Twilight

exploring mind and soul hands travel slowly a path they know love lingers in twilight

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Stephen Parker

Date: 1/20/2011 12:04:00 PM

You have kung fued the Haiku formula. But a very well-written, substantive verse! Intersting that you write about love making from a female perspective. You began by exploring the metaphysical qualities of the mind and soul in the first verse. In the second verse, you caress the physical parts of your lover. You are a good boy. Your women have trained you well. Enjoyed your thoughts on love making.

Christine A Kysely

Date: 1/20/2011 7:26:00 AM

Vey Nicely Written...Not sure about the syllable count....Christine

Nick Bagnall

Date: 1/20/2011 5:56:00 AM

Worth bending the haiku rules for, very sensual poem. well done.