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"this poem is not about what is written, but what is not written. . . " Firmly rooted, I stand in this desert of nothingness Facing your wrath and warmth with equal willingness Life around me moves ahead, passes me by Scorpions, birds and occasionally a butterfly You gave me all the power to bear fruit, nurture and shade Yet my entire life passes standing stoically in one place The wind nudges me, taunts me as it blows I still stand there unmoved, head shamefully bowed The leaves that greened with me too flew away Eloped with the breeze in autumn, left me betrayed The fruits that I had worked hard to bear The flowers that graced my wavy hair With time, these too were snatched away from me, No reason why I still stand barren and empty. My bark reverberates with the melancholy of my soul Waiting for lightning to wield its shining sword. Afroze Ali Contest name: 'The unwritten' 5th July 2011

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Date: 4/15/2013 6:16:00 PM
ali, your poem, Heaven's Grace was so beautiful. I hope you might enter it in my current Faves contest if you can do it in time. Luv, Andra
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Date: 7/11/2011 11:56:00 PM
great Great!! Write!! oh beautiful one of my favs!!
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Date: 7/8/2011 6:50:00 PM
Afroze, I am coming back to this one and reading it again while finally seeing all the winners of this contest and I think I must have been tired at the tme I'd read this before because this is really outstanding and deserved an even higher place than it got. (reminds me of a poem of mine on the same theme!) luv, Andrea
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Date: 7/8/2011 6:36:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS! with the placement...happy for you...*_*junjun
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Date: 7/8/2011 12:48:00 AM
This is truly beautiful and so haunting. This fresh take is one of my favourites because of its rawness and brutal perspective. I could read this a dozen times and focus on a different image each time. Well done! Congrats! Cyndi
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Date: 7/7/2011 1:39:00 PM
AWESEOME!!!!!! Sensational observation of the poto, giving it great death and meaning. Many cograts on your SUPER WIN, Lainie
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Date: 7/6/2011 7:04:00 AM
Quite the beautiful rhyme Afroze. Congratulations on your win. Agape, Moses
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Date: 7/6/2011 5:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Constance's "The Unwritten" contest Ali. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/5/2011 11:33:00 PM
A beautiful rhyme Afroze. Many congrats.
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Date: 7/5/2011 9:17:00 PM
wow this is lovely. So happy to see it won in the contest!
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Date: 7/5/2011 2:50:00 PM
My congratulations on this win in the contest, Afroze
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Date: 7/5/2011 1:24:00 PM
… swinging cheers to you for the amazing award, afroze!! :) huggs
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Date: 7/5/2011 12:47:00 PM
Congrats Afroze on your wonderful win with this dynamic write luv..enjoy ..excellent..
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Date: 7/5/2011 10:22:00 AM
What a way to start my week, reading the words that are flowing from your soul. May you find the inspiration each day to continue writing and sharing your wonderful poetry with us Ali. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/5/2011 10:18:00 AM
Congratulations Ali on your win in my contest with this splendid poem~~
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Date: 7/5/2011 4:21:00 AM
Now this is a different approach to the contest photo.Everyone is writing about that girl.Beautiful personification here....Best wishes....thanks for visiting my poem.
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