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Tommy Tortoise

Tommy Tortoise was so lonely and looking for romance His feet were large and plodding but he’d love the chance to dance He sees a sign for line dancing The thought of this made his heart sing Tommy slowly crept into the hall People were dancing so he watched them swing But sitting in a corner was a lady tortoise looking sad Tommy went over to her, she smiled and then looked glad They chatted for a while and it was very plain to see That their dancing days were simply not meant to be Arm in arm they plodded off and fixed up another date Now Tommy is no longer looking because he’s found his soul mate Jan Allison 17th July 2014 One of three poems written for Animals Alive Contest this poem has not been submitted

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Robin Davis

Date: 7/24/2014 8:04:00 AM

Jan What a fun and clever write. It made me chuckle and put a smile on my face. The thought of two turtles falling in love like people is awesome. Thank you for the wonderful comment on my Sorrowed Past poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 8:06:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Robin I truly hope your poem was fiction. Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/22/2014 12:18:00 AM

awwww, this is adorable. I think it could do just as well as your other animal poems in that contest. I can't believe how you are taking to these kinds of poems. I can't even do ONE for some reason, and you have three? I used to do them for contests here a long time ago. DAng, I wish she would let us use oldies!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2014 3:09:00 AM

I was sitting in a pub last Tuesday - drinking orange juice I hasten to add LOL - waiting for a band to come on and decided to get my little notepad out and wham 3 poems appeared. My dream is to have my Lenny the lizard poem published as a children's book- maybe when my life less stressful i will get round to chasing this dream. Hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/19/2014 11:53:00 AM

My pleasure Jan. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/19/2014 11:57:00 AM

Wish there were more people actively commenting Richard its not the same now:-( Hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/19/2014 11:37:00 AM

Ha ha. This is delightful. Instead of "watched them all" consider "watched them swing" it keeps the rhyme flowing. I so enjoyed your animal series!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/19/2014 11:38:00 AM

thanks Richard I am so pleased you enjoyed these writes- am getting lots of comments on Peter penguin - will dedicate my win to you if I am placed. will change the words - thank you for your advice. Hugs Jan xxx

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/17/2014 11:01:00 PM

Nice personification here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 7/18/2014 3:52:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Matthew. Hugs Jan xx

Jim Carpenter

Date: 7/17/2014 9:45:00 PM

Nice rhyming!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/18/2014 3:51:00 AM

Thanks JIm. Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/17/2014 5:47:00 PM

Aww sweet. nothing is as hard a turtle shell when he is in love..another cute story jan :) i loved them all! :) :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2014 5:49:00 PM

I know you like turtles I remember your necklace:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/17/2014 4:10:00 PM

Aw what a happy ending for this Tommy Tortoise :.).A very sweet poem frolm a sweet lady.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2014 4:13:00 PM

This is the third one I wrote for the animals alive contest and i was persuaded to change the one i originally entered for peter penguin. So pleased you enjoyed the poem. Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/17/2014 3:27:00 PM

Another great one Jan...Does this fit in the turtle contest rules? ....I love all your animal stories....hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2014 3:50:00 PM

:-) xx

Tim Smith
Date: 7/17/2014 3:35:00 PM

You guys both make life more enjoyable for me sweets

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2014 3:33:00 PM

I toyed with it Tim, I'm not sure but I've had fun with the three poems. Richard encouraged me to change my entry to the penguin one not the dormouse one - will see - am happy with them all to be honest. Thanks for you support without you and Casarah this place would be a lonelier site for many of us. Hugs Jan xx