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Tried To Save Me-Bohemian Rhapsody

I knew not of raptured pleasure, just remorse beyond measure- I sought not moments of mystery, as my iniquity went down in history. Problems began the moment you died, they all blamed me and I just defied - I promised I'd never seen you before, but we all know that I broke down and lied. Now I deserve the worst of abhor- I killed you.... wanted to save me... oh, how I tried. I chose Bohemian Rhapsody July 29, 2017

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Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/4/2017 12:38:00 PM

piercing work so beautifully quilled, lou... congrats on your fine win!.. soup mail and huggs

Silent One

Date: 9/4/2017 8:35:00 AM

Great take on the contest luluu... but one can't blame themselves for another death.. Well written.. congratulations on your placement..

Eric Boddie

Date: 8/1/2017 10:35:00 AM

as always laura, you impress....from the Spiritual mind to the physical flesh....and if I'm not back here this time tomorrow....many families will feel my sorrow....because only through death can we ever fall....which is the reason I sometimes wish I had never been born at all.....awesome write ms loo....;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2017 6:56:00 PM

Laura, I love this song and you have done a good job interpreting it. I want to do American Pie. Gotta think of an angle!! Soupmail.

Russell Sivey

Date: 7/29/2017 6:23:00 AM

Awesome! You have astounded me by your creative write! I surely loved reading it this morning! What a brilliant piece you have written! Great Work!!