Notes About The Poem

Trembles and Thrills

A girl's first date; she's sixteen.
The older boy is a prize.
He flutters hearts with green eyes -
so suave and worldly-wise

The young Adonis picks up
 Sweet Sixteen; he has a plan -
they go to the county fair.
Thrills are guaranteed!

After a few scary rides,
She trembles with excitement.
Soon in the chill of the night,
he will make his move.

When atop the ferris wheel,
he wraps one arm around her.
As she snuggles into him,
her heart is racing.

For a moment the wheel stops,
and their lips meet in a kiss.
Oh, the thrill of youth's passion!
Nothing else compares.

Written Dec. 8, 2015
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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December 20, 2015 at 12:47 AM
Sweet Andrea, awesome win. Linda
A  Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 2:09 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your nice win. SKAT
Scars Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 11:57 AM
Andrea, perfect for the theme, congrats on your win! :)-*smiles*
Tor Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 5:58 AM
OOH LA LA Andrea. Full of thrills and kisses. Congratulations on your win!!
May Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 5:31 AM
So romantic ...Congrats on your win Andrea
Wigley Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 2:55 AM
Oh, to go back to those halogen days of young love, Andrea. Now if we went on the ride, I'd probably drop my wallet and she'd get a nose bleed..... A nice depiction, Andrea, well done. Viv x
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 2:34 AM
Andie, *** Lovely romantic date with TREMBLES and THRILLS, congratulations! Thank you for participating!~hugs and smiles, Olive Eloisa =`)
Walker Avatar
December 14, 2015 at 7:12 PM
Love you sis and how you bring to life young loves thrill.
Richards Avatar
December 12, 2015 at 7:58 PM
I think I recognize this scene from "East of Eden"...(love that scene, by the way!)...and love your poem! Well done!
May Avatar
December 10, 2015 at 5:33 PM
Wonderful write Andrea...best wishes
Martin Avatar
December 10, 2015 at 5:33 PM
Right,Andrea, nothing else compares!
Smith Avatar
December 10, 2015 at 3:33 PM
It's so romantic but I can't think of it because my oldest daughter is 16
Godwin Avatar
December 10, 2015 at 10:49 AM
When I thought of doing this contest, my mind went to carnival rides, too - I enjoyed this, it is so well written and darn cute! CayCay
Lamoureux Avatar
December 10, 2015 at 8:59 AM
I remember it like it was yesterday! You capture it well.
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