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Town Children

A town knows well its children, so busy midst the spin
     To grant them lively comfort, with its never-ending din

A jungle of cement and steel that never stops to gasp
     Pulsing with their fiery dreams so tight within its clasp

Mean streets to teach of wisdom so vital to this world
     A window with realities thru which they're often hurled

This wealth of opportunities is offered them, although
     Many wonders still remain, that they may never know

No peak on the horizon to bespeak the blush of morn
     No peepers in the evening air, as spring is gently born

No moaning of the evergreens to whisper to the wind
     No softly-silent snowfall as winter's moon has grinned

No perfect pastel break-of-day upon a meadow's dew
     And not a single cricket song to say goodnight to you

Town children love the bustle, the neon glow and cars
     Yet deep I cede them pity for they are short the stars

But kids are kids, incredibly, with so much love to give
     Each one a miracle, unique, no matter where they live.





Written and submitted on October 5, 2019
For the "Town Children" Poetry Contest
Julia Ward, Sponsor.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Poteet Avatar
October 18, 2019 at 10:12 AM
Ponderous piece, Greg. Brings to mind a friend who boasts that he was raised on concrete and asphalt. Congrats on your win; Julie is a great judge.
Mcgee Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 7:45 PM
A wonderful and positive poem. Congrats Greg on your top win.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 12, 2019 at 9:00 AM
Congrats on your placement Greg.
May Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 10:31 PM
Well penned, I like how you ended it, Congrats on your win Greg
Squyres Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 11:28 AM
Each verse is so well formed in words !! Congratulations on your win !!
Faulkner Avatar
October 10, 2019 at 5:21 PM
'for they are short the stars' - my favorite line amidst many great lines, congratulations, Gregory!
Medders Tobechi Avatar
October 10, 2019 at 4:21 PM
Thought provoking rhymes well done. Congratulations.
Hamilton Avatar
October 10, 2019 at 2:49 PM
Whew you made it in the top, in this tough contest, I had a feeling this would win!
Watson Avatar
October 10, 2019 at 1:16 PM
I really enjoyed reading this,Greg and particularly appreciated the unexpected contrasting change of scene in the last few verses and the positive ending.
Awtry Avatar
October 10, 2019 at 1:04 PM
"they are short the stars'... You said everything so well... Giving the town its kudos and pointing out its limitations and then the positive note at the close. Harmonic balance. Many Congratulations!
Hamilton Avatar
October 5, 2019 at 1:02 PM
Another great write, nice to see you writing couplets, it suits you well. Don't know what to say about the contest, but it's a winner to me!
Krutsinger Avatar
October 5, 2019 at 11:06 AM
Good luck in the contest. The poem speaks for you, and the speaking is phenomenally done. So you need not worry. Well done indeed! Loved the last two lines especially.
Mcintosh Avatar
October 5, 2019 at 6:26 AM
This is a wonderful entry - and so true. Bless you always, Gina
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