Joseph P. DiMino Poet Free verse

To Bee

To Bee or not to Bee?
Oh, not that line again!
I can hear the buzz:
At least try to bee original! 
Got to lose that bee-be thing -- 
Catchy, but a bit scratchy
(Same-old Same-old grove) – 
Cute, honeyed words, sugary,
Seductive syrup for shameless
Tongues and cords.  
Metaphorically speaking, 
We all prefer sweet lick-text 
As opposed to biting – tasting
Far more exciting. Perhaps time
To re-comb my hive
Of writing? – bee a bit more
Less refraining, or get used to
Stinging complaining….

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Joe Maverick September 30, 2026 at 2:36 PM Well conveyed Joe Dimino, Joseph P. DiMino September 30, 2026 at 3:47 PM Just a fun write. Thank you, Joe.

Valsa George September 29, 2026 at 4:30 AM "Catchy, but a bit scratchy" This made me grin. I used the Shakespearean quote, 'to be or not to be' very often. I like the way you have changed this cliched expression into a honeyed version. Dear Joe, you always think differently. Joseph P. DiMino September 29, 2026 at 10:51 AM Thank you, Valsa; I do try. Have a great writing day my friend!

CayCay Godwin September 28, 2026 at 1:44 PM I was grinning then out loud laughing when I read 're-comb.' Love the cleverness of this good time read. I can't remember the contest details so I can't speak to that, but this really is imagination on display which means you turned young while writing it. Did you know that? Joseph P. DiMino September 28, 2026 at 5:47 PM Hi CayCay; I was not consciously aware of the contest, but maybe did read other works mentioning bees, and it just seemed like a great topic to turn my creative hive loose. Ah, to bee young again! Love it. You made my day. Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2026 at 11:50 PM Stinging complaining. A great spinoff from the bee metaphor. I enjoyed this Joseph P. DiMino September 28, 2026 at 2:19 AM Hi Andrea; just a little hopefully entertaining write. Have a great writing day my friend!

Ink Empress September 27, 2026 at 12:21 PM Haha yes... originality is now lost ~ to be or not to be ... what a line, shakey left, I bet the most catchy lines are the ones that come to us naturally and we write them down: i tend to get most lines when sleeping! Awful when I cant remember them when I wake up Its always so good to read you dear Jo Hope you are doing well Sending you light always Joseph P. DiMino September 27, 2026 at 4:09 PM I keep writing material alongside the bed, and have had what you describe happen to me enough times in the past, now fearing to lose a promising thought, I have trained myself to sit-up and jot down quickly any such notion as if functioning in 2 different dimensions at the same time. And then back to sleep. Mystical experience in a sense.

Sotto Poet September 27, 2026 at 6:08 AM A playful exploration of creativity and originality, Joe. The poem cleverly uses wordplay with a humorous take on the familiar phrase, sparking a smile. Joseph P. DiMino September 27, 2026 at 9:32 AM Hi Sotto; thank you. So pleased you got a smile out of this one. I like sweets, says my waistline.

Anne-Lise Andresen September 27, 2026 at 5:38 AM - Joe, "Kind words are like dripping honey, sweet to the soul and healthy for the body – Proverbs 16:24." :) - hugs Joseph P. DiMino September 27, 2026 at 9:34 AM And that don't cost anything! You would think more folks would use them.... Thank you, Anne. You are very kind. Blessings.