Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

Tommy Tortoise

Tommy Tortoise was so lonely and looking for romance
His feet were large and plodding but he’d love the chance to dance
He sees a sign for line dancing
The thought of this made his heart sing
Tommy slowly crept into the hall
People were dancing so he watched them swing
But sitting in a corner was a lady tortoise looking sad
Tommy went over to her, she smiled and then looked glad
They chatted for a while and it was very plain to see
That their dancing days were simply not meant to be
Arm in arm they plodded off and fixed up another date
Now Tommy is no longer looking because he’s found his soul mate

Jan Allison
17th July 2014

One of three poems written for Animals Alive Contest  
this poem has not been submitted

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Robin Davis July 24, 2014 at 8:04 AM Jan What a fun and clever write. It made me chuckle and put a smile on my face. The thought of two turtles falling in love like people is awesome. Thank you for the wonderful comment on my Sorrowed Past poem. Jan Allison July 24, 2014 at 8:06 AM Thanks for dropping by Robin I truly hope your poem was fiction. Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich July 22, 2014 at 12:18 AM awwww, this is adorable. I think it could do just as well as your other animal poems in that contest. I can't believe how you are taking to these kinds of poems. I can't even do ONE for some reason, and you have three? I used to do them for contests here a long time ago. DAng, I wish she would let us use oldies!! Jan Allison July 22, 2014 at 3:09 AM I was sitting in a pub last Tuesday - drinking orange juice I hasten to add LOL - waiting for a band to come on and decided to get my little notepad out and wham 3 poems appeared. My dream is to have my Lenny the lizard poem published as a children's book- maybe when my life less stressful i will get round to chasing this dream. Hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux July 19, 2014 at 11:53 AM My pleasure Jan. Hugs Rick. Jan Allison July 19, 2014 at 11:57 AM Wish there were more people actively commenting Richard its not the same now:-( Hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux July 19, 2014 at 11:37 AM Ha ha. This is delightful. Instead of "watched them all" consider "watched them swing" it keeps the rhyme flowing. I so enjoyed your animal series! Jan Allison July 19, 2014 at 11:38 AM thanks Richard I am so pleased you enjoyed these writes- am getting lots of comments on Peter penguin - will dedicate my win to you if I am placed. will change the words - thank you for your advice. Hugs Jan xxx

Matthew Anish July 17, 2014 at 11:01 PM Nice personification here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison July 18, 2014 at 3:52 AM Thanks for dropping by Matthew. Hugs Jan xx

Jim Carpenter July 17, 2014 at 9:45 PM Nice rhyming! Jan Allison July 18, 2014 at 3:51 AM Thanks JIm. Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance July 17, 2014 at 5:47 PM Aww sweet. nothing is as hard a turtle shell when he is in love..another cute story jan :) i loved them all! :) :) Jan Allison July 17, 2014 at 5:49 PM I know you like turtles I remember your necklace:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charmaine Chircop July 17, 2014 at 4:10 PM Aw what a happy ending for this Tommy Tortoise :.).A very sweet poem frolm a sweet lady. Jan Allison July 17, 2014 at 4:13 PM This is the third one I wrote for the animals alive contest and i was persuaded to change the one i originally entered for peter penguin. So pleased you enjoyed the poem. Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith July 17, 2014 at 3:27 PM Another great one Jan...Does this fit in the turtle contest rules? ....I love all your animal stories....hugs Tim Jan Allison July 17, 2014 at 3:50 PM :-) xx Tim Smith July 17, 2014 at 3:35 PM You guys both make life more enjoyable for me sweets Jan Allison July 17, 2014 at 3:33 PM I toyed with it Tim, I'm not sure but I've had fun with the three poems. Richard encouraged me to change my entry to the penguin one not the dormouse one - will see - am happy with them all to be honest. Thanks for you support without you and Casarah this place would be a lonelier site for many of us. Hugs Jan xx