Silent One Poet Free verse

Trapped

Since a young age,
I've learned how to see 
beyond the darkness -
but what has become of me?

Surrounded by blackness
and eerie silence,
gasping for air,
I can't move,
feeling lifeless and helpless.

What is happening to me -
is this paralysis of sleep  
or a lucid nightmare.

Cramped for space
placed in a horizontal rectangle -
I can't feel my heart beat.

I'm afraid to close my eyes,
because then, no one will rescue me

maybe it's better if I fall asleep.

It's getting cold,
I can hear raindrops -
or is it my mother's tears.

I try to scream for her,
but the tongue is silent.

Am I hallucinating
or are they my father's hands

help me dad, help me...

Simple Musing
17 October 2020

Wanted to leave this poem open to interpretation.

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Clara Alao November 19, 2020 at 7:08 AM WOW!!!!

Emilia James October 22, 2020 at 11:17 AM First image I got was of someone in their closing moments of life before dying and father hands there ready to guide and support him over to the other side. (Hope I am not being to depressing) but then I also got images of someone placed in a coma near death, trapped but their senses alert unsure what is happening. Emilia Silent One October 24, 2020 at 12:50 PM That could be on understanding... Thank you..

Caren Krutsinger October 19, 2020 at 1:33 PM This reminds me of screaming "mommy daddy mommy daddy mommy daddy mommy daddy!" when I was a child, in the throes of a nightmare. I had not thought of this for a long time. So thaink you! Silent One October 19, 2020 at 2:46 PM That is one aspect I wanted to portray, thank you..

Kim Rodrigues October 19, 2020 at 1:23 PM Wow! Great emotion. A seriousness when you call out for mom and dad. Silent One October 19, 2020 at 2:46 PM Thank you..

Kelly Hitchcock October 18, 2020 at 7:00 AM Carl Jung would have loved this! Silent One October 18, 2020 at 8:53 AM Thank you...

Maria Williams October 18, 2020 at 1:29 AM What an amazing music choice, did the music influence the poem or was the poem written first, either way both gelled brilliantly. I was reminded of another poem called Dream Called Life" by Pedro Calderon de la Barca. The scene is immediately set with one word - dream. After that, we enter into a swirl of emotion as the writer tells us a story. Your poem too was set with one word 'Trapped' immediately piquing the readers interest. You are indeed a Master Writer. ....Maria Hugs Silent One October 18, 2020 at 9:03 AM The poem came before and I searched for music after.. Thank you Maria..

Evelyn Judy Buehler October 17, 2020 at 10:02 PM It seems to me like the despairing cry of one who is overwhelmed, wounded and trapped. Fascinating and gripping. Silent One October 18, 2020 at 8:59 AM Yes, I wanted to create a sense of despair... thank you..

Angela Crabtree October 17, 2020 at 8:22 PM Sounds like you're in in a casket. I'm just not sure if you're buried alive or you're already dead and you're a lost spirit trying to figure out what to do. This is an excellent poem, Silent One! ~Angie Silent One October 18, 2020 at 8:59 AM That was one of the images I wanted to portray. My mother crying and my dead father reaching out to me... Thank you Angela..

Brandy Nicole October 17, 2020 at 6:08 PM Your thoughts are emotional. Being "Trapped" can mean so many different things, depending on the situation. "Feeling lifeless and helpless" That is sad and scary, all at the same time. ~ Brandy Silent One October 18, 2020 at 8:56 AM Thank you Brandy..

Malabika Ray Choudhury October 17, 2020 at 5:37 PM Compelling write! I am sure, there will be many interpretations - and that's probably your intention as a poet. "I can hear raindrops - or is it my mother's tears." brilliant imagery! Silent One October 18, 2020 at 8:54 AM That was my intention, Thank you..

Alexis Y. October 17, 2020 at 1:58 PM WoW!Silent, What a well written compelling write. It feels so real. It seems as though a young woman has endured a horrific trauma. And she has nightmares and suffers from post traumatic stress disorder. She crying out for help, could the one who’s supposed to love and protect her be her perpetrator? That’s my take on it. As always excellent job my friend. Enjoy the rest of your day:-) Alexis Tansy Roekaerts October 17, 2020 at 2:47 PM That's my take too. The way you write makes it more vivid and real than a more explicit narrative. Genius Silent One October 17, 2020 at 2:35 PM That is a real interesting take on this poem and that is the beauty of poetry... Thank you..

Walter Rego October 17, 2020 at 1:26 PM The pain of wanting to sleep but the hunger to stay awake. Beautiful. Silent One October 17, 2020 at 2:34 PM That can be a real pain... Thank you Walter

Victor Buhagiar October 17, 2020 at 1:14 PM You are a master poet. Plenty of interpretations. I would put it as a nightmare of someone in a coma. ~~ Silent One October 17, 2020 at 2:33 PM I would not say I am a master poet, but thank you for the compliment..

John Hamilton October 17, 2020 at 12:41 PM Enjoyed this one SO, can't say I relate but I felt the despair, the plaintive cry for help, it must be awful, so, well done, mission accomplished! Silent One October 17, 2020 at 2:32 PM Its a good thing you cant, as its not a nice feeling to feel trapped... Thank you..

Jolynn Haynes October 17, 2020 at 12:19 PM Hauntingly real. Silent One October 17, 2020 at 2:30 PM Thank you..

Heidi Sands October 17, 2020 at 10:15 AM Wow, very powerful Silent One! Well written! :) Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:06 PM Thank you

Mystic Rose Rose October 17, 2020 at 10:12 AM so many images incite the mind when I read this Silent One, a mans heart is an ocean, dear poet. Indeed a good one. ! Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:08 PM Thank you Pixie..

Peter Dome October 17, 2020 at 10:01 AM I somewhat relate to this deep well written write.Very emotional and pretty scary. but as always, exceptionally well done and expressed. Really like iy. Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:09 PM Thank you Peter... Glad you felt the poem

Frederic Parker October 17, 2020 at 9:06 AM interesting poem with many paths to follow from one's interpretation Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:10 PM Thank you . That was what I was trying to create

Charmaine Chircop October 17, 2020 at 8:04 AM It's a terrible place to be in..The place where nobody finds us..Nobody hears.. This poem made me think of moments when we feel really alone,We feel like nobody can reach to us.A dangerous place where we believe that we wouldnt be saved..but somehow..Somebody will save us..and if nobody will..We can always save ourselves from the pitch black darkness.Heartwrenching S.One Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:11 PM That was the feeling I wanted to create... Feeling trapped and of despair

Lyaioz Mannie October 17, 2020 at 7:42 AM this is effortlessly soft. But how do you write like this? Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:11 PM I have no idea... Thank you

Lyaioz Mannie October 17, 2020 at 7:39 AM this is effortlessly soft. But how do you write like this?

Besma Riabi Dziri October 17, 2020 at 7:36 AM What's been lived swinging between reality and nightmares displaying a state of torment.. a need of relief.. of a time of peace.. of a sense of Love.. We always try to decode our nightmares beyond comprehensionare as the reader always decrypts what is beyond the surface of the poet's words and sometimes what is beyond the poet's intentions.. Great musing, Silent One! My deepest regards and blessings. Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:11 PM Thank you Besma

Tom Cunningham October 17, 2020 at 7:06 AM Painful memories of the past often surface suffocating us and we wonder is this reality. Thought provoking verse S. O. Tom Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:12 PM You are right... Thank you

Energy Mavaza October 17, 2020 at 6:11 AM Ow boy Silent One October 17, 2020 at 12:12 PM Thanks

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