it bugs me.

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/28/2017 6:27:00 PM

This poem is light and refreshing, your emotions and wit wrap themselves around your words and the effect is magic to the reader. Emile.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/30/2017 8:27:00 AM

Thanks for your kind comment, Emile.

Joseph May

Date: 4/28/2017 3:40:00 PM

Very nicely done Agnes...best wishes

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/30/2017 8:27:00 AM

Thanks!

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 4/27/2017 4:49:00 PM

it is great that you decide after the beautiful scene.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/30/2017 8:26:00 AM

Thank you.

Shubham Kamble

Date: 4/27/2017 6:56:00 AM

Wonderful write :) Good luck for the contest !!

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/27/2017 7:15:00 AM

Thank you, Shubham.

Darren White

Date: 4/27/2017 2:40:00 AM

What a great monorhyme, it's perfectly flowing as if there's not difficulty maintaining this the ay you did. Good luck in the contest :)

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM

Thank you, Darren.

John Michaels

Date: 4/27/2017 2:18:00 AM

Delightful piece, Agnes! I hope to see it place high in the contest! Good luck. Regards, John.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM

Thanks, John. I hope it does well.

Carole Duet

Date: 4/27/2017 12:19:00 AM

Lovely write, Agnes. So imaginative! Good luck in the contest.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM

Thank you, Carole.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2017 11:06:00 PM

Replying to your reply: Yes, that is what makes Soup a crazy POT!!

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM

Yes, that is true. It is a soup with many different flavors.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/26/2017 10:16:00 PM

Lovely! :) 7 xomo!

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/27/2017 7:13:00 AM

Thanks, Maureen.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2017 6:00:00 PM

GREAT job with the internal rhyme, Agnes. Sure to do well in the contest.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/26/2017 6:31:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea. I don't know about contests; a number of poems that I was pretty sure should do well did not place at all... so I'm not holding my breath.