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A quick 3 min poem I wrote for my son..

I woke up to his message today "I'm sorry I haven't been a very good son lately" and it broke my heart that he had a sleepless night, thinking he is not very good. So I wrote this and sent it to him and for the first time he said " wow i love it" to a poem I've written hah! 

To my beloved Sun

O beloved Sun, that gently warms my soul,  
with soft strings of saffron and golden shine,  
I write this poem with symphonic stardust,  
when euphonious memories soar above  
clusters of sapphire butterflies,  
when rainbows reflect a glow of nostalgia.  
Allow the inked verses within  
these maternal veins~  
remind you to close your sleepless eyes,
and listen to your evergreen heart.  
Fear not the unknown that veils your vibrancy;  
there’s a song that lingers amidst tuneless skies,  
with every note inscribed with your dulcet name,  
for I pray for you in sanguine silence…  

You will always be the lyrical light  
guiding me to the reveries of redolent lilies.  
You are the poetic reason,
I breathe phrases of hope,
when the orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness…

   Love always and evermore,
        mother….
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024


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Date: 12/15/2024 7:45:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your top win in the contest!
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Date: 12/15/2024 4:23:00 AM
I like the moon melting. J :)
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Date: 12/15/2024 12:39:00 PM
Awn thank you dear J
Date: 12/14/2024 9:01:00 PM
Ink Empress! No surprise I rank you so high in this contest out of 45 entries! Sorry it took so long to judge. Long story short my laptop would not and still does not accept the poetrysoup login screen. I'm doing this all on my phone just to get it judged. Regardless this piece touches my soul and brought feelings of my own son forth. Fantastic work!
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Date: 12/15/2024 12:39:00 PM
Ah thank you so very much dear matt for the placement im truly grateful, and real life always is more important than anything else, so im sure all soupers understand the delay in judging because of technical difficulties too, grateful for the placement truly . Sending you light
Date: 9/12/2024 6:38:00 PM
I enjoyed this rapturously beautiful poem, Ink. Your son radiates joy. This is a fave for me.
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Date: 9/10/2024 1:31:00 PM
So beautiful, and I have always enjoyed the sun as metaphor for a person's son . I still am not caught up with comments, but i need to go home now!!
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Date: 9/10/2024 1:20:00 AM
Such a touching poem dear inky
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Date: 9/9/2024 5:12:00 PM
Awww...so beautiful. Dear Empress. You are such a great mother - so evident in each of your choice of words. Your son must be so proud of you - may God bless both of you with all the precious things in life! Love ~ Mala
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Date: 9/9/2024 9:52:00 PM
Thank you so very much dear mala i appreciate your kindness truly! Grateful for your support
Date: 9/9/2024 6:20:00 AM
Ahhh Dear Empress, What a great and wonderful mom that must have just made his day knowing how much you love and care about him. Perhaps more importantly, you have noticed him and all that he does and that is reflective of your character. It truly brought a tear to my eye. I wish that all parents saw the true value of each child like you have inked so well. A Family Fav for me! - Blessings, MY Dearest Friend, Daniel
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Date: 9/9/2024 9:53:00 PM
Awn thank you so much dear daniel i really do appreciate your kindness always truly
Date: 9/9/2024 4:26:00 AM
So beautiful expressed as only you could Ink Empress! I especially love the phrase, "Lyrical Light" How wonderful is that! No wonder he loved it!. I do as well xxoo
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:05:00 PM
Thank you dear mike so very much its always an honor hearing from you truly
Date: 9/9/2024 3:02:00 AM
Your love flows like an ocean with wonderful word choice, and all your poetic tools sharpened and skilled! I love this entire poem but especially these lines “ You will always be the lyrical light guiding me to the reveries of redolent lilies. You are the poetic reason, I breathe phrases of hope, when the orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness…” What a lucky son to have you as mom and what a lucky mom to have such a sweet son as to inspire such a loving poem! This is a fav!
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:13:00 PM
Im speechless after reading your comment sweet karen, and I think you would feel me deeply as a mother of a son too. I have an only child so he means the world to me. Your words touched my heart and left me heard and seen thank you for being so very kind and thoughtful appreciate you always
Date: 9/9/2024 1:54:00 AM
How caring you are to write to your son who was experiencing difficulties - especially when you must be feeling discomfort. A great tribute. May the sun shed health on all of you. Blessings.
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:21:00 PM
Thank you dear victor im always grateful for your kindness and support truly
Date: 9/8/2024 9:28:00 PM
Sweet Empress, this is incredibly sweet, moving and transformative. Which son will not be touched by these warm words, pouring out from his mother's heart! A mother's love is unconditional and her heart beats for her child. This poem will leave an indelible mark on your son's heart, I can assure. "You are the poetic reason, I breathe phrases of hope, when the orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness…" I am in love with these concluding affirmation of your love for your son and the reason behind your existence and the inspiration of all your artistic endeavors. Into my FAVE.
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:22:00 PM
Awwn sweet valsa your words always truly reassure me and comfort me lifting me up too . I appreciate you so very much!! Thank you so much
Date: 9/8/2024 4:40:00 PM
Beautiful. So much love! Wonderful words. Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:23:00 PM
Thank you so much dear robert, i appreciate your comment
Date: 9/8/2024 11:48:00 AM
So, so sweet- of course, he loved it! Beautiful writing, <3
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:23:00 PM
Awwn sweet paige thank you so much truly grateful for your kindness always
Date: 9/8/2024 11:20:00 AM
Such a vast vocabulary you have to write a poem of such a stature in only three minutes... As always great use of metaphors and light alliteration like 'sangria silence" and a very metaphorical verse in "orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness." You sound like an amazing mother who care so deep from the heart for your son, just like my mum does for me... He is lucky to have you as a mum, one who sacrifices everything for his happiness and I hope he will always be your lyrical light.
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:24:00 PM
Thank you dear silent one i appreciate your kind and thoughtfulness grateful always for your support
Date: 9/8/2024 10:02:00 AM
A heartfelt poem beautifully written I'm sure he loved it IE, Tom
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:25:00 PM
Thank you so very much dear tom appreciate your comment truly
Date: 9/8/2024 9:04:00 AM
S0 beautiful and loving ode to your son my dearest poet friend Ink. He's so lucky to have a very loving and very talented mommy like you. May God bless you both and the whole family. Thank you so much for sharing this precious treasure from your shining gold pen. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:31:00 PM
Awwn you are so sweet and thoughtful! Im truly touched by your beautiful response thank you so very much
Date: 9/8/2024 5:59:00 AM
Such a sweet and loving message to a beloved son. I'm glad he appreciates it. He's got a good mommy
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:32:00 PM
So kind of you as always thank you dear tomsz, im grateful for your support
Date: 9/8/2024 5:20:00 AM
soft strings of saffron and golden shine,.. mmmm can feel the love from the line … maternal veins~ remind you to close your sleepless eyes, and listen to your evergreen heart…. Mmm damn.. the purity of this just makes me melt papi!! You are the poetic reason, I breathe phrases of hope,.. mmmm absolute beauty!!! The bond that binds 2 hearts… the feeling love and nurture and protection is absolutely divine!!! Love this piece papi
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Date: 9/9/2024 10:34:00 PM
Papi thanks miss you
Date: 9/8/2024 5:10:00 AM
This brought tears to my eyes … so sweet and touching … love it
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Date: 9/8/2024 5:17:00 AM
His response made me cry too thank you dahlin!love u
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