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Twilight

The blackbirds alight at their sleeping site
as bushes ignite with fireflies’ light
that dance, flashing bright, in their courtship rite.
The bats rise in flight with sound as their sight.
The full moon swims white through velvety night.
I watch with delight and settle to write.

4/26/2017
For contest: Rhymers’ delight - Internal Monorhyme
Sponsored by John Hamilton

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Line Gauthier Date: 7/26/2018 9:14:00 PM A perfect setting for writing, Agnes... most places in nature are... Login to Reply

Harshita Chaudhary Date: 11/12/2017 8:43:00 AM Beautiful. Congrats. Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 4/30/2017 4:39:00 PM Congrats on your win Agnes Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 4/30/2017 3:42:00 PM Back to congratulate you on your win, Agnes. Again, I enjoyed your wonderful imagery and rhythm in your poem. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply

John Hamilton Date: 4/30/2017 2:30:00 PM Great write Agnes, you have the ability to try a more difficult rhyme, try not to repeat words eg white 2x light 4x and you will place higher, thanks so much for the entry! Login to Reply John Hamilton Date: 5/1/2017 7:34:00 PM This is really good now! Agnes Krampe Date: 4/30/2017 5:39:00 PM Thank you, John. I can't believe I didn't edit out the first "white"; that was meant to be "bright" and I never fixed it in the posted version. My apology. I know I should not repeat! Will do better next time. Agnes Krampe Date: 4/30/2017 5:39:00 PM I am changing it now, anyway, because it bugs me.

Emile Pinet Date: 4/28/2017 6:27:00 PM This poem is light and refreshing, your emotions and wit wrap themselves around your words and the effect is magic to the reader. Emile. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/30/2017 8:27:00 AM Thanks for your kind comment, Emile.

Joseph May Date: 4/28/2017 3:40:00 PM Very nicely done Agnes...best wishes Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/30/2017 8:27:00 AM Thanks!

Afolabi Muideen Date: 4/27/2017 4:49:00 PM it is great that you decide after the beautiful scene. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/30/2017 8:26:00 AM Thank you.

Shubham Kamble Date: 4/27/2017 6:56:00 AM Wonderful write :) Good luck for the contest !! Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:15:00 AM Thank you, Shubham.

Darren White Date: 4/27/2017 2:40:00 AM What a great monorhyme, it's perfectly flowing as if there's not difficulty maintaining this the ay you did. Good luck in the contest :) Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM Thank you, Darren.

John Michaels Date: 4/27/2017 2:18:00 AM Delightful piece, Agnes! I hope to see it place high in the contest! Good luck. Regards, John. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM Thanks, John. I hope it does well.

Carole Duet Date: 4/27/2017 12:19:00 AM Lovely write, Agnes. So imaginative! Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM Thank you, Carole.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/26/2017 11:06:00 PM Replying to your reply: Yes, that is what makes Soup a crazy POT!! Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:14:00 AM Yes, that is true. It is a soup with many different flavors.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 4/26/2017 10:16:00 PM Lovely! :) 7 xomo! Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:13:00 AM Thanks, Maureen.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/26/2017 6:00:00 PM GREAT job with the internal rhyme, Agnes. Sure to do well in the contest. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/26/2017 6:31:00 PM Thanks, Andrea. I don't know about contests; a number of poems that I was pretty sure should do well did not place at all... so I'm not holding my breath.

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 4/26/2017 2:32:00 PM Hello Angnes, you paint a pretty picture in your poetry. It made me feel I was in that setting. You get a7 Nice to meet you. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:13:00 AM Thank you for visiting, Darlene.

Sandra Haight Date: 4/26/2017 2:02:00 PM Wonderful, Agnes! So full of imagery with excellent flow and well-chosen rhymes. Well done and perfect for the contest! Best wishes. 7 Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:12:00 AM Thank you, Sandra.

Chris Green Date: 4/26/2017 1:14:00 PM Really nice Agnes. I love the bats using sounds as their sight. Best wishes in the contest my friend. Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:12:00 AM Thanks, Chris - the cool thing is that bats really DO :)

Jan Allison Date: 4/26/2017 1:05:00 PM what a wonderful descriptive monorhyme which flows so beautifully:- good luck in the contest Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Agnes Krampe Date: 4/27/2017 7:11:00 AM Thank you, Jan.