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A quick 3 min poem I wrote for my son..

I woke up to his message today "I'm sorry I haven't been a very good son lately" and it broke my heart that he had a sleepless night, thinking he is not very good. So I wrote this and sent it to him and for the first time he said " wow i love it" to a poem I've written hah! 

To my beloved Sun

O beloved Sun, that gently warms my soul,  
with soft strings of saffron and golden shine,  
I write this poem with symphonic stardust,  
when euphonious memories soar above  
clusters of sapphire butterflies,  
when rainbows reflect a glow of nostalgia.  
Allow the inked verses within  
these maternal veins~  
remind you to close your sleepless eyes,
and listen to your evergreen heart.  
Fear not the unknown that veils your vibrancy;  
there’s a song that lingers amidst tuneless skies,  
with every note inscribed with your dulcet name,  
for I pray for you in sanguine silence…  

You will always be the lyrical light  
guiding me to the reveries of redolent lilies.  
You are the poetic reason,
I breathe phrases of hope,
when the orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness…

   Love always and evermore,
        mother….
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Jones Avatar
December 15, 2024 at 7:45 AM
Back to congratulate you on your top win in the contest!
Swan Avatar
December 15, 2024 at 4:23 AM
I like the moon melting. J :)
Empress Avatar
December 15, 2024 at 12:39 PM
Awn thank you dear J
Caliri Avatar
December 14, 2024 at 9:01 PM
Ink Empress! No surprise I rank you so high in this contest out of 45 entries! Sorry it took so long to judge. Long story short my laptop would not and still does not accept the poetrysoup login screen. I'm doing this all on my phone just to get it judged. Regardless this piece touches my soul and brought feelings of my own son forth. Fantastic work!
Empress Avatar
December 15, 2024 at 12:39 PM
Ah thank you so very much dear matt for the placement im truly grateful, and real life always is more important than anything else, so im sure all soupers understand the delay in judging because of technical difficulties too, grateful for the placement truly . Sending you light
Buehler Avatar
September 12, 2024 at 6:38 PM
I enjoyed this rapturously beautiful poem, Ink. Your son radiates joy. This is a fave for me.
Dietrich Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 1:31 PM
So beautiful, and I have always enjoyed the sun as metaphor for a person's son . I still am not caught up with comments, but i need to go home now!!
Mo Avatar
September 10, 2024 at 1:20 AM
Such a touching poem dear inky
Ray Choudhury Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 5:12 PM
Awww...so beautiful. Dear Empress. You are such a great mother - so evident in each of your choice of words. Your son must be so proud of you - may God bless both of you with all the precious things in life! Love ~ Mala
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 9:52 PM
Thank you so very much dear mala i appreciate your kindness truly! Grateful for your support
Rodgers Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 6:20 AM
Ahhh Dear Empress, What a great and wonderful mom that must have just made his day knowing how much you love and care about him. Perhaps more importantly, you have noticed him and all that he does and that is reflective of your character. It truly brought a tear to my eye. I wish that all parents saw the true value of each child like you have inked so well. A Family Fav for me! - Blessings, MY Dearest Friend, Daniel
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 9:53 PM
Awn thank you so much dear daniel i really do appreciate your kindness always truly
Gentile Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 4:26 AM
So beautiful expressed as only you could Ink Empress! I especially love the phrase, "Lyrical Light" How wonderful is that! No wonder he loved it!. I do as well xxoo
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:05 PM
Thank you dear mike so very much its always an honor hearing from you truly
Jones Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 3:02 AM
Your love flows like an ocean with wonderful word choice, and all your poetic tools sharpened and skilled! I love this entire poem but especially these lines “ You will always be the lyrical light guiding me to the reveries of redolent lilies. You are the poetic reason, I breathe phrases of hope, when the orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness…” What a lucky son to have you as mom and what a lucky mom to have such a sweet son as to inspire such a loving poem! This is a fav!
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:13 PM
Im speechless after reading your comment sweet karen, and I think you would feel me deeply as a mother of a son too. I have an only child so he means the world to me. Your words touched my heart and left me heard and seen thank you for being so very kind and thoughtful appreciate you always
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September 9, 2024 at 1:54 AM
How caring you are to write to your son who was experiencing difficulties - especially when you must be feeling discomfort. A great tribute. May the sun shed health on all of you. Blessings.
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:21 PM
Thank you dear victor im always grateful for your kindness and support truly
George Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 9:28 PM
Sweet Empress, this is incredibly sweet, moving and transformative. Which son will not be touched by these warm words, pouring out from his mother's heart! A mother's love is unconditional and her heart beats for her child. This poem will leave an indelible mark on your son's heart, I can assure. "You are the poetic reason, I breathe phrases of hope, when the orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness…" I am in love with these concluding affirmation of your love for your son and the reason behind your existence and the inspiration of all your artistic endeavors. Into my FAVE.
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:22 PM
Awwn sweet valsa your words always truly reassure me and comfort me lifting me up too . I appreciate you so very much!! Thank you so much
Liguori Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 4:40 PM
Beautiful. So much love! Wonderful words. Thanks for sharing.
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:23 PM
Thank you so much dear robert, i appreciate your comment
Hind Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 11:48 AM
So, so sweet- of course, he loved it! Beautiful writing, <3
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:23 PM
Awwn sweet paige thank you so much truly grateful for your kindness always
One Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 11:20 AM
Such a vast vocabulary you have to write a poem of such a stature in only three minutes... As always great use of metaphors and light alliteration like 'sangria silence" and a very metaphorical verse in "orchid moon melts into orchards of nothingness." You sound like an amazing mother who care so deep from the heart for your son, just like my mum does for me... He is lucky to have you as a mum, one who sacrifices everything for his happiness and I hope he will always be your lyrical light.
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:24 PM
Thank you dear silent one i appreciate your kind and thoughtfulness grateful always for your support
Cunningham Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 10:02 AM
A heartfelt poem beautifully written I'm sure he loved it IE, Tom
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:25 PM
Thank you so very much dear tom appreciate your comment truly
Gasun Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 9:04 AM
S0 beautiful and loving ode to your son my dearest poet friend Ink. He's so lucky to have a very loving and very talented mommy like you. May God bless you both and the whole family. Thank you so much for sharing this precious treasure from your shining gold pen. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:31 PM
Awwn you are so sweet and thoughtful! Im truly touched by your beautiful response thank you so very much
Onpaper Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 5:20 AM
soft strings of saffron and golden shine,.. mmmm can feel the love from the line … maternal veins~ remind you to close your sleepless eyes, and listen to your evergreen heart…. Mmm damn.. the purity of this just makes me melt papi!! You are the poetic reason, I breathe phrases of hope,.. mmmm absolute beauty!!! The bond that binds 2 hearts… the feeling love and nurture and protection is absolutely divine!!! Love this piece papi
Empress Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 10:34 PM
Papi thanks miss you
Rhymes Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 5:10 AM
This brought tears to my eyes … so sweet and touching … love it
Empress Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 5:17 AM
His response made me cry too thank you dahlin!love u
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