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Treacherous Ground

She steps out into the wild of the moor, sighing into the breeze. From her love, not a body nor ashes, And a funeral that could only be poor. A song on her lips, to wash away her grief, she stumbles, and she falls, as the ground beneath her somehow dips. As the earth begins to swallow her slowly, she simply cannot find a way to care, or even cry out to something holy, as the land around her has teeth to bare. She knows what has happened, and smiles in relief. As the land swallows her, she can let go of her grief.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 5/30/2016 5:30:00 PM
Eliana, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 5/30/2016 7:17:00 PM
Hey thanks! I'll take a look at your poems, definitely! They sound good, and thanks to all of you- you're all so fabulous!
Date: 5/30/2016 12:07:00 PM
Sad and deep, Eliana, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**
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