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Towards the Waterfall

She wound her way as was her wont,
Along the treacherous path
Adorned by rock, and roots and ferns,
Elated as if there was a fire dance in the breeze,
Towards the lake and the waterfall.

Soon she arrived at the appointed tryst.
Beneath the low cliffs, the small lake beckoned.
     From above torrents of water 
     Tumbled down, cascading into the languid lake.
     How cool the waterfall as heat poured down
     Into the blazing valley 

All was quiet except for 
Dancing kingfishers hurtling here and there,
And the sonorous symphonic melody
Of the falling waters from above.
Suddenly a mist swirled momentarily 
Around the edge of the lake where she stood.
She blessed the mist with all her might.

Unexpectedly he rose from beneath the waters,
Giving her a delightful sudden fright.
     Her love had arrived in a shimmering enchantment,
     Splashing water, causing quick fading rainbows
     As he treaded the water of the small lake.

In that mist, they embraced, a caress that felt
Like a soft breeze intoning a wistful song,
A sonata of dreams and yearns and love.

Suddenly he disappeared as the mist lifted.
The kingfishers made a higher pitched sound.
Sadness engulfed her as the sound of the water
Seems to increase in its fall.  Tears fell 
Down her haggard cheeks, but she stood tall,
She stood in the cool water.  Her wet white sari
Clung to her.  She sobbed, then stopped.
     As water from above hit the lake 
     A rainbow formed.  Finally, she felt at peace.


23 November 2021

Theme No. 6:  Waterfall
''W'' New Poems Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France
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Goldsmith Avatar
November 30, 2021 at 8:37 AM
Congratulations on your win with your "Towards the Waterfall" write. A wonderful story/write and picture. Have a blessed day with your win...............
La France Avatar
November 29, 2021 at 1:57 PM
Victor, congratulations on your Second Place in in my "W" New Poems Contest. Your poem is wonderful and I love the image used also ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
Buhagiar Avatar
November 29, 2021 at 11:11 PM
Thank you for all the placements you gave me. Blessings.
Allison Avatar
November 26, 2021 at 7:25 AM
Dropping back with my congratulations on your win Victor, hugs jan xx
Seeker Avatar
November 25, 2021 at 8:15 PM
Back again to congratulate you on your win, Victor!
Ball Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 9:09 AM
WoW! What a good beginning to a short story. The imagery is perfect and the poem leaves you wanting more. Good Stuff. God Bless, JB
Jayasankar Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:52 AM
Beautiful pen, wonderful imagination and rich imagery Victor...Best wishes in the contest...God bless...~ Ani
Poet Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:51 AM
Victor, your poetry is terrific. The beat acts as a story's soundtrack. It was a beautiful narrative from beginning to end, with a happy conclusion to boot. This is one of my faves.
Daniel Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 4:55 AM
Wonderful writing, Victor, none can match your imagery in such fluent free verse :)
Gilmour Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 12:12 AM
Oh wow this is truly a winner dear Victor such stunning imagery. A beautiful poem. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
Seeker Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 11:08 PM
Surreal, beautifully penned Victor, good luck for the contest
Skelly Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 11:07 PM
What a lovely entry into the contest, so enjoyable to read...Delice
Edmonds  Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 7:08 PM
Beautiful poetry Victor, Sir Walter Scott’s ‘Lady of the Lake’ comes to mind in this wonderful write… Belle
Roper Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 5:02 PM
Very nice soothing verse, with great imagery. Enjoyed reading. Hugs eve
Buehler Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 1:21 PM
An enchanting story, Victor. I delighted in the buoyant ending. :=)
Rodrigues Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 10:33 AM
Exciting along with fantastic imagery!
Michael Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 10:24 AM
Lovely imagery...Well written too
Cunningham Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 8:56 AM
Reads like a romantic fairytale Victor. Good luck in the contest. Tom
Allison Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 6:55 AM
What an enchanting piece Victor, hugs jan xx
Pandit Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 6:20 AM
A story resonating in rhythms of the waterfall. Intriguing from start to finish--you weave emotions in romantic mystery. Excellent as always, Victor.
Y. Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 5:45 AM
WoW! Victor, You have penned a good entry for the contest. I found it be intriguing, enchanting, mysterious, and sad. However, I did like the upbeat ending. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day my friend:-) Alexis
George Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 4:17 AM
An ethereal dream like scene is created by your masterly pen strokes, Victor ! The placid lake, the symphonic melody of falling waters, the sudden mist... all are beautiful images !
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