Triste

she sits alone on the hotel balcony, 
looking out at the city,  
chin on knees, 
arms hugging legs,  
compacting herself into a hush. 

but the stillness hides movements. 

within her eyes water glides slowly in,  
laps her retinas, 
borrows what it finds there, recedes, 
carries it in to sea.  

the quiet water drifts what she sees 
to distant shores washed by indigo tides,   
around lonely atolls,  
into disenchanted lagoons,  
and finally back again,  
returning it, 
sodden with a long-neglected disappointment,  
to the brown eyes,  

along with a tinge of blue.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 10/16/2018 2:34:00 AM
very powerful poetry, lovely poem.
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Bernard Chan
Date: 10/16/2018 3:50:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Arthur. Much appreciated.
Date: 10/15/2018 9:39:00 AM
Mesmerizing piece Bernard. Sad and gorgeous. xomo
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Bernard Chan
Date: 10/15/2018 5:09:00 PM
Thank you again, Maureen :)
Date: 10/15/2018 4:13:00 AM
There is a soft, tragic, lull to this poem, that makes her feel berift. Nicely penned, my friend. Great job.
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Bernard Chan
Date: 10/15/2018 8:40:00 AM
That was pretty much the effect I was going for. Thank you so much, Caren!
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